This exhibition is presented by the artist Tyler Santiago. Tyler Santiago was born and raised in Ozone Park, New York and still resides there and studies at New York City College of technology. Santiago got the inspiration from Tom Phillips re creation of a book called the Human Document but Phillips called it âThe Humumentâ. Santiagoâs title âessence come from part of the actual book he used which was a book written by Tillie Olsen called Silences. Santiago took the word Silences and jumbled up the words to create his title. Santiago made this book into his own creation based on what he learned in his classes Eng1101 and COMD1100. His concepts come from stuff like negative and positive space and juxtaposition the overlapping of something. Santiago used basic materials like rulers, black inking pens, and black inking brush. The first piece of work of Santiagoâs book is called âsilencesâ which shows negative and positive space and has a obvious focus point with the circled word silences. The second page that has all the word blacked out except the word âofâ is called âisolationâ. On the third page is called âGeometryâ which shows negative and positive space and it shows geometric shape with a focus point where the word Literature is, and the first 3 pages are suppose to go together. The next page is called âThe Beatâ which represents a sound wave, which shows staccato. The next page titled âFlakesâ which represents variety in size. The next page called âSwirlsâ represents a pattern of legato movement. On the next page is a piece call âSwooshâ are a bunch of line and in this piece it shows movement, And on the last page Santiago wanted to show what he learned in ENG1101 of Juxtaposition, this piece of work is call âNew Yorkâ.
When mentioning titles you should italicize them. I like how you mention the technicality behind your work and use of graphic design terms but you didn’t mention the concepts. You should go deeper in the ideas of your work. I can’t really find a thesis statement here. If there is one then perhaps breaking this into paragraphs would make it easier to find it.
Brandy offers some good feedback about your work. A thesis statement will help you organize all of your ideas into an argument, rather than the list they seem to be right now. What theme does your work represent, and how is it a transformation of Olsen’s themes? Once you can identify that, you can address how you transform the pages for your Essences book project. Since this project is about half as long as it needs to be, you can certainly expand on what you wrote about each page in your project–but to do that, you will need to divide your work into paragraphs that each have a focus to support your thesis statement. Be sure to explain the effect of the words and techniques you use in creating your work. As you revise, you can also proofread to make your writing as polished as your work on the book.