Individual Inquiry project revised

While writing my individual report for the first time I had written allot of what others wanted to hear and what they wanted to know about the situation of gender gap. When I had the opportunity to write it the second time and revise  my work I added my opinion and what I wanted to speak out and what I though about the situation therefore I fixed my analysis. My analysis was what others wanted to hear and it was constantly repetitive and same as the introduction , I’ve changed it by adding my side and what I though should be changed such as how we should value women for doing the same job as men  and how women should be valued no matter then gender or race . My analysis was revised to elaborate on my thinking of the problem and not only write what I believe others would want to hear I Took a risk and spoke out more of how I felt and though was right.