In the beginning I struggled with all of the separate elements. Many of the pieces clashed together and you couldn’t tell what the focal point was. So I took out elements that weren’t needed and simplified it more so the mouth can stand out. I eventually ended up with a simpler design with a couple of flames and no weird elements.
I really like how your collages look. It reminds me of the Hannya masks from Japanese culture. in each collage, its like you’re getting progressively angrier. I do agree that the focus point in the first one are too much. The bottom collage in the other hand, is a nice fix because I’m mostly focusing on the eyebrows and mouth instead of the horns which keep the personality of the piece.