12/2 In class Revision Assignment
Sign up for Class Presentations (due 12/9, 12/11, 12/16)
*Email me if you are not in class today and you want credit for the final presentation, and I will assign you a presentation day
12/4 DUE on Open Lab: Research and Audience Assignment
Read for class: Donald Murray, “Internal Revision” (in packet)
12/9 Read for class: Donald Murray, “The Maker’s Eye”
Presentation Day 1
12/11 Presentation Day 2
12/16 DUE on Open Lab: Final Portfolios due
Presentation Day 3
12/18 Last Class
…please review your first two major assignments (Literacy Narrative and Annotated Bibliography) and look at the comments and grades on your posts. If you do not see a grade for a major assignment, and you think you uploaded the assignment, let me know NOW. If you do not see a grade, that means that I do not have record of your turning in the assignment, which means you will not get credit for the assignment.
Any questions, please let me know!
For this Unit 3 major assignment, please post a one-paragraph intro before your two messages. In your intro, please give a brief description saying why your issue is important and also a justification for why you chose your two audiences to hear your messages. Finally, say why you chose the genre (medium for your message as well as the venue of publication) for each of your audiences.
Remember to include a bibliography at the end of your assignment (using proper MLA citation) with at least five sources.
Tag the Research/Audience category when you post!
Reminder that for peer review tomorrow, you are responsible for bringing to class a TYPED and PRINTED copy of your document. You should bring one message to one of your audiences (basically, one half of the Research and Audience assignment).
Research and Audience Assignment (major assignment for Unit 3)
In this assignment, you will research an issue that you feel is important. Your job will be to identify two different audiences/communities that are impacted by your issue and then to write two different messages (one to each audience) that either persuades each audience of a particular outcome that should happen to resolve your issue OR that educates them about the dynamics of your issue. If you choose to educate your audience, think about your goal – why is education important in this context; what will new knowledge bring? Be sure to have a goal in mind when writing to each audience – what do you want to get them to do, think, or feel – and why?
You should have at least 5 references. This is a research assignment – do research to better understand your issue and what’s at stake.
Together, both messages should be 1000-1500 words.
Things to keep in mind:
• Your issue should be specific. If you are interested in researching and finding out more about immigration, for example, your issue could be a certain immigration policy that you would like to see changed and why; if your topic is vaping, you could talk about how celebrities should not endorse smoking because of its impact on teenagers.
• Your issue should be something with real consequences today – otherwise, what’s the point of you writing to your audiences?
• You should choose to write each message in a genre (email? Letter? Speech?…?) that makes sense for your audience. Be sure to write the imagined place of publication for your message to each audience.
• You should write in the tone and with the amount/type of evidence that is consistent with the genre you choose. But be sure you have at least five sources!
**Check back before each class period for daily updates**
Mon, Nov 11: Discuss Annotated Bibliography Reflection; start drafting reflection
Wed, Nov 13: Read Kristen Roupenian, “Cat Person” (in packet)
Fri, Nov 15: Reflection on Annotated Bibliography due on Open Lab (see Open Lab for more instructions)
Mon, Nov 18: Read Ta-Nahesi Coates, “Letter to My Son” (in packet)
Due in class: research topic and question
Wed, Nov 20: Workshopping Research Questions and Audience
Mon, Nov 25: Peer Review, bring one of your audience assignments to class (see Open Lab for more instructions)
Tag “Reflection” category when posting
Reflection Assignment on Annotated Bibliography Prompt, due on Open Lab (500 words):
Your final portfolio will ask you to reflect on your evolution as a writer this semester. In this Open Lab post, you are doing two reflections (you can use this insight in your final portfolio reflection too):
1.Revisit the annotated bibliography you posted on Open Lab.
a. Now, imagine that you were teaching someone how to write in your genre. What are 4-5 things that all of the sources in your genre share? You could think about things like: the tone of the writers; ways that your sources open or close; whether they use emotional appeals or reason appeals more often; what audiences they are trying to persuade…
b. What did you learn about your topic? This could be anything, but you could also think about the norms or values that your writers and/or their audiences hold—how can you see those values working?
c. What do you still want to learn about your topic?
2.What did you learn about yourself as a writer through this assignment?
a. What do you think your strengths are as a writer? What are you good at? Please be specific and provide an example. (This could be any part of the writing process, including brainstorming and imagining.)
b. In what ways would you like to continue to grow as a writer?
c. How do you think you could enact those changes? What do you need in order to do so?
Please read Colson Whitehead’s “City Limits” in our packet for class on Wednesday.
Please post your annotated bibliographies here! Re-read the prompt to make sure you’ve met the assignment (remember you only need six sources, not eight!).
Be sure to tag the “Annotated Bibliography” category when posting. And put the name of your genre in the title.
Here is your opportunity to practice the rhetorical analysis we started in class! After reading the Annotated Bibliography prompt, do some research and thinking before you decide which genre you want to become an expert on in Unit 2. Then, choose a text that falls within that genre and rhetorically analyze it in this post. (Check out the Annotated Bibliography prompt again to review the features within and surrounding your text that you should consider when doing your rhetorical analysis).
Be sure to identify your chosen genre in your post’s title. Oh–and check the “Rhetorical Analysis” category when publishing your post.
For extra credit, respond to 3 of your classmates’s posts, offering ways you think they could enrich their rhetorical analysis and/or recommending other texts within their genre that they might consider for their annotated bibliographies.
Mon, Oct 7: “Backpacks vs. Briefcases”
Wed, Oct 9: No class
**Fri, Oct 11: Open Lab assignment
Mon, Oct 14: No class
Wed, Oct 16: Classes follow Monday Schedule. 11:30-12:20: pre-writing for annotated bibliography. LIBRARY VISIT–We will meet in front of the library at 1:00pm
Mon, Oct 21: Martin Luther King, “I Have a Dream”: In class, we will practice writing summaries and continuing our practice of rhetorical analysis
Wed, Oct 23: “I Have a Dream,” cont’d.
**Mon, Oct 28: Peer Review Annotated Bibliographies. In class, bring at least 5 full annotations of your genre texts to class (review the Annotated Bibliography prompt). Please print out two copies for class today.
Wed, Oct 30: Reading TBD; students to continue working on annotated bibliographies.
**Fri, Nov 1: Annotated Bibliographies due on Open Lab
For Monday’s class, please read and be ready to discuss Laura Bolin Carroll’s “Backpacks vs. Briefcases” (which is in our packet).
Please stay tuned for more daily schedule updates!
Due Sept 18: Please post your literacy narratives!
Think of a title that encapsulates your piece. Click the “Literacy Narrative” category option when posting.
Peruse your classmates’s stories. What can we learn about reading and writing as a result of these shared pieces?
Describe a personal experience that in some way describes or enables you to say something about your relationship to reading and writing. BUT! Stick with the description of the event–we will be expanding the experience to your literacy narrative next week.
Hi! Welcome to your first online discussion! Please post your responses to Malcolm X or Sandra Cisneros here. Be sure to refer to specific passages when crafting your responses.
For help on how to post, click here: https://openlab.citytech.cuny.edu/blog/help/writing-a-post/
November 23, 2019
More Solutions Than Problems
The problem that I am presenting is on how the YouTube company wants to censor the amount of violence that some games present. Such as fighting games that have blood and gore in them, but the only reason that YouTube trying to censor those games being easily accessible to watch is because the sponsors who support YouTube wants to keep the split between what is considered adult content and what is considered kid content. So to keep the content under control YouTube decides to keep the game from being streamed by gamers accessible to everyone unless they meet the age requirement. Additionally, this may affect society to have a domino effect may occur. Where fewer views for YouTubers means less pay for them and fewer views means that people won’t know about certain games coming out which then means those games will get sold less and eventually that company selling the game will go out of business. So ultimately, the censoring can have a lot of really bad effects on gamers, youtubers, and the economy for gaming companies.
Gamers are facing danger of having certain games being available for them. Especially games that contain blood and gore inside them. For example, YouTuber Upper Echelon Gamers made a video on how the censorship of violent games might affect him and other gaming broadcasters. From his point of view, he sees that this will actually create a problem with how gamers will get information on games coming out or even updates on a game that is already out. (https://youtu.be/JBOVAh3Fb4A). Upper Echelon Gamers goes further on to explain that the effects of how games are priced and what this does to the economy for companies and games together seems detrimental. But he also brings up a point that the widely played game of Fortnite, which is just as violent but without blood, doesn’t make it easier for his argument because he is at a disadvantage to bring in a rebuttal.
Another source would be an article talking about how Youtube is the biggest source of gameplay for a lot of gamers. There was at least 850 million people who watched YouTube for game play in 2018. With big numbers like that Youtube should promote more gameplay rather than take away, even if it is on bloody content. The source that I found was also explaining that MortalKombat11 the hot new fighting game out for the year wasn’t selling as good as it was supposed to due to most gamers not even knowing about it first hand, and with that, the game didn’t make as much profit as it should have. (https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.newsweek.com/mortal-kombat-11-youtube-content-algorithms-rules-1400525%3famp=1).
An additional source of information that I found seems to show that video games being censored by Youtube won’t solve the problem of how violent kids are or even how other kids may buy the game. The article proves that there are other factors of people that can cause young gamers to be violent, which seems to be their environment and their IQ level. Also, people can purchase other violent content other than video games, and according to the article, it can also have the same effect on young kids so censoring games won’t actually help the matter because it will simply transfer over to other content. And that will leave game creators at a disadvantage because they won’t be about to figure out games in their platform that will be good enough to get out there in the media of Youtube to get sold. (https://techcrunch.com/2012/12/20/violent-video-games-do-cause-some-violence-but-censorship-wont-help/).
Dear Youtubes’ chairmen,
I know that you aren’t trying to take away gamers right to watch what they please but with the more regulations you have it can actually have an effect on some YouTube gaming channels. Some channels can’t post anymore of their gaming content and other channels are getting shut down because of this censorship. The censorship can also put those YouTubers out of business since they are getting either lower views or no views at all. If that’s the case then the channels can’t make as much money as they used to. Being that you guys are supported through sponsors there are rules that you have to follow as well, for one the free will to watch what you want should be one of them. If you want to make sure the split between adult content and kids’ content is kept separate then there are other ways to do that rather than regulating everyone’s content. First off, I do have evidence that there are YouTube channels and YouTubers from an article called the verge, and it explains how YouTube has been damaging some people channels and their livelihood. (https://www.theverge.com/2016/9/1/12753108/youtube-is-over-party-advertising-monetization-censorship). That article speaks a lot on the effects YouTube censoring certain content really can have horrible effects on multiple channels, which is unfair to those YouTubers because some have taken a while to make them reach the point they’re at. Now, all that hard work and dedication is down the drain for some of them. Another source that I have found additionally shows that parents are the ones who can tell their child or teenagers what they can and can’t play. If they seem to get out of line that shouldn’t be anyone else’s fault since it’s between the parent and the child. The source also uses the first amendment right to prove their point. (https://www.firstamendment.com/game-censorship/). Lastly, I would like to propose that you provide an option where there are just parental controls to regulate the censorship, so the parent and child can have more control over what content they are allowed to see. Also, there should be an option where you get to choose for yourself if you can watch the video or not.
https://youtu.be/JBOVAh3Fb4A. Upper Echelon Gamers. 2019 YouTube. April 22, 2019.
https://www.google.com/amp/s/www.newsweek.com/mortal-kombat-11-youtube-content-algorithms-rules-1400525%3famp=1. Steven Asarch. 2019 Newsweek. April 18, 2019.
https://techcrunch.com/2012/12/20/violent-video-games-do-cause-some-violence-but-censorship-wont-help/. Gregory Ferenstein. TechCrunch. December 20, 2012.
https://www.theverge.com/2016/9/1/12753108/youtube-is-over-party-advertising-monetization-censorship. Adi Robertson. The Verge. September 1, 2016.
https://www.firstamendment.com/game-censorship/. Lawrence G. Walters. Walters Law Group. Walters Law Group 2001-2019.
Genre: R&B Music
10/ 29/ 19
R&B music has a deeper meaning behind the lyrics than people think it does. Different from Hip-Hop, R&B is more about love stories or even relationships between a special person and the singer that is built up or broken up because of a certain situation. “The memory’s stalking me, uh. It’s getting hard for me, uh ‘.Cause you’re a part of me, uh. And I know we can’t get caught up”. (https://genius.com/Her-couldve-been-remix-lyrics). The lyrics here from Tone Stith represent a deep connection that he has to a partner, but he can’t let himself or the partner to get too close with each other because they can both get into deep trouble with their original partners. And the verse where ”The memory’s stalking me” shows that he can’t ever forget the memory of them being together the night that they were hooking up. The artist here is getting at how much they miss the person they were with because he knows that they can become a good couple or even have a good relationship, but they both have separate lives to get back to. This connects to R&B listeners who also may have had this kind of issue at least once in their lifetime while in another relationship. The artist’s decision to choose those words specifically about the situation was to come off as something that was just deeper than just having a good time. He was having one of the best moments of his life, but he knows the costs of what he’s doing so he doesn’t want to actually go through with it.
Another R&B song that shows that R&B music has a deeper meaning to it than people think is ”Medicine” by Queen Naija. This song was made based on a situation that she personally experienced in a relationship, and she put her pain through the beats of music. She also mentions that she wants to change ”perspectives and letting them know they’re not alone in whatever they’re going through, ” (http://www.iamqueennaija.com/about/). She wants to let people, who listen to R&B music, to know that they aren’t ”alone” as much as they think they are. The point of the song was to also to show the audience that men are not the only ones who can make one person in the relationship feel less than the other, but women can do it also. This is ultimately to get at the emotions not only to provide sympathy but it can also provide courage to other women that there is still hope for them to keep their pride.
H.E.R and Daniel Caesar made an R&B song together called ”Best Part” and that song has a lot of metaphors and deep meanings that were included. In one verse H. E. R was singing about how her partner to her, as she said, ” You’re the coffee that I need in the morning” (https://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/danielcaesar/bestpart.html). Another line, including Daniel Caesar, with a deep meaning, would also be ”You know that I see it I know you’re a star”. The meaning behind both of those lines lies deep within the certain words that were chosen to represent their partners, such as ”coffee” which was used by H. E. R was meant to represent the great importance that her partner is. Because coffee is used to re-up someone’s energy she is then comparing her partner to the coffee to send the message that he is her re-up. And the part where both singers said that their partners were a ”star” shows that they both take in how bright their partners shine on their lives. Because a star is a shining light in the night, the singers want their partners to know that they are the brightest person in their lives, showing the comparison between the star and their partner is how bright they are. For the audience, this creates an emotion where they feel to take their partner seriously towards how far they can go in their relationship it’s built on beautiful metaphors that adore each other
Another R&B song that had a lot of meaning inside of it was a song by Usher called ” There Goes My Baby”. In this song, he is singing about women that he\\\ has a real connection and vibe with, as he explains that, ” The feeling of it is if you have a true connection with somebody, no matter what happens in life, it will always come back” (https://www.songfacts.com/facts/usher/there-goes-my-baby). The meaning behind the song is to show that there is a ”real connection” with the person that you’re with and that it won’t go away from each of them. Because the song is showing that there is a real connection that you can find with someone, then that can give the audience hope that they can also find a connection that they have been missing for a while with someone who will be special to them. This also creates an emotional breakthrough for audiences who are in relationships that seem to be broken because now those people in the broken relationship can take a deeper look at their connection and see that no matter what they will come back to each other.
The second to last R&B song that has a lot of meaning behind the verses is a song called “Busted” by the Isley Brothers. In this song, the meaning behind the verse there is a deep metaphor that goes beyond just emotion, but more on how a girl tried to play him like he’s a fool. Based on the line where he said, ”Trying to slick a can of oil who you think you fooling”(https://genius.com/The-isley-brothers-busted-lyrics). Based on that line the metaphor that Ron Isley sang, he wanted to compare himself to a ”can of oil” that JS was apparently ”Trying to slick”, all to show that she was playing with him and taking him for a fool. Little does she know that he is smarter than he may seem to her, which makes her look worse in the situation where she cheated on him. This can also create a means for men to know how to handle their emotions when their partner cheats on them, which is to make their partner look more foolish about what they committed, especially when they’re caught.
Finally, one more song that has a deeper meaning based in the verses is a song called “When a Woman’s Fed Up” by R.Kelly. In this song, he sings about how it looks when a woman has had enough of a man, and with this overall message, the verses in between the lines are to show the effects of how a man might react if he were to see that a women’s done with him. As sung in these few lines he said, “You can cry a river. ‘Till an ocean starts to form, yeah. But she will always remember. ‘Cause she’s a woman scorned”(https://www.lyrics.com/lyric/2332276/R.+Kelly/When+a+Woman%27s+Fed+Up). Based on that verse the deeper meaning behind the lines is that when women have been bruised then they don’t even want to be bothered by the man who hurt them. R.Kelly even says ”You can cry a river. Till an, ocean starts to form”, based on that line it shows how a man might react to losing their partner might actually react to their women being fed up with them. Because of how exaggerated the crying would be for men when a woman leaves them for being fed up then there is a deeper meaning towards why women will get fed up and how a man might react to that but the women won’t care too much.
https://genius.com/Her-couldve-been-remix-lyrics. Could’ve been remix. By H. E. R. 2019 Genius Media Group. February 1, 2019.
http://www.iamqueennaija.com/about/. Medicine. By Queen Naija. Iamqueennaija.com. March 29, 2018.
https://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/danielcaesar/bestpart.html. Best Part. By H. E. R and Daniel Caesar. Jordan Dc Evans, Matthew Burnett, Ashton Simmons, Riley Ian Bell, Gabriella Wilson, Ashton Simmonds. October 20, 2017
https://www.songfacts.com/facts/usher/there-goes-my-baby. There goes my baby. By Usher. Songfacts interviewer. February 9, 2019.
https://genius.com/The-isley-brothers-busted-lyrics. Busted. By The Isley Brothers. 2019 Genius Media Group. May 6, 2003.
https://www.lyrics.com/lyric/2332276/R.+Kelly/When+a+Woman%27s+Fed+Up. When a Woman’s fed up. By R. Kelly and released in 1998. Lyrics.com, Stands4 LLC 2019. Web. December 18, 2019.