The workshop that I did today really reflected on how I can work on my own essay more. I got enough feedback to see some of the errors I made and how I can improve and make the better. What I saw in other peoples article was they made it more of research and not as much personal. I thought people would lean more toward personal and little bit of research. Some things I can take away from it is, seeing how they found the research and made it connected with the audience they were specifically talking about, I could definitely start to do that. I would like to change the paragraphs that I made so long and separate them so I can make it less boring. I feel that I can interest people more if I make it short and simple instead of boring. I also took some of the feedback and I will make a new opening to make it more interesting and better to read. That’s all that I really need to fix and overall I thought I did a good job.