Ali Ahmed

03-06-2016

ENG 1121 – D465

Partner’s essay positive and negative points

1. Two e positive points for partner’s essay are:

• Remi have a good opener which is connected to his thesis and essay.
• Remi have four subtopic in his thesis and he used those four subtopic to write four good paragraphs. I liked the way he connected to his thesis. I would say he worked really hard to finish this essay.

1. Two negative points for partner’s essay are:

• Remi didn’t use translation phrase in every paragraph, I think translation phrase will make his essay strong.
• Remi don’t have good conclusion. He didn’t follow the instruction for his conclusion. He should have connected to his essay with his ideal world so he would have good conclusion.