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I was influenced by my mentor article because the artist that was being mentioned is in the same music genre as the artist I’m speaking about. What the writer does in the article is pick out different lines and verses of the song “The Story of O.J.” and analyze and dictate it. I try to do the same in my article with Meek Mill’s article “Trauma”. What I want to avoid is just talking about the lyrics and just babbling along the lines. I don’t want to get my audience bored. How I see my article fitting into publication by the way of the media attention mental health gets.

Post traumatic stress disorder is a mental health disease that isn’t talked about a lot. It needs to get as much attention. My audience is the justice system and white America and how they need to stop demonizing the character of black men who were arrested for possession of a firearm. Some times the trauma comes from witnessing your own kin or friend get  murdered in front of your eyes. So it’s ideal that you walk around strapped up. Black men have an unbelievable weight on their shoulders. The stress comes in every direction on a daily basis. The impact of walking down the street in your own neighborhood can be a traumatic experience in itself. You don’t know who to trust. You would love to trust your brother who shares the same pigment, but he’s bound by that same fear that has you tip toeing on eggshells just to walk to work or school. The kind of language that I feel will engage my audience is the explicit content in the lyrics and picturing my audience there and have them have the feeling instead of judging.

https://www.elitedaily.com/p/the-meaning-of-jay-zs-the-story-of-oj-is-all-about-racism-in-america-7999549

The mentor article I chose caught my attention not only because I personally think Michael Jackson was one of the greatest entertainers but because it conveyed a side of Jackson that was personal to him but expressed in his album Thriller. The author of this article went into depth about how the some of the songs on the album have harrowing, dark messages that couldn’t be masked by up-tempo beats. Jackson was very passionate about his music and he usually always seemed cheerful but he experienced a lot of distress throughout his career. But he was the type of person that didn’t let stress stop him from pleasing his fans and looking happy all the time. He also tried his best to avoid criticism from part of the world that demonstrated tons of hate towards him. In the article, the author states, “Particularly on Jackson’s own compositions, Thriller’s tense, nearly obsessive sound components lyrics that delineate a world that has put the twenty-four-year-old on the defensive.” This shows that Jackson was well aware of the hate he was receiving but in return he decided to express what he was feeling in song. So basically he wrote lyrics that made it seem as if people were out to get him and that he needs to be alert and cautious of his surroundings. In my writing, I would like to generate going into depth about specific messages the artist I chose was trying to convey. It would help if I could avoid going off topic and writing about things related to the topic instead of sticking to the topic. Also I think topics like police brutality and racial profiling would engage my audience especially if I’m basing it off of a well liked artist perspective.

The mentor article I chose that peaked my interest was how it had many short paragraphs. With how the article was small chunks in paragraphs, it made it easier to read and felt like the reader wouldn’t need to digest a whole lot of information. Also having a lot of words in a paragraph may make the article a little too boring and is just informing. Another reason why the article has peaked my interest was how it argued its points between another game. It mentions what the new game that makes it more unique than the game that has been popular for months. Gives reasons why people are coming into this royale game rather than the game that originally dominated any mainstream game. There is also a brief explanation of the game, so if a new person were to try it out. Some difficulty that I had faced was giving a visual representation that the article had if you were to actually play the game compared to what I’m writing. Moving onto my pop culture, I don’t want to get too personnel with the topic that I chose but its something that affects people who are unable to express themselves and being happy for who they are. Being bullied and people saying they have a mental illness for being different is a discriminatory act. Its also an issue that many people may think they may be superior than other ethnicity and races because of the rules set in the past. When I came across to how can I impact the reader to think like if they were different and how they will imagine themselves as one of these people who felt different from birth and this emotion that never leaves the body. How the topic engage the reader and hooks them into the article can be impactful and to also have a little summary so the reader knows what to expect from reading at the end.

Minhaj Uddin

Carrie Hall

English 1121

March 12, 2019

Creative

I am writing about a artist named logic and his song 1-800-273-8255 and that is the suicide number. I plan on drawing a little boy walking down a hallway with his head down and people pointing at him and laughing. I am doing that because a feel like suicide is a major issue in this world and people should stop making people feel down because someone can kill themselves because of something you did to them.

Hey guys, first of all– just a reminder that your homework for Thursday is just to keep working on your presentations for next Tuesday. YOU decide your homework, especially what research needs to be done. If you are arguing against grades, then look up who else has argued against grades (and what they think would work in their place!) If you missed class, you should be in touch with your group to figure out what they would like you to do. Most of you have contacted me about this. If you haven’t, it will affect your grade on the presentation, of course.

Also, I am slowly but surely grading those papers. If I tell you I’d like to talk to you, please set up an appointment with me in class on Thursday or by email. You can find my comments in two places: 1. there will be a link at the end of your paper that has the marginal comments on your paper and 2. there will be a private comment that has more in-depth remarks and the grade itself.

Ife Ajayi
Prof. Hall
Eng 1121
19 February 2019

While reading my groups writing on their experiences with education so far I realized that we all have something in common. We all dealt with circumstances that made us who we are today. Schooling wasn’t an easy process for any of us, we all struggled, whether it had to do with passing courses or getting bullied. But we all made it through, we didn’t let any of the obstacles thrown our way define or get the better of us. Something else I realized is we all in some way think that the education system in America is failing a lot of students. Failing as in bringing students down and not allowing them to reach their full potential. In school, a lot of students don’t feel comfortable expressing themselves in classes simply because of fear. They fear being made fun of or their responses not being good enough for teachers. Obviously in classes like math there is usually only one answer. It’s either you’re right or wrong, so this doesn’t apply to math. But in classes like English students should be able to express themselves the way they know how to without getting judged or criticized by harsh teachers. This doesn’t mean that students who are completely off topic shouldn’t be corrected. Teachers just need to do a better job at responding to students who clearly are struggling with their education and need all the help they can get. One step in bettering education in America is evaluating teachers for real. There are some teachers out there who honestly don’t deserve their job. The surveys that they make students fill out on teachers anonymously is nothing but nonsense. A teacher could have the lowest rating and only negative comments and you’d still catch them working at their school the next term. So then the question is what is the point of the surveys if bad teachers still continue working and making students lives worse than they already are? The D.O.E should actually look at the surveys and take them into consideration because it’s obvious that they don’t.

One thing that my group and I all had in common is that we also found that we learned certain skills outside of school.  I’ve also noticed that not all of my group members brought up school, this kind of makes be think that they valued what they learned from outside of school to the point that whatever they do learn in school is not as valuable as the skills learned from elsewhere. I think the education system  is failing is because some students do not enjoy sitting in a room for 8 hours everyday learning some things that we may not feel is useful. I think some ways to improve the education system would be to maybe incorporate some type of hands on learning so that a student can get involved and actually do something instead of sitting and spacing out.

After reading my groups past experiences with the education system one of the main problems I saw in common was bullying. Bullying has been around forever and I honestly don’t think it’ll be something that can be fully stopped but I do believe the education system has noticed this but has only made a small effort to do something about it. Nowadays we hear in the news about young kids, from kindergarten to high school committing suicide due to bullying, while my groups experiences may not have been anywhere near this severe it’s still within the same realm. The Netflix show 13 shed some light on how someone can be pushed over the edge over a matter of time but also how the school counselor did not know how to properly handle the situation. One of my classmates wrote about how she was being bullied by other students simply because she was new to the country, but luckily received helped from classmates  “Some of my classmates help me to face the situation and help me to inform our teachers.” One way the education system can help stop bullying is by reaching out to both students and teachers, giving teachers the appropriate training on when to notice when a child may be acting different or singled out because of bullying before it’s too late, sometimes it’s hard for a victim of bullying to seek help so maybe teachers can be the ones to reach out first. Also informing students of the outcomes that come from bullying as well as an appropriate punishment if they take part of it.

Edison Verdugo

The education system in America, New York to be more specific, is all over the place. It is not engaging, boring, and is leading to non productiveness. Based on the readings, we can come to the conclusion that something needs to be done to engage the students because school at the moment is boring, stressful and it feels like work. This should not be the case. Another problem I have seen is that one’s education is determined by the district we reside in. You see this when schools prioritize students that live in their district. Education should be equally accessible to every child and not by some lines dividing parts of the city.
We live in a world where technology is accessible everywhere we go. Everywhere we step foot, were exposed to technology. Even at McDonald’s with those huge tablet-like machines where you can order your food. The only place where we don’t see as much technology is at school. It’s even prohibited. When we’re that exposed to technology and then go to a classroom setting where everything just feels so old and dull, and where technology for the most part does not take place, you better believe school will be boring.
As technology evolves so should schools. They should keep up with the never ending technology and put it to good use into classrooms rather then prohibiting it.

Waleed Qureshi 

ENG 1121 

Prof. Carrie Hall 

02/19/2019 

 

After reading the essays of my classmates I have realized that the educations system is very good according to me. The problem that I believe would be the environment in which you are studying is what matters according to me. One example would be Brandon who had to go through some tough times just because he is Asian and everyone expects him to be good at math. So according to me the problem is the people who discourage students from doing something or the people who pressure students because I believe that pressure might take the student on a bad journey. Other than that I cannot think of anything wrong with the education system.