After studying Mrs. Wu’s comments on my education narrative I will work on improving my CSD throughout my essay, work on my paragraph breaks, fix up minor grammar errors, and finally make the connection to Malcolm X clearer. I have realized after reading my essay again I didn’t make a great effort revising it the first time around. I had very bulky paragraphs and many writing errors in my essay. I also realized that my essay needs more detail in the scenes and especially in the connection.
