EDELSON ENG1121 O450

English Composition II

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Final Portfolio-Reflection

Unit 1

There are many different community’s that many individuals come from. In fact, being part of a community can honestly help you learn and grow as an individual.  For example, in my community I was able to adapt to the words that we seem to play with. In other words, what I mean by playing with the words is that we seem to have different terms for the words we use. For example, “aguas” is a word that is expressed in different ways.  In reality aguas is a word in Spanish that actually means water. Yes, when many hear that word, they think water but, in this case in my community, they seem to be using it as “watch out”. But don’t get me wrong we would also refer it as water as well. You would often hear the word be used by your grandparents, cousins, uncles, siblings and even people who aren’t your relatives but that are around you. Furthermore, it is used in different scenarios such as your household, family gathering, or even if you’re having a conversation with an induvial.

ONE Saturday morning, I woke up around nine something, both of my siblings already awake one watching tv and the other on their phone watching YouTube. I briefly ask both of them “did you guys just wake up as well” they both replied, “yeah not that long ago”. So, then I decide to ask them if they knew where our parents were at. One reply’s “not sure” and the other reply’s “honestly not sure there probably outside” So I quick look at the weather on my phone because I remember the day before the news mentioned how good it was going to be outside, as I checked my phone it shows me that it’s about 80 degrees outside. I then decide to call my parents and ask them where they were. My mom then replies, “we’re outside your father is looking for parking, we just came to buy Mexican bread”. So, then me and my siblings decide to contribute and help set things up beforehand. One of my siblings started to make hot chocolate while the other decided to start setting up the table and I decide when the hot chocolate was ready, I would serve.  My parents got home just in time that the hot chocolate was made, and I said, “you guy can sit down ill serve”.  So, as I began to walk to the kitchen, my sibling said, “oh watch out its hot”. But as I walk further in the kitchen, all I heard was one of my parents shout out Aguas esta caliente.

Since it wasn’t my first time hearing those words, I was able to acknowledge what they meant. But if you ever wonder someone who isn’t very familiar with the certain words that are being used with different meanings they would just totally get confused or even just make them wonder why they are shouting water. On top of that, it is literally spelled the same way nothing seems to change but the way it is being expressing. Plus, it’s understandable because who would think that aguas could also possible mean “watch out”.

I don’t remember the first time I ever heard the word being used in the sense of not referring to water. However, what I can say is that I would use it couple of times. The way I would use the word would be whether I have a conversation with someone, or if someone is asking me a question. For example, if I come home from outside knowing that it’s raining and one of my family members or anyone in genral is planning to go out but doesn’t know it’s raining, I would instantly say to them “aguas esta lloviendo”. what I mean by that is watch out its raining outside.

As you can see the way that the word is being expressed in my community many people would refer to it as a slang word. As a reader you may be thinking to yourself where this word come from or how did this word come to existence. After hunting for answers, you may correct me if I’m wrong but it’s a word that Mexicans would use back in the days when they would conduct a modern sewage treatment. So, they would basically collect the dirty water from their homes and toss it into the streets. But before tossing the water they would shout aguas to prevent any induvial to get hit with the water.

Aguas, is honestly a faster way to break down what you’re trying to say. Also, it’s one of many word that I will always remember and carry with me because it’s part of my culture. Besides, not only that it’s something that has been said within my surrounding and I seemed to adapt with. It’s like another new word that has been in adapted to my vocabulary.

Unit 2 

What would you do if you were put in a position where you are knowing that the opposite gender is having preference despite on your accomplishments? Not to mention, the U.S women soccer team has faced a problem similar to it where’s they weren’t rewarded equal as the males who are in the U.S soccer team.

With that being said Soccer is more than a sport. In fact, it’s a job where people have to depend on to be able to provide for their family. Even though many may not see what’s going outside the pitch they should be able to get knowledge on what’s really happening. What I mean by this is that people aren’t being treated equally. Many may complain that males seem to pull more streams which should led them to get more money but in reality, the sport of soccer males and females both have the same objective.

In the U.S people seem have a dispute on the United States nation soccer team based on curtain circumstances of the wages that are given to the males compared to the wages that are given to the females. For example, in February 22,2022 Andrew Das writes a statement from the Goalkeeper of the female nation team. “The numbers speak for themselves,” Solo said, though U.S. Soccer immediately disputed them. Men’s players, Solo said, “get paid more to just show up than we get paid to win major championships.” In other words, Andre Das is getting to hear out people point of view based on the debate. While many people have different point of view, what Solo means by “the number speak for themselves” is that it makes one wonder is it really fair that the females can accomplishes more tittles than the males but yet still get paid less than the males.

The U.S women National soccer team have won about 16 titles in total. They have won in numerous competitions for instance in Olympic, Concacaf, and even the World Cup. Out of those 16 titles 4 of them are wins from the World cup, where 32 nations around the world face one another to see who lifts the title. Where is for the males, they have only had 7 titles in total and all those tittles have only been won in one tournament.  So, there honestly shouldn’t a preference for neither because both seem to bring eyes that just lead to help build up their team. On the contrary, the women deserve a raise where it’s to match the males’ wages because they have accomplished many things.

Its stunning just to know the difference between the way a male and female would earn averagely in soccer. Many female players from the U.S nation team have decided to speak out in an interview where they talk about the wage caps. In the interview with NBC its states that “28 members of the U.S women national team alleging they were paid less than 1/3 of the men’s team bonuses.”

According to The New York Times Magazine Lizzy Goodman published an article about the right of equal pay for U.S Women soccer team. For example, Goodman talks about the huge wage gaps between a male and female. In Goodman article it states that “If a male and a female national team player each played 20 exhibition games in a year, members of the men’s squad would have earned an average of $263,320, while members of the women’s squad would have earned a maximum of $99,000.” Basically, in the industry of soccer a male and female can both do the same thing, but males are the ones to seem to be the favorite. Apart from that, the sport soccer is meant to bring people together not to leave people out. People shouldn’t have to feel that there less worthy based off their gender. Now it’s just worth questioning how would you feel if you were in their shoes?

Overall, it’s always great to speak up because it helps encourage others. For instance, take this for example this isn’t just a matter of women who love to play the sport but it’s for everyone all around the world. It is showcasing that you shouldn’t feel trapped and left out. But you should speak up and fight for what you think it’s right.

Reflection

I just wanted to start off by saying that writing isn’t really my thing but after looking at my previous work I could honestly say that there has been improvement and growth throughout this semester. Overall looking back at all the assignment, I would have to say unit one Portrait of a word was my favorite because I was able to talk about something that is relatable to me. Not only that but it felt very pleasing to being able to share things that I know, and the way things are seen from my perspective. I would have to say that I didn’t really have a least favorite assignment but if I had to choose from all three, I would have to go with unit two Feature story. The reason why I would have to go with unit two is because it was the one where I felt like it was the most challenging. What I mean by this is when creating the structure of the essay for example adding resources to help clarify my sentences. Therefore, when writing these essays, it helped change my writing and the way I looked at it as I was writing for example, I had to put myself in the reader shoes and question myself as I was writing.

For all three unit I didn’t really have a trouble finding a topic or coming up with ideas but what I did find very challenging was trying to get my ideas across and being able to explain it. But when creating the drafts, the professor and my classmates would comment under my posts, I found it very helpful because they help me look at my writing in a different way. ln which I felt like it helped me expand my writing and get my point across. When comparing my previous finals for unit one and two before and after revision I was able to see that there is also room for improvement. The reason I’m saying this is because I learned that after you complete your final you should go back and revise it again because you would find some sort of piece where there needs revision.

Final Portfolio Revisions

  Essay 2 revised 

  Electric cars, also referred to as electric vehicles, are designed to be fully electric, and they rely on power batteries to function. These battery-powered cars’ sales were higher than the fossil fuel-dependent vehicles in the US, China, and Europe in the recent past years. Fully electric vehicles have no emissions; hence cleaner, greener, and better for the environment compared to fuel cars. The car has a motor and an electric battery and has a range of 300miles. Reduced emissions mean fewer greenhouse gasses, enabling the nations to get closer to sustainable renewable energy sources. The demand is currently going high due to the spiking of the fuel prices resulting from the war in Ukraine. This has resulted in a shortage in fuel being imported majorly from Russia. Also, the war has resulted in the disruption of production in European countries. These companies that usually send their cars to the United and the US-based companies, for instance, Ford, are blinded by the fact that many people need their vehicles. They can’t produce their products faster. But the demand for these is so high that buyers have to pay deposits months early (Nytimes.Com). The electric cars market is having a breakthrough period. It is approaching the mainstream this year as the manufacturers have started selling America’s favorite types of these electric cars, and this is the pick-up truck.

   The advent of these cars will be the most significant change in the vehicle industry since the unveiling of the Model T in 1908, with far-reaching implications for industrial employee corporations and the environment (Nytimes.Com). Tailpipe emissions are one of the most significant causes of global warming. Electric cars made a small contribution to the market in 2021, and electric car sales accounted for approximately 9 percent of the new vehicles sold. According to the Energy Agency, the rapid correct result of the sale of the electric cars is unstoppable, thus putting to rest any doubts that it’s the end of the combustion engine.

The car industry is about to make an investment of $5 billion in the following five years and therefore transitioning from fossil fuel to electric vehicles. A report given out by Wed bush securities says that this investment will be used in building factories, writing software, training workers, upgrading dealerships, and many more. The Volkswagen chief executive, in an interview, said that this would be the most significant transformation in the capitalism industry since the investments will be massive and so is the mission. As they account for a small percentage of the market of new cars in the United States, the market of electric vehicles led by the top-selling company Tesla is steadily on the rise. Following several new models that are set to hit the market in the next few months and more off-lease electric cars that are on their way, this year might be the year you take a plunge and purchase an electric vehicle. Buying an electric vehicle is slightly different from purchasing a fossil fuel car.  

     Ensuring the range of the car lies within your needs, this is the most important concern when it comes to buying an electric car. The current electric automobiles cover several driving ranges, and this range from approximately 100miles to more than 300 miles. Purchasing these ranges is entirely dependent on your needs. Statistics given by the ABC news indicate that the commute in the United States is 32 miles round trip, with people who live in far-flung suburbs and rural regions logging more miles every day on the national average (Nytimes.Com). It pays to choose a model with a more excellent working range than you anticipate for the following reasons; the ranges given in electric cars are just estimates, and it varies depending on several factors. For beginners, the battery is likely to drain quicker while commuting on a highway than within town since propelling at high speeds takes more energy, and more kilowatts will burn power driving at high temperatures. According to research by AAA, it was realized that when it dips to 20F while the heat of the electric vehicle is in use, the range will be 41% shorter than the anticipated range compared to when mercury is at 70F. At 90F, the capacity of the electric car drops to less than 20% with the air conditioning running. This shouldn’t be too much of a problem considering that an at home charger comes with the electric vehchile. Charging your electric vehicle at home is easy and cost-effective, and quick. You only will be liable for a small government subsidy if you install a small all-weather home charging device at your home. Once installed, you can charge your car from 5 to 10 hours, and rapid chargers can charge up to 80% in less than one hour (Nytimes.Com). Less any applicable incentive, consider the price apart from the electric car’s range, the other significant factor is the price of the car. By 2020 the least expensive vehicle was priced at around $30000 range, and some luxuries went up to $70000 to $100000. It is advisable to research the prices of the cars you would like to study, and this will help you find the type of electric automobile you can afford (Nytimes.Com). Also, it is essential to consider the delivery charges by the manufacturer, cost of registration, state, and taxes that can be locally tracked into the transaction cost of the car.

     Besides focusing on the electric automobile’s price and range, you would also like to pick a model that you can use regularly. A subcompact, for example, is too tight for taller motorists. Some cars can be easy to enter and exit for drivers compared to others. And if you regularly carry more than one person, then the headroom and back leg seat would be a concern too. And if you have kids, it is also significant to look at how easy it is to get them in and out of the car, and also the cargo room can carry a good number of pieces of baggage (Nytimes.Com). Ensure that the battery car driving experience meets your requirements; it is critical to ensure the car is acceptable in terms of comfort and that all the attachments are operable and in excellent functioning condition. Significantly individuals who have never used an electric vehicle will perceive a distinct difference in the driving experience, operating one is substantially lower, especially over the vehicle’s whole lifespan. You may spend significantly less on electric automobiles compared to fuel cars. This is due to the tax benefits, improved fuel economy, cheaper electric costs, and low maintenance needs (Nytimes.Com). The design of the electric cars makes them efficient; three primary components power them: onboard charger, inverter, and motor. And therefore, they are susceptible to minor wear and tear and less stress on the engine. And lastly, the car is quiet. This is easily noticeable, especially when switching to an electric vehicle which is a relaxing and more comfortable experience. Electric vehicle batteries are located at the bottom of the car and thus giving the car better balance and weight distribution.

     As electric automobiles become more common, their costs constantly decrease, and transitioning drivers get many perks. Electric cars can save you capital, including fuel, tax, maintenance expenses, and expenses. A fully electric vehicle might cost a quarter less per mile than a standard gasoline or diesel vehicle. And these savings soon pile up. Using a unique journey calculator can estimate how much you could save using an electric vehicle.

Electric vehicles provide tremendous long-term value and may be an excellent development for drivers searching for a more cost-effective and efficient mode of transportation. Like traditional diesel and petrol vehicles, the price of purchasing an electric vehicle changes according to features, type, and model (Nytimes.Com). And the electric automobile. Almost any budget can suit an electric vehicle, and a car selector tool is created to assist in finding a perfect car without much effort. 

 

Works cited

 “Why This Could Be A Critical Year For Electric Cars”. Nytimes.Com, 2021, https://www.nytimes.com/2022/02/08/business/energy-environment/electric-cars-vehicles.html.

 

 “Buying An Electric Vehicle? Here Is Some Advice.”. Nytimes.Com, 2021, https://www.nytimes.com/article/electric-vehicle-ev-buying-guide.html.

 

“Want To Buy An Electric Car? Read This First”. Nytimes.Com, https://www.nytimes.com/2022/03/23/us/electric-car-buying-guide.html.

 

Final Reflection Paper

    My essay writing process has enabled me to understand how to structure my ideas and research papers. Besides, I incorporated different processes such as prewriting, outlining, rough drafting and revising in my two essays to ensure that the message, ideas and arguments are articulated effectively. The research and critical thinking skills I have learned after joining campus have been efficient in developing my two essays. For example, I effectively organized arguments and ideas coherently in both essays by connecting them across different perspectives. Consequently, using different materials were effective because they enabled me to establish different viewpoints, insights, and arguments in my two essays. Similarly, knowledge gained from previous reflections, blog posts, assignments and class writing exercises has boosted my writing. Therefore, the insights I gained in this class have enabled me to develop quality and clear essays because the writing process has a significant role in my experience as a writer.

     My essay writing was challenging because I struggled with developing coherent ideas and arguments. I could not effectively express my thoughts and ideas before but learning about the writing process enabled me to create better essays. For example, I used critical thinking skills in Essay 1 to articulate my thoughts and purpose. This has been more effective than before since connecting ideas coherently was challenging. Besides, working on the essay using the writing process boosted my grades, confirming that I acquired better grades. Nevertheless, the peer reviews from colleagues enabled me to confront essay writing issues that I initially had in previous assignments and essays. As a result, I learned how to organize ideas and thoughts effectively in my essays.

     I developed my essays using insights learned in weekly posts and assignments. I have learned to brainstorm and develop ideas, outlines, and research information about my writings. Also, the revising skills I learned have enabled me to correct grammatical or spelling mistakes in my two essays. For instance, in essay two, I organized the essay’s incoherent paragraphs and made sure that the information was grammatically correct for better understanding. This is crucial because I initially had challenges organizing ideas across my essay based on outlining main points and supporting information. As a result, the editing, drafting, researching, revising and critical thinking skills have boosted my writing process and essays.

     In addition, I emphasized more time in prewriting while writing essays one and two because it is a crucial process. Besides, my perspective and personal experiences regarding the essay topic reflected the choice of words and vocabulary. For example, in essay 2, I talked about how people anticipate traveling and learning new things. The topic allowed me to develop diverse ideas and connect them with personal experiences because traveling is a common experience. Moreover, I effectively developed main points on the benefits of traveling and how it helps people physically and mentally. Also, I included comparisons and diverse perspectives to highlight different opinions in my essay. Thus, the incorporation of comparison on traveling impacts presents an organized flow of ideas and skills.

     Furthermore, the writing process has enabled me to become a better writer than before I joined this class. I had issues outlining and drafting before, but when I gained insights on how to organize ideas and draft towards presenting coherent and credible essays. In my first essay, I talked about English phrases such as “hurry up and take your time” . I reflected on multiple class assignments and peer reviews to draft an organized and skillful essay. Initially, I had issues developing the main points and incorporating supporting evidence and examples in my writing. While working on the first essay, I incorporated critical thinking skills in highlighting different contexts in which the phrase is used in daily communities.

Ultimately, learning about different writing situations enabled me to acquire skills to incorporate purpose in my essays. For instance, both of my essays are informative, and I incorporated various elements meant to inform the audience. This is because reflecting on how an idea or argument is perceived by the audience or relates to them is crucial. Consequently, learning about the audience before drafting an essay has been essential in my writing process. I utilized purpose and audience in essays one and two. It was crucial in articulating aspects of value and credibility. As a result, organization skills and rhetorical appeals such as anecdotes, ethos, pathos and logos were critical to establishing the audience’s values, credibility and emotions towards given topics.

     Although I learned a lot from the two essays I developed in this class, there are multiple things I could have done better, and I will work on them to ensure a better display of ideas and thoughts. For example, I will work more on different aspects such as research and critical thinking skills while writing essays. In essay two, I will involve more supporting materials and examples of how traveling is an essential experience. In contrast, in essay one, I will consider giving more examples in future writings. Furthermore, I will work more on the use of transition words between sentences and paragraphs to make my essays more coherent and more precise. However, most essay writing elements have been beneficial to me since they have enabled me to develop better research papers and assignments and made me a better writer.

     In conclusion, the essay writing process and papers have influenced my significant status as a writer. I developed better writing practices and skills such as brainstorming ideas, outlining thoughts, drafting, and researching in this class which enabled me to establish essays effectively, especially essays one and two. Also, the knowledge learned in organizing, editing, proofreading, and researching has played a significant role in my latest essay because I have incorporated these aspects into the writing process. Nevertheless, writing essays has built my self-esteem more than before because I have developed a positive attitude towards writing credible and quality essays that demonstrate the main topic or idea. It has also allowed me to rectify minimal mistakes and aspects in my essays towards developing practical research papers. As a result, this knowledge provides insights into future essays and my crucial ability to express my ideas as a writer.

 

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