Pang Yen Wu
Professor Elizabeth Guthrie
ENG 1101
9/29/15
7 Points of Peer Review
- Operner:
Christopher Morely once said, “There is only one success-to be able to spend your life in your own way.”
- Thesis
I am worried about my future because I do not know what I am gong to do, where I will be, and if I will be successful or not.
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- Subtopics for each paragraph
Yes he has the sub topic for each paragraph
- Topic sentence for each subtopic’s
1.Illusions often throw people off and lead them to live a life full of lies.
2.Moreover, I love technology and believe in a world where technology has taken over.
3.There are many other people in the world stressing about this just like me.
    5)Transitional/words
In paragraph 2 and 3 he use it in there.
      6) General edits
Missing one word at the last line of paragraph 2.
     7) Conclusion
He restate the thesis and related to a bigger thought
