Practice #1.

Lili Velez has a great structure of starting point. As a reader I felt  the story was very interesting because it was engaging me to kept read. ” We panic, we pack, we get to college, and then panic again, moaning, “I wish I had known I’d need this!”.  I really like how she explained a sentence in less word by using commas.  It’s gives a reader a big idea what will happen in next phase.

Practice #2.

Nick has great details in his story and it was easy to understand as a reader. Every step that he explained it has a amazing sense of whats the writer is trying to say. As I was reading it’s makes me feel like the feedback gave a Nick advantage to improve his writing and also helped him develop good points based on his story.