“You are a Fail-ure, and you’ll never be s***! You’ll fail and be just like your loser brothers!”
This was said by my father when reprimanding me for skipping a class in high school. To this day, I see this as the biggest influence of my life. A true challenge to show someone else my actual potential. My brothers didn’t graduate at the age of 18, so my father would always talk about them and say that being like them wasn’t a good thing. After the day he told me this, i would sit at night, thinking, with the words reverberating in my head, bouncing back and forth. “Will dad really be right? Will I be a failure?” No, I refuse. I know how smart I am, and i’ve been that smart my whole life. At that moment, I worked hard enough to get my diploma, which I had always deserved.
To make this a little more light hearted, i’m in a better environment than I was before, and I can get work done without the negativity of my past. I’m here in college for myself, not to prove my father wrong, because doing it for myself is more enjoyable. I’ll gladly continue my education to my liking, and no matter what anyone else says, i’ll be satisfied with my performance, because at the end of the day, I was in control, so what I accomplish was up to me. From the day my Dad told me this to now, i’ve matured in many ways, and for that I deserve credit where credit is due. I truly can’t wait to see what the future holds for me, now, and even five or ten years from now. I’m here for a reason, and i’ll make sure its a reason i’ve fulfilled.
I respect your mindset. What you envision about yourself should always be the goal you pursue, no matter who the person is if they expecting bad on you just do what you want to do and what you know will give you the life you desire.
I understand what happen I had a similar situation happen to me when I went to live with my uncle in new jersey his wife said foul things about me but she didn’t know I heard her. Stuff like that either makes you or breaks you. It’s a good thing you thought about those things it made you want to be something more best way of revenge is to kill them with success.
Raul: This is an uplifiting story. I especially like your strength and belief in yourself here: “I’m here in college for myself, not to prove my father wrong, because doing it for myself is more enjoyable.” So many of us are living to please or to prove our parents wrong. I myself lived under this shadow for a long time, too long. It’s heartening to read that you are coming into your own and doing things for and by yourself. Also your sentence structure in your first paragraph is very good. Pls pay attention to sentence boundaries especially comma splices (something to work on with the tutors).
NOW GOING FORWARD WITH THIS PIECE OF WRITING:
“I know how smart I am, and i’ve been that smart my whole life. At that moment, I worked hard enough to get my diploma, which I had always deserved.” [can you show more about this. Examples of ways you knew you had ability.
If your father said these harsh words, there was a precedent in your surroundings.
You tell of your brothers not finishing HSchool. What family influence has held you back? What family background has been a challenge for you? Can you give a bit of background to show that you have triumphed over some family difficulties (only if you feel comfortable).
“Will dad really be right? Will I be a failure?” [His words had some hold on you — so what bad ways had you fallen into? What exact ways have you changed? Then, is there a specific event showing your change in being a better student, better you?
Good start!