Practice 1

Lili Velez started magnificently, it gives a clear vision of what she wrote in the piece of writing. So as soon as the readers read the part, it will draw their attention. One thing that stands out to me most is  “This could be anything from that extra pillow to the answers to a high school test on Hamlet”. This is important because it guides a reader to think more about the environment of the classroom and gives an idea of the second half part. “A question followed me home and shook up my ideas on what belonged in the classroom and what I should never be without”, basing on how serious she was where she never thought of a question outside of a class. By saying this, it makes readers have more interest in it. 

 

Practice 2 

The way Nick started his story is very unique and consistent. I like how the structure is made, which is explained step by step. Providing brief thoughts can be useful for readers to have a better understanding of the overall piece. Something that gets through Nick’s story is positive feedback because it gives him the advantage of working towards a bunch of questions to obtain the piece of writing he wants to have. Also, like how he has finished the piece with some big points to think about when the reader read. Overall, I believe that feedback is most likely to have for most people because it communicates well with the text, which tells the writer where they want to focus on and what adjustments need to be made.