Prof. Jessica Penner | OL02 | Spring 2021

Johar Martinez, Jones Critique

The main thing I enjoyed about this piece was the level of detail we were given. This definitely helped visualize the situation. One thing I had on my mind throughout the entire read was if the daughter in questions still felt the same about the mother as she did in the beginning of the passage. Alongside that I wanted to know if the mother uncharacteristically helping her daughter prepare gave her any odd thoughts.

8 Comments

  1. Ralph Ayala

    I do agree about how the details being given to us helped us visualize the situation happening.

  2. Fnu Janvi

    I agree with you that the author was very detailed which made the reader visualize things in the story. because in the story she explains her emotion very well in every situation such as when her mother was dressing her for the first day of school.

  3. Jason Jordan

    I agree that the author is very detailed, the way the author describes the dress with it being cotton and all these wild colors you can picture how the dress look.

  4. Alexsis

    I agree with the fact that the details allowed readers to help visualize the situation. I was able to picture the scene in my mind which made it easy to understand the reading. I’m curious to know what you meant when saying you wonder if the mother helping the daughter gave her odd thoughts. What odd thoughts would she have?

  5. BensonH

    I also agree that the author used a great level of detail to tell the story. Help visualize what was going on.

  6. Christopher

    I also agree I think that the author used a lot of detail which made the story easier to understand and visualize

  7. Nelson Tavarez

    I agree with everyone on the level of detail the author used throughout her story. She described every single piece of her clothes and the color they were. I was still unable to imagine what she was wearing.

  8. DeAndre Badresingh

    I agree because visualization of a story helps us as the reader to put our selves in the authors shoes.

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