If I should go about revising my unit 1 essay, I would go about thoroughly explaining, setting. I realized that my peers feedback was that they wanted me to give more information so that they could have a better understanding and an imagery view while reading. Would also want to try preventing and having less sentence clauses. I also think I could be a bit more detailed when explaining my story line and be a bit more specific on what brought be to my conclusion, just to be a bit more in debt, so that it helps and give readers a bit more interest in simpler terms not losing them or otherwise trying to get them lost in which they have to start think or having questions because something was not clear to them when they were reading.

I already made revisions

My approach to revising my unit 2 annotated bibliography would be to seriously go back and look at the grading rubric that was used in grading my annotated bibliography and start there. Hence, the feedback received back from Professor Annie I would revise my citations through helpful sources such as purdue owl to ensure my citations are correct. From the feedback, I also need to work on my rhetorical analysis as well as the summary of each source. The feedback from my colleagues that I will also apply to my revision is the amount of detail and grammatical errors that can be found within my writing. There is indeed a great amount of revision needed to be done to my writing piece along with word counts for some paragraphs. Overall, I would reference back from the revision suggestions from Professor Annie and work my way from there as well as adding the writing necessary to achieve a more successful annotated bibliography.