What I would revise is my sentence structures. Making sure I have complete sentences and grammar is solid. Also, I’ll probably add new details that seem more important and delete irrelevant context. The reason I’m doing this is because I feel like my writing can always improve.
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For my Unit 1 paper, I would go back and revise the transitions. I like how I wrote my paper, as I feel it became a full circle moment from introduction to conclusion. However from the feedback I received from my classmates and professor, the transitions between paragraphs were abrupt and I agree. The transitions were rushed and were not smooth and it definitely needs more time and work. I struggle finding the right words and tend to take a long time when writing because of this, so this is certainly something I will work on.
one thing I would change about my Unit 1 essay is spending more time explaining why my teacher helped me like school more because of the kind of teacher he was even though a lot of students didn’t like him, he was a teacher who always wanted to help his student no matter if he seems like the bad guy, I also wanted to talk about the problem had with him because me and him never seem to see eye to eye because he gives to much work sometimes and how many essays he give us and that how I would change my unit 1 essay.
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