If I should go about revising my unit 1 essay, I would go about thoroughly explaining, setting. I realized that my peers feedback was that they wanted me to give more information so that they could have a better understanding and an imagery view while reading. Would also want to try preventing and having less sentence clauses. I also think I could be a bit more detailed when explaining my story line and be a bit more specific on what brought be to my conclusion, just to be a bit more in debt, so that it helps and give readers a bit more interest in simpler terms not losing them or otherwise trying to get them lost in which they have to start think or having questions because something was not clear to them when they were reading.