Prof. Jessica Penner | OL02 | Spring 2021

Wilbert Rodriguez, Jones Critique

There were a lot of things that worth taking note of throughout this entire piece by Jones. One of the few things that I managed to pick up on was the detailed interactions that allowed the reader to follow along almost seamlessly. Those interactions were enjoyable for me as a reader. The details that were chosen to be included were also able to tell the reader about the time this reading takes place in if the reader looked thought about it enough. The little details about the mother not knowing how to read, the materials of the clothing that were worn, the dialogue, and the list goes.

If there was anything I’d suggest for the author, it would be to give the key details early on to give the reader something to work with. If the author had given a year or an event that is currently happening/had passed, then the reading would have been a lot more clear to follow along with.

9 Comments

  1. Jeffrey

    The author struck a balance between detail and speed with their writing that I appreciated. Like you said, it was enjoyable to read through and pick up on the details to see where they cropped back up later.

  2. Moose

    I agree with you the author was descriptive and explained the events as a child. The author describes in a tone in a way the audience can understand her experience and connect to it in a way.

  3. Amani

    The details throughout the story were definitely seamless, they were very well thought out. The story had a great pace, detailing, plot and so on that made me want to keep reading as well.

  4. Nuha

    The author was descriptive and detailed; this what made the story interesting. Also, the author wanted to figure the age of the little girl. Maybe there a reason for the author to put the reading in style.

  5. Nuha

    The author was descriptive and detailed; this what made the story interesting. Also, the author wanted to figure the age of the little girl. Maybe there a reason for the author to put the reading in style.

  6. Ralph Ayala

    I do agree with you about the author giving the readers an idea of the time when all of these events was happening. It would provide my clarity to the readers, and would add more to the sense of struggle for the family.

  7. Jason Jordan

    I agree with you that the story Is very easy to follow and I wish the author shared with us the time period so you can almost picture It.

  8. Alexsis

    I also believe the author should have given clear details from the beginning because I felt myself getting bored with all the little details that I didn’t think were relevant. I still don’t understand the purpose of the story because I didn’t think anything major happened. I didn’t really understand the point of knowing about the color of her dress and all the other details like that.

  9. BensonH

    I also agree that the author was descriptive along with nice pacing so it wasn’t too boring

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