According to some feedbacks I received, I understand why I need to use “systems” rather than “system” if I mention about intelligent vigilare systems. Therefore, I already revised it. For … Read More
Category: Summary Revision Plan
Based on the feedback I received from Prof. Blain my main problem is organizing my summary. I jumped to the main point right away. So I will have to do … Read More
Based on the feedback I received from classmates and Prof. Blain, I would revise my 500 word summary by fixing the grammatical errors and decreasing the word count. After re-reading … Read More
Based on professor’s feedback I should keep everything as it is. I should keep the writing simple so everyone can understand it.… Read More
Based on the feedback I got from my classmates and prof. Blain, I think I shouldn’t have used the word “I” in the beginning of my summary because the summary … Read More
I received feedback from the professor also one of the colleagues found part of my summary interesting. According to the professor, I need to clean up a “couple of odd … Read More
Based on the feedback I got, I need to be careful when it comes to putting my own opinion into the summary. It’s easy to go off on a tangent … Read More
From the Feedback, I got back from my classmate and the professor. I need to use more transition words when starting a sentence and I need to remove the last … Read More
I received Feedback from my Professor on my summary. According to her, my summary was a good work but the last paragraph seemed like a combination of the author’s thoughts … Read More
After seeing the prof comments I see that I did some mistakes. This mistake is a problem for me and I need to revise it again because I didn’t specify … Read More
