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Life can always change, you just have to adjust by one of the greatest rappers of the decade Drake. Education can bring many problems into someone’s life from social to academic and race. Coming from a Latino background of parents who weren’t able to achieve many things back home, they came here so I can achieve everything they didn’t. It eventually built me into a better person. 

There are many challenges Latino face in our world today one being those who are privileged have power over us. Not being as fortunate as many other kids who were given everything to them. Throughout my middle school years, it was hard attempting to be like other kids at my school not having the same educational support at school as other students would be given. Needing to find ways to get them. Teachers would tend to pick on me not so I can participate. I would see how teachers would give so much assistance to my classmates. I would be confused. I had to find another teacher from the same department to get the help I thought maybe because I was not good at the subject, I came to the realization that it was more than that it had to do with race.

Choosing the right group of friends played a huge factor in my education. I did not have the appropriate friends who wanted to see the best of me but encouraged me to do bad things to please them or others. To have to do it to fit in with other groups or be that “cool” kid at school. I accidentally shot a teacher with a friend’s B-B gun in the last week of school. We were not the best class. We were known to be troublemakers. I did it because I was encouraged. I know no one forces you to do anything I wanted to fit in. To be that kid who would not be scared to do anything was over I had thought it to become a big issue since anything that could harm a student or a staff was not allowed. The police were called up; they held every student around me and investigated who brought the gun in. All Parents were called since it was the last week of school nothing much was done. I realized who truly are your friends, the kid who came to school with the gun not stepping up and admitting it was his gun although I had pulled the trigger. Overall telling myself What if it were another scenario of me getting caught in the moment no one stepping in for me? I had to face the consequences on my own. 

To come from an immigrant parent who came to this country to give me a better life wasn’t easy. They had to put food on our table and a roof over our head came with struggles. Not many can imagine how hard it can be not to have the economic support my parents did not get during that time. Being so blind as a young kid when you would ask for everything but not realizing if your parents had the money for it. I faced racism throughout my school years. There was a point in my life I didn’t want to go to school not because I was scared but I was over it. I eventually would find it funny and joke along with them to keep it going so i would stop getting bothered. 

Growing up somewhere you think you don’t belong can be very encouraging for someone to succeed. Believing that you can be like others or even better is motivating. Teachers will differentiate you by your race which can come  with struggles. Many student’s voices are not heard because they’re seen less or many are scared to speak up. Negativity can be turned into positivity; you just have to adjust to it. 

 

1 reply on “Draft”

Mike, I totally agree with Drake’s words and think it is a powerful opening for your essay. I also agree about your thesis statement that for some people education is the priority, but for others it is just a forced necessity. But you are right that only we can decide it for ourselves not being led by circumstances and surroundings. I really liked your background preview, where you are telling your parents’ story and how they would struggle to provide the best for their kids. Maybe, in your final essay you can further develop this story with some anecdotes, I think it can relate to many students including myself.
I really liked how you describe your experience in the middle school. For the final draft, as a reader, I think I would like to see more vivid examples of the injustice and discrimination you faced in the school. Your story about the B-B gun is remarkably interesting, and I had an impression that it was a turning point in your young life. Maybe you could describe what conclusions you made after this incident besides choosing the friends, how it made you feel in front of your parents, and how you felt inside.
Your story is very encouraging, and, obviously, you were managed not only to adjust to injustice but also surpass all the circumstances, since you made it to college despite all the discouragement of your teachers. I would be really interested to know what or who inspire you to overcome the path from high school “troublemaker” to a successful college student. Maybe you could also describe your experience in college as a Latino student, is it any different from high school experience, do you still feel like you do not belong to the environment?
As an immigrant myself, I was really touched and inspired by your story, I think it has a great potential.

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