Ugly
Context: I have never met my friend Bladez in real life. We have known each other for about 6 years. He wanted to live with me and I agreed to it. That it would be fun to move in together. I expected it to happen or to think about moving together maybe 5 years from now and nothing sooner.
Bladez
Yo ugly
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Nelson
Speak
Bladez
Were u being serious about letting me live with you?
Nelson
Huh?
Bladez
Don’t huh me
Answer me
Nelson
U mean now?
Or future?
Or future future?
Bladez
When do you plan on moving out?
Nelson
Hopefully by the end of the year?
No date
Just when I get my promotion
Bladez
I would like to move out by the end of the year as well.
Nelson
Uh
Gonna hit u with reality but I got a spot and I dont know if I got room because of my brother.
When I meant live with me I meant like in the future. Maybe in like 5-10 years from now.
Bladez
Makes sense
Recruitment
Context: Every two weeks a tournament is held. The hardest part is making a team and practicing in order to play for the tournament and win. Punnet wins about 90% of the tournaments held but switches out people every tournament. He finds people who he thinks he can win with and aren’t busy. I’m a high-ranking player in the game but the tournament is held at a bad time for me to play.
Punnet
Yo Nelson
Nelson
Yes?
Punnet
Random question
I know u work and every thing
You wanna play a tournament this Saturday 4pm – 9pm?
Nelson
I don’t think I will be home around that time
I will have to let u know when we get closer to the tournament date
So put me at the bottom of your list
I’m going to visit my father for new years
I will probably stay over at his house
Punnet
ok ill message you again like on Thursday then
Nothing
ok
wait, just to have a idea what position would I play
Punnet
Your main position is open but I might need you in another one incase we don’t have someone for the other positions.
Nothing
I played practice matches with buffalo state college and it was fun
We played some other colleges
I didn’t lose a single time in my main position
Punnet
Did you sub in for someone? or playing on a team
Nothing
I subbed in for one of their players
Punnet
ah
nice
but yea
any of those positions are open
Nothing
it was a lot of fun but the team sucked
okay talk to you later
I like the formatting of this dialogue, it feels very clean to look at. The dialogue is also very human, it’s stuff that I’d hear from my day to day, which makes it easier to relate to.
I liked how you gave us the context of the dialogues at the beginning, it helped set up the scene and made us as readers kinda anticipate what was going to be discussed.
I like how you provided the context, it made the dialogue less confusing and also offered a bit of foreshadowing.