ENG1141
Creative Writing
Formal Critique

Reviewer’s Name: Jeffrey Tang
Title of Piece: Whatever Happened to _____?
Author’s Name: Anonymous

Plot:

Characters:

Point of View:

  • Very clear point of view. It starts with the writer and stays with the writer, consistently giving their thoughts and experiences.

Setting & Context:

  • There is a good amount of description for the setting given the story that this is telling. I like how it front loads a single paragraph of what the “world” is before immediately getting into the meat of the discussion.
  • Why does the story start in a car when it goes a different way?

Voice & Style:

  • Nice use of spacing to punctuate small beats in the story. Stale spacing can make for a boring read.
  • Why is there a donation box cutting off the story a couple paragraphs in?
  • Why add big quotes of writing from your own story?
  • Is there a need for as many commas as there were?

Dialogue:

  • The dialogue is well paced. It never felt like they were talking just for the sake of having dialogue in a story, there was a reason behind them talking.