For the upcoming task to refine one of the assignments, I am choosing the 1st unit assignment. The professor has pointed out some issues that might be difficult for a reader. The major issues to fix are to bring the structure in order. Also, the size of the introduction and core pieces are not proportional. It started in the beginning, where I was happy about how I managed to start the passage. I thought it was quite prosaic. I wish I could sell the first couple of paragraphs, but that is my humble opinion due to sporadic success. Of course, it is a joke. We are all here to study and not to create texts for sale. Overall, my excessive focus on the entry passage might have distracted me from the main script. 

This topic is really close to me and I was upset when the things I am telling about happened. I would like to bring this to the point when it is more readable.

I will try to reorganize the structure so a reader will have a more straightforward reading experience.