Demetrius Brown-Williams, Final Reflection 1st Draft

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   Gerardo Ramos

   December 8, 2021 at 3:20 pm

   What I enjoyed about reading the work was the honesty. How you was honest about how you felt about class and how you felt about yourself. I think you show that you found yourself to like writing when it is not part of the redundant work of the pass and when it has the freedom to let you write the way you want to and about topics you want to talk about. I think over the course of the semester you have become someone who has started to enjoy writing a bit instead of loathing it. Your research skills were developed and will continue to be used in future projects. As a suggestion for the piece in total is last paragraph go over it again to come off more smooth. First sentence starts off good, second sentence feels like you are going away from the obstacle you first mentioned, either mention another obstacle or rewrite it that its talking only about the time management issue. The fourth sentence has some clunkiness to it too, like change “obstacles like this allowed to learn what I was supposed to learn from this class” to something with a comma after allowed or taking out one learn to make it flow better something like ” obstacles like this was necessary in order to gain the true learning objectives of class.” Something like that, just more coherent and not using the same words so close to each other. In all the rest of the reflection I think is good. You talk about your journey and the class in a meaningful way.

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