[Justyn]

Andrew, I feel that all of you skecthes were success full . Your legato thumbnails are calming, flowing , mellow. They have a great sense of continuity and they have no jagged or sharp edges , as I said, they flow. Your Staccato thumbnails are very jagged and very sharp. They really capture the staccato aspect of the music . If I had to choose an “unsuccesful” thumbnail it would be the bottom right staccato thumbnail because I think the extra lines are a little too much.

[Errol]

Oscar your legato gives off a maelstrom feeling i feel if it was in blue it might get off a depressing aura so you might want to be careful with the colors you chose or the amount of contrast you put into it.

[Jenna Spevack]

Jeddy: Please go through the lecture and review the past student examples. You will want to fully develop your patterns and work with the grid to create a unified comp. What I see here is an illustration using a number of patter pieces– not the goal, but a good experiment. I suggest restricting the number of pieces to 1 or 2 staccato and 1 or 2 legato — fully develop them and then rotate, resize, flip and repeat these pieces to create a mashup.

Post your work in progress at the end of class here:
http://openlab.citytech.cuny.edu/groups/adv1100/forum/topic/class-7-end-of-class-mash-up-sketches/

[Jenna Spevack]

Sean, these look like a good start! Glad you got them up. Work on your legato patterns a bit more– stretch out the lines. They should feel more like hmmm.. pouring glue or stretching out bubble gum. This is a sound that is slow and long and stretched out.

Now is the time to start developing them further.. Refer to the Lecture/Lab for references:
http://profspevack.com/designcolor/2012/09/class-7/

[Justyn]

Wanda , I found your thumbnails very interesting . Your thumbnails can easily be identified as a legato and stacatto just by looking at them. I think your work is very succesful. Your staccato thumbnails are very eye catching and your legato thumbnails are very mellow and flowing. Your thumbnails are very psychedelic, “trippy” in a sense. Great Work.

[Jenna Spevack]

((This critique is now closed. Post any questions to the Attendance and HELP topic.))

Everyone should now be at the Lecture and then working on the Lab work:
http://profspevack.com/designcolor/2012/09/class-7/

[Errol]

Tiffany the second one to the right stands out to me it reminds me of a labyrinth and i think you should incorporate it into the final ink pieces.

[ligiaoro]

OMG SORRY MY COMPUTER GOT CRAZY CUZ I HAD MY AUTOCAD PROGRAM OPEN SORRY …… so i hope im not too late ……………………. Bites the Dust was easier because of the quick beat. On the other-hand Summertime was calm and slow, so it took me a while to find different patterns to express it .

[Jenna Spevack]

Ligia: These are lovely. The legato seem less developed than the staccato and offer less variety of weight. I’d continue to work with them more before finalizing your mashup. Also, I’ve opened this topic back up again, so please be sure to comment on your colleagues’ work, following the guidelines in my first post.