Writing this narrative from the start of the draft to now showed me as a writer how I have a good plot but I get side tracked. I start to talk about a different topic or move onto the next important event. Its my story and I write it as if others really know what’s going on. I don’t really tend to go into so much detail. However I did enjoy the fact that other people can comment and help me fix the mistakes that i don’t tend to see, to me it might look good due to my bias but when someone tells me to fix something it helps me better understand how as a writer i need to improve where to them as a reader they feel lost or feel like im skipping events that should be included. Overall I did enjoy this assignment as i got to talk about something that I view important. 

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