From the Feedback, I got back from my classmate and the professor. I need to use more transition words when starting a sentence and I need to remove the last sentence because It has my opinion when it should not.
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It’s not really a matter of using or not using transition words. It’s more about how you lead the reader from one section to another. It’s not bad as it is; it’s simply abrupt in a couple of spots. And good about the last sentence — it’s hard not to leave a parting word, isn’t it? 😀