Category: Portrait Revision Memo

One of the things I need to do is revise to add more details to the conclusion paragraphs. So the audience can have a better understanding. For example, my title … Read More

One thing I want to revise most is make the sequence of events be structured better. Some parts can get confusing because within the story I go back and forth … Read More

I got really helpful feedback from the professor. She mentioned that I did well when I explained the acronym “PR.” She gave me some title and organization suggestions that allowed … Read More

I read the feedback that was given to me by Professor Blain I agreed with what she said. She pointed out all my grammatical mistakes (which I had a lot … Read More

Both my classmate Jonathan and professor Blain mentioned how I could be more specific and explicitly narrate the scene where I wanted to go to a bakery but got disappointed … Read More

I really enjoyed reading the feedback from Prof Blain. I do agree with her feedback. In all my essays I struggled with the organization of them in the way of … Read More

Based on the feedback received, there’s a few things that I’ll keep my focus on. First I need to be specific on the word choice I’ve used. Following a personal … Read More

For my portrait of the word revision , I will absolutely revise some of the phrasing I used after receiving comments that it is unneeded or that there are other … Read More