I really enjoyed reading the feedback from Prof Blain. I do agree with her feedback. In all my essays I struggled with the organization of them in the way of what exactly goes where. I also liked the corrections she pointed out as to me writing things in the present when its a story from the past. I can see the mistakes in some paragraphs where i get carried away with writing and not realizing the present language that isn’t needed. I really enjoyed the feedback of adding more detail to the story i just didn’t know if i should , i didn’t know if i already did add to much detail to the story , i didn’t know when was enough. I thought i did a worser job in this essay but Prof Blains feedback is amazing and just makes me feel good overall