For your ninth post, you will be posting below a rough draft of your first Reflective Annotated Bibliography entry.
In particular, you will post the SUMMARY and RHETORICAL ANALYSIS of your first resource.
You may select any of your three resources for this first entry. Do not worry if you are unsure if what you produce is “correct.” This is JUST a rough draft! We will be going over them on Wednesday.
Refer to this handout for a very detailed overview of how to write your summary and rhetorical analysis: Structure of Unit 2 Reflective Annotated Bibliography Assignment.
Remember the following:
- In your summary you are just providing an overview of the resource, the kinds of information it includes, and what one might learn by consuming it. Your summary should capture the most important points the author makes relating to your research question. You most likely will not be able to talk about all of the information included in the resource.
- In your rhetorical analysis, you are evaluating how effective YOU think the resource is at achieving its purpose (to inform, to persuade, and/or to entertain) and reaching its
intended audience. Please incorporate AT LEAST ONE QUOTATION in your rhetorical analysis. Refer to this handout from class: How to Effectively Incorporate a Quotation into Academic Writing
You can also refer to the sample student writing we went over in class, keeping in mind that this sample writing has both strengths and weaknesses:
- Sample RAB Entry
- SAMPLE RHETORICAL ANALYSIS (Note: This example does not include the summary or key quotes section.)
The summary and rhetorical analysis should be at least 400 words. The summary should be about 1-2 paragraphs, and the rhetorical analysis should be about 2-3 paragraphs.
POST YOUR ENTRY BY 2 PM ON WEDNESDAY, 10/25. WE WILL BE DOING A PEER REVIEW ACTIVITY WITH YOUR ENTRIES, SO IT IS VITAL YOU COMPLETE THIS ASSIGNMENT. IF YOU DO NOT COMPLETE IT, YOU WILL NOT BE ABLE TO PARTICIPATE IN THE ACTIVITY, AND YOU WILL LOSE THE POINTS.
Topic: How did Israel vs. Palestine start? Who’s at fault? Is there any sort of Bias in the media/social media leading people to pick a certain side in the Israeli-Palestinian war?
“How the Israeli-Palestinian Conflict Began | History.” YouTube, uploaded by History, 1 June 2018, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bno1m1zhIWs
This YouTube video goes through how the current conflict between Israel and Palestine started, why it started and the reason why things haven’t been settled to this day. It begins by stating that Israel is the only Jewish nation in the world, and it didn’t officially exist until 1948, since then, the lives of innocent people have been profoundly impacted and altered by the tragic events due to “a dispute over land, political control and resources”. Though the actual conflict started in 1948, the history behind this episode goes back thousands and thousands of years; both Jewish and Arabs have deep relationships to this land religiously and culturally starting with the founding father of both religions, Abraham. In 1000 BCE, the Israelite monarchy was formed, and a Jewish empire was shaped. Over the years, the land was conquered by many different empires and nations, but the fact that this land was formerly Jewish land, somehow gave Israel a reason to be an independent state; that’s when the United Nations (an International Organization founded in 1945 with its primary goals being maintaining international peace and security) decided to partition Palestine into two, also known as the Resolution 181.
The Resolution 181 segmented Palestinian land into two countries, the Jewish state of Israel and Arab state of Palestine, however, though Israel fully agreed to the partition, Arab leaders and governments were extremely against it, still, ultimately, the Resolution 181 took effect. Right then, violence unfolded.
Key quotes:
“… many Arab residents thought the partition unfairly favored the Jewish population”
“…the Arab League, a group of surrounding Arab countries, rejected the partition and attacked. Israel fought back, and after more than nine months of conflict, its armed forces occupied much of the land designated to become the Arab state of Palestine.”
“…approximately 720,000 Arabs fled or were expelled from their homes…”
This YouTube channel uses illustrations and timelines to convey its topics into an easily comprehensible source of information. The video constantly highlights important facts by using boxes filled with key words that trigger interest and engagement in viewers. Its animation allows readers to understand the geographical part of this matter as the timeline explains the history behind this long-going conflict. The narrator is also very expressive, clear and straight to the point, making the video entertaining rather than boring. The information in the video is not too complex nor professional, however, the topic is very sensitive, the illustration can be very sensitive, therefore, the intended audience would be high school students and older. This YouTube channel “History” is an internet version of the TV Channel “History”. Its YouTube Channel is followed by over 12 million people (about twice the population of Arizona) and overall, ” HISTORY, now reaching more than 98 million homes, is the leading destination for award-winning original series and specials that connect viewers with history in an informative, immersive, and entertaining manner across all platforms. The network’s all-original programming slate features a roster of hit series, epic miniseries, and scripted event programming.”. This provides a trustworthy source of informational entertainment in the media.
Hi, Adriano,
Good work here. I just have some comments on your rhetorical analysis to help tighten it up a bit:
Jack Ewing“In Norway, the Electric Vehicle Future Has Already Arrived” Published by the New York Times. Online Newspaper Article. https://www.nytimes.com/2023/05/08/business/energy-environment/norway-electric-vehicles.html?searchResultPosition=1
The article written by Jack Ewing, published in the New York Times, provides insights into Norway’s ongoing transition. It discusses the growing impact of electric vehicles are creating nowadays in that country. But before delving into details, Ilet me introduce who Jack Ewing along with a few of his former articles. Jack is a journalist with more than 40 years, accumulated these years in Germany and Europe before joining the New York Times. He is the writer of a mass of articles and the most crucial creation is “Faster, Higher, Farther: How One of the World’s Largest Automakers Committed a Massive and Stunning Fraud.”, a book that covers one of the biggest scandals in the automobile industry, reviewed by a considerable number of authors and readers.
Returning to the article’s focus, Norway has experienced significant changes in various aspects. It reports on how Norway began promoting electric vehicles in the 1990s to support. later the policies supporting electric vehicles started to grow exponentially until today when Battery-powered vehicles are exempted from value-added, import taxes and highway tolls. The government also promoted the construction of fast charging stations.
As a result of all these policies last year 80 percent of new-car sales in Norway were electric, putting the country at the vanguard of the shift to battery-powered mobility. It also has made Norway an example of how the electric vehicle revolution changes the environment, workers, and life in general. The city is also quieter as noisier gasoline and diesel vehicles are scrapped. Oslo’s greenhouse gas emissions have fallen 30 percent since 2009, yet there has not been mass unemployment among gas station workers and the electrical grid has not collapsed.
Edwing interviewed individuals working in the vehicle transportation field as mechanics, and the report is that this transition only creates new opportunities for new jobs. This happens too because the classic cars will stay a lot longer so the number of employment in that field will not change for a couple of years to come. Ewing also interviewed Sirin Hellvin Stav, Oslo’s vice mayor for environment and transport, and highlighted in this article “Ms. Stav, vice mayor said, ‘Electric vehicles are part of a broader plan by Oslo to reduce its carbon dioxide emissions to almost zero by 2030. All city buses will be electric by the end of the year.’”. This suggests that the impact of electric vehicles has been so substantial that it has even influenced the shift to electric public transportation. Nonetheless as shown in the article the government is still worried about the pollution that these cars driving on the roads. The problem is that the rubber meets the road. Oslo’s air has unhealthy levels of microscopic particles generated partly by the abrasion of tires and asphalt. Electric vehicles, which account for about one-third of the registered vehicles in the city but a higher proportion of traffic, may even aggravate that problem.
In my view, the policies adopted by Norway should serve as a model for other financially capable countries. Higly number of countries could afford this transition but we can see that Norway started early with this support and that is the first step toward those achievements. Quieter and cleaner cities or working towards them should be a standard in first-world countries but many of them are treating it as a senseless investment.
Hi, Bjorni,
Good work here. My only comment is that this all reads like a long summary. Remember that for each resource you need to write both a summary and a rhetorical analysis.
My suggestion would be to shorten what you have written above, and then use what is leftover to create a rhetorical analysis. For your rhetorical analysis, you are going to want to consider questions like the following:
Remember that for your rhetorical analysis, you are analyzing and evaluating your source. You are going to want to focus on questions such as (keep in mind that you do not necessarily need to answer ALL of these questions–just the ones that seem appropriate to you):
“The importance of muscle architecture in biomechanical reconstructions of extinct animals: a case study using Tyrannosaurus rex” by Karl T. Bates and Peter L. Falkingham, 20 August 2018. https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/full/10.1111/joa.12874
The article starts by explaining that paleontologists and evolutionary biologists hope to understand how extinct organisms interacted with others, their environments and how they lived. It transitions into the advancements of computational technology which have made it easier to study extinct organisms using fossils. Afterwards it gets into the studies done by other researchers regarding the muscle fibers of the T. rex and its bite force; more specifically the differences in calculations between Bates & Falkingham and Gignac & Erickson. Even though they used the same methodological approach to calculate the tyrannosaurus rex’s bite force their results were drastically different, and although Bates & Falkingham presented a range of predictions between 29,510N and 53,737N in case of inaccuracies—Gignac & Erickson produced a result outside of this range, at 24,272N. The article begins to address and summarize the purpose of the study, which is to investigate the cause of the contrasting results in bite force predictions. The contrasting results lie within disagreements regarding muscle fiber length and architecture. The readers are introduced to some mathematical equations and what the numbers would mean when input into the equations as well as what the named researchers did with those equations. It provides an explanation given by Gignac & Erickson as to why their prediction was so much lower than that of Bates & Falkingham but none of those factors explain why their study resulted in a significantly lower bite force. There are discrepancies in Gignac & Erickson’s math that resulted in a lower prediction of the T. rex’s bite force even though they used larger numbers than that of Bates & Falkingham. The approaches of both B&F and G&E are explained and corrected with more accurate bite force predictions such as 65,163N for G&F and 25,921N for B&F. It is then further broken down by other experts such as John Hutchinson and Vivian Allen in the conclusion of the article.
The article is definitely not going to reach a broad audience with the terminology used throughout it. It reaches its target audience of other paleontologists, evolutionary biologists and other people who may be interested in these topics and fields of work. The article is a lengthy piece with multiple citations spread across each section of the research paper. Each paragraph contains a ton of citations and names, making the article appear longer than it really is which may intimidate readers who might not be acquainted with studies like this. It provides a lot of detailed explanations for the subjects it discusses and its overall topic as well. As it has a lot of citations and goes in depth with its explanations, I believe it does a great job at informing and convincing readers about the importance of muscle architecture and biomechanical reconstruction.
From this article I learned a lot of new terminology in paleontology and evolutionary biology with the complex terms used and more accurate information regarding the T. rex. According to Karl T. Bates and Peter L. Falkingham, “As a result the predicted force at posterior bite positions using the initial model inputs of Gignac & Erickson (2017) has more than doubled, rising from 24 272 N (Fig. 2) to 65 163 N (Fig. 5). Deriving fibre lengths for pennate muscles using our new data (Fig. 3) results in an increase in fibre lengths in the model of Bates & Falkingham (2012), and therefore a decrease in muscle physiological cross-sectional areas and subsequently muscle force. As a result, the predicted force at posterior bite positions using the initial model inputs of Bates & Falkingham (2012) has reduced by approximately 45%, from 44 940 N to 25 921 N (Fig. 5).” (Bates & Falkingham) The quote gives accurate calculations for the T. rex’s bite force based on the methodological approaches used by the other researchers. They also use terminology I had to look up because I didn’t fully understand it when I read the article. As seen though, the T. rex could have had a bite force between 25,000N and 65,200N.
Hi, Christian. A lot of good work here, but remember to clearly delineate which part is the SUMMARY and which part is the RHETORICAL ANALYSIS. According to my reading, the first and last paragraphs seem like summary, and the middle paragraph seems like rhetorical analysis.
For the summary–remember that it does not need to be extremely long. 1-2 paragraphs. I actually do not think you need to include as much information as you do in the summary paragraphs. Feel free to include only what you think is most interesting.
For your rhetorical analysis, I would ask that you go a bit deeper. Keep in mind the following:
Kreps, Sarah, et al. “Exploring the artificial intelligence ‘Trust paradox’: Evidence from a survey experiment in the United States.” PLoS ONE, vol. 18, no. 7, 18 July 2023, p. e0288109. Gale In Context: Opposing Viewpoints, link.gale.com/apps/doc/A757630433/OVIC?u=cuny_nytc&sid=bookmark-OVIC&xid=26e98091.
This academic journal discusses Artificial Intelligence and whether people will trust it as the rapid development of AI advances even more through survey experiments. The authors first introduce the “trust paradox” in the development of Artificial Intelligence, which, as stated, is “the public’s puzzling willingness to support or use AI-enabled technologies which they do not trust.” it then addresses the question, “Why would the public support the use of AI-enabled technologies it does not trust?” directing to the five hypotheses. The first hypothesis dives into the varying levels of trust and support of AI-enabled technology that utilizes FOMO, or “fear of missing out,” to persuade individuals to trust AI-enabled technologies for potential benefits overlooking risks. The second hypothesis explains how AI-enabled technologies’ overall benefits trump the risks and flaws that may arise while bringing up how people should offset their perception of distrust and enjoy the benefits. The third hypothesis discusses how people might support AI-enabled technologies if they allow a viable alternative approach to human labor and acknowledge that AI-enabled concerns can potentially replace these human jobs. The fourth hypothesis discusses technological optimism and how individuals believe that future iterations of AI-enabled technology will improve to minimize harm, even though they face present risks. The fifth and final hypothesis discusses how transparency is vital to gaining people’s trust. People do not trust AI-enabled technology because they feel left in the dark. The lack of explanation in technology creates potential bias in AI.
In the academic journal, the authors delve into the complex and pressing issue of why the public would support the use of AI-enabled technologies that they do not trust. The authors present five hypotheses to address this question, each supported by detailed paragraphs thoroughly explaining how and why the public should help AI-enabled technologies. The journal does an excellent job of presenting these hypotheses in a structured and organized manner, making it easy for readers to understand the central question and the arguments presented. The authors consider possible counterclaims to their statements, demonstrating their willingness to consider opposing views and acknowledge the issue’s complexity.
Hi, Howard,
Remember to clearly delineate which part of your entry is the summary and which part is the rhetorical analysis. If I am not mistaken, the first paragraph is your summary and the second is your rhetorical analysis.
My main comment for you is that you need to expand your rhetorical analysis with further detail. Consider the following:
Topic: Why is the universe continuously expanding? Is the expansion of the universe slowing down or speeding up? Will the universe ever stop expanding?
“Will the Universe Ever Stop Expanding” by Scientific American uploaded By Sarah Scoles on August 29, 2023 https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/will-the-universe-ever-stop-expanding1/
This article by Sarah Stoles talks about other trusted peoples theories and gives us good evidence and reasoning to believe that the universe could be either slowing down or speeding up but she says it will always be expanding, she starts off by talking about the night sky looks static, but the universe is constantly expanding, and everything is moving away from us. Scientists don’t know whether the universe will continue to expand indefinitely or if it will keep accelerating to infinitum. The balance of dark matter, dark energy, and regular matter and energy in space will determine the universe’s ultimate end state. Scientists have known about cosmic expansion for about 100 years, but they didn’t realize that the universe was speeding up. The explanation for this flip is unsatisfying, but it is caused by the presence of “dark energy.” Dark energy pushes everything apart and tugs against gravity. The more space there is, the more things get pushed away from each other. Scientists have several methods of measuring the Hubble constant, but the results they have found do not match the Hubble constant that other teams have calculated based on data from the universe’s early years. This could mean that scientists do not understand the universe’s evolution. Scientists have a story of the universe’s expansion that makes sense, but the narrative does not quite add up. If dark energy works differently than we assume, we might be heading toward a big rip or a big freeze. Paul Steinhardt, a theoretical physicist at Princeton University, says dark energy could be time-dependent in a unique way, leading to a cyclical universe. Freedman says the new James Webb Space Telescope might provide some answers, but she thinks science proceeds in this way.
Key quotes:
“That story of what got us to this place will then determine our ultimate destiny—how the universe keeps growing, keeps changing,”
“Either way, the answer to the original question is, yes, you’re expanding forever,”
“By the end of the last century we start realizing that the universe isn’t just expanding, It’s accelerating its expansion.”
This article uses different theories from different of astronomers who all believe there could be numerous things happening with the expansion of the universe. The article appears to target a more specific audience, including both the scientifically inclined and those with a more intrested in the subject. Sarah Scoles uses more advanced words and terms making complex concepts more understandable for a more targeted audience. The author aims to inform us about the universe, from students and educators to science enthusiasts and the public. The core of the article relies heavily on logical appeals. Sarah Scoles presents a well-structured argument, beginning with an introduction to how we see the universe from our perspective and then moving on to explain everything using other astronomers theories. She provides detailed evidence, such as recent discoveries and data from trusted sources, to support her claims. By citing experts and research findings, the author establishes the scientific credibility of her narrative. The logical progression of the article serves to educate and inform the audience. Sarah also effectively uses persuasive techniques to engage the audience. These techniques include questions throughout the article questions are used to prompt readers to consider the vastness and mysteries of the cosmos stimulating their curiosity. Another technique is call to action the conclusion encourages readers to engage with the subject further, either through scientific exploration or even simple stargazing.
Really good work here, Taghmar. My main comment is about your rhetorical analysis. While I though this was strong, I thought it could be further strengthened by the incorporation of quoted evidence. For example, when you say that author makes “complex concepts more understandable for a more targeted audience,” this would be a great point at which to bring in quoted evidence. You can then analyze this evidence to fully show HOW the author makes a complex concept accessible. It might also be a good idea to quote something from the “call to action” in the conclusion, and then to analyze this to explain what sort of effect it is intended to have on readers.
Are Electric Cars REALLY Better for the Environment? by: Nolan Skyes on Donut Media YouTube channel : Are Electric Cars REALLY Better for the Environment? – YouTube
In the video “Are Electric Cars REALLY Better for the Environment” By Nolan Skyes is broken up into three main parts about the topic. The first part is “Battery Production,” it talks about how electric car battery production is worse than the production of gas cars because the lithium in the batteries needs to be mined and that process leads to more carbon emissions. The second part talks about the “Environmental Footprint” of electric cars and how the process of getting lithium for the batteries decreases the water supply. The last part “Production” tackles both electric cars and gas car production and compares which release more carbon dioxide in the air.
Nolan Skyes is a car enthusiast who makes videos for donut media, a YouTube group that makes content around cars. Nolan attitude towards the topic is neutral and the topic is aimed at the viewers of the channel primarily and people in general. This video’s purpose is to conclude on electric cars’ impact on the climate compared to gas cars. He used logos to inform people on questions around electric cars and if they are better for the environment than gas cars. The visual genre of the video uses pictures to match the topic being discussed and uses comparisons to show how big the carbon emissions are.
The author talks about how the mining process of lithium to make the batteries for electric cars leches off the water supply, it hard for the people living near the mines to water their crops. And he concluded that the production of electric cars releases more carbon than gas cars, but during a certain period gas cars will release more carbon than EVs cause of the process to mine for oil and refine it to make gasoline.
What I got from this video is that electric cars are greener for the environment, but not fully green, electric cars are still evolving, and car companies are still thinking of new innovations to make the production of EVs and mining of minerals more efficient.
Hi, Abdou,
Remember to clearly delineate which paragraphs are the summary and which are the rhetorical analysis.
It seems to me that the first paragraph is your summary and the last three are your rhetorical analysis.
To add some detail and specificity to your rhetorical analysis, consider the following questions:
Topic- How Does Social Media Affect A Person’s Mental Health?
“Does Social Media Make Teens Unhappy? It May Depend On Their Age. By Virginia Hughes Published By The New York Times. Online Newspaper Article, 22 June 2023, https://www.nytimes.com/2022/03/28/science/social-media-teens-mental-health.html?smid=url-share
The Article talks about how scientific discussion has questioned whether social media is harming people of all ages. So a group of scientists conducted a multiyear study that provided the relationship between social media and adolescents mental health. But before this scientist first conducted a survey to provide some background research, uncovered was that social media in fact did affect the life satisfaction of ages 11-13 for girls, and 14 to 15 for boys and then again for both sexes around age 19. But there was still the unanswered question as to why this is. The scientists believe that in the U.S Nine out of 10 American Teens have smartphones and they are spending countless hours a day on it. The Researchers also found a trend that over the past two decades the rates of depression, anxiety and suicide has increased drastically. But what the scientists are leaning more towards is that social media may have an indirect effect on happiness by displacing other activities meaning that people are losing sleep, not exercising, staying inside, and are not talking to people directly in person as these are all crucial of both physical and mental health. After the survey the study was conducted and it showed that during early adolescence, heavy use of social media predicted lower life-satisfactions one year later. But in the end it is difficult to see if the cause is social media or just life changing at a rapid pace because of how adolescents are constantly changing their lives such as starting college, starting a new job or living independently for the first time.
I believe that this article is appealing to anyone who is interested in learning about the psychology behind social media and I believe people will find this interesting since social media is a big part of the lives of those who have smartphones which most people do. The New York Times is a very reliable resource where top writers are able to write articles to a huge audience about a topic they are fond of. The purpose of this article was to provide a quick summary of a journal study that was conducted by top scientists in a more digestible style. The author wants readers to see how social media is a variable on how people of all ages develop mental health problems. The evidence provided statistics, official surveys and interviews from the scientist who was a part of the study. I believe that the author showed how social media has impacted the world because so many of us need phones and these apps are easily accessible by just a few clicks. I agree with the fact that social media can take over and take the place of other activities and that this distraction causes us to lose our motivation and deteriorate our mental health rapidly especially if our brains are still developing when we are young. The author also made a good point that it may also be a combination of other things that are happening in someone’s individual life, for example in an adolescent life. There is constant change that can also lead to mental health and maybe they are just using social media to cope with real life. This opposing view is very troubling to study because it depends on the individual.
I think that you did good work here, George. My main comments are about your rhetorical analysis:
Roegan, Joe. “Randall Carlson & Graham Hancock on Lost Technology and the Great Pyramids.” YouTube, YouTube, 10 Nov. 2022, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nAk8MagnDsY.
Summary: In this video the pyramids become the topic of discussion. Graham Hancock begins by talking about the beauty of the blocks that the Pyramids were built. He begins to question the way that archeologists depict how these stones were moved. The stones were cut from a quarry 500 miles away and supposedly were dragged using water. He then explains how he doesn’t know and how no one might ever know how these blocks were moved and used meters up in the sky. They speak more on the production of pyramids and the science which they believe does not add up.
Key Quotes: “When we talk about these ancient technologies, if were only for a mirror reflection of ourselves we could overlook it completely.” (Randall)
“For people who are curious about this or maybe even skeptical, consider the massive change nuclear power provided us” (Joe)
Rhetorical Analysis:
The Joe Rogan Experience is run by theorist Joe Rogan. He brings experts and well qualified individuals to talk on controversial topics which they study. In this Podcast he brings on Randall Carlson and Graham Hancock, both theorists and experts on ancient times. Graham Hancock promotes pseudoscience theories involving ancient civilizations and hypothetical lost lands. Joe begins the discussion by saying “The Great Pyramid of Giza is probably the most stunning of all these ancient structures. And the stones are immense and some of them were cut from a quarry that’s hundreds of miles away, how do you think they did that.” By starting off like this it gives a broader and more open discussion where Graham and Randall can begin to give Joe their insights on the subject. The viewers can get a chance to hear two experts on these topics speak their piece and gain knowledge on how they think. It was such a great start by not giving his opinion on the topic, so the audience didn’t side with him and rather let the experts speak their ideas on the question he asked.
The overall idea of the show is to give people insight or other points of view from experts on certain controversial topics. The broadness of Joe gives the audience the chance to decide for themselves what they choose to believe after listening to the podcast. I believe that adding their own evidence and examples aided the theory that they had laid down infront of the audience. Rather than just stating their opinion and letting it be they gave examples and even modern examples which others can relate to. “For people who are curious about this or maybe even skeptical, consider the massive change nuclear power provided us” (Joe) Jor says this at the end of the discussion to leave the watchers with an open mind. Giving them something recent and that causes enough change in so little time will have viewers guessing and wondering that these 3 guys may have been on to something.
Good work, Sonkerry. My main comment has to do with the second paragraph of your rhetorical analysis. This second paragraph seems to repeat a lot of information already stated in the first paragraph. In addition, I think you could have more fully provided context for and explained the quotation you include in this second paragraph. I was a bit confused as to what point Rogan was trying to make.
I would have also liked you to make a clearer statement of what you think the purpose of this video is. Do you think that it is just trying to be informative and entertaining, or do you think there is a persuasive element to it as well?
Finally, what do you mean by “Graham Hancock promotes pseudoscience theories.” Do you mean he studies them? If so, say that instead.
“The Great American Car Dealership Conspiracy” YouTube video uploaded by Donut Media https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z_DovYfDWsA&t=70s
In this video, we can see the presenter Nolan talking about what happened in the last couple of years in the car market where we found huge markups over the MSRP from the dealers, He explains how the whole selling procedure works starting from the manufacture to the manufacture’s dealer to the consumer who comes at the end to buy the car and that’s it. Nolan goes deeper into details in how the price is being affected by the shortage of the materials, supply and demand, and for sure the dealer’s prices that are the biggest factor in making prices go crazy.
Nolan is a presenter at the Donut Media Group which by now they one of the biggest car enthusiasts in the US and also has one of the biggest fanbases out there for them. They are also well-known for giving true information that stands with proven facts and they do informative videos explaining mechanical stuff or car-related stuff videos too like our video here, Nolan in this video explains something that got my interest as it got his interest too so he would do a very well developed video explaining why we do see those huge markups in the car market and this video is mainly going for all car lovers out there and whoever needs to buy a car asap.
Key Quotes
“it’s illegal for manufacturers to sell cars directly”
“manufactures have to go for their dealers in order to sell their cars”
This video is a perfect video for those who have ever wondered why there something like markups or higher prices than the regular suggested prices, everything happens for a reason, and in our case cars went up in price starting exactly in the pandemic period and not only for the new cars but also for the used car market which had increased by 35% starting from 2020 and the main thing I learned from this video that although the markups idea started from 2016 but it only went on one car but the pandemic period made the markups go for all the cars.
Hi, Abdullaah,
My main comment is that you need to greatly expand your rhetorical analysis with more detail. Here is a list of questions you can keep in mind as you expand this rhetorical analysis.
“Universe Basics.” NASA, NASA, 4 May 2023, universe.nasa.gov/universe/basics/.
To start to talk about the beginning of the universe we have to talk about the big bang theory. The big bang theory says that around 13.8 billion years ago the universe started to expand. We still don’t know how or why but all of a sudden the universe started to expand, we just know it did. During the big bang is the the universe started to expand faster than the speed of light just for a fraction of a second. As soon as the expansion stopped “the energy driving it transferred to matter and light” all this extra energy made all the energy in the universe. At this point the universe was extremely hot (8 billion degrees Fahrenheit or 10 billion degrees Celsius) it was all made up of light and particles. A minute later the protons and neutrons started to collide and produced the earliest elements (hydrogen, helium, and traces of lithium and beryllium). The universe was still hot for thousands of years but around 380,000 years after the big bang, the universe had cooled enough that the atomic nuclei could capture electrons; this meant that most electrons now were bound into atoms. Slowly all the free electrons that scatter light started to clear up. The universe became transparent, and light could freely travel. Even after this the next 200 million years the universe remained dark. It was still filled with hydrogen atoms, helium, and trace amounts of heavier elements. There were gasses all around but the cooler areas of the universe had more dense clouds of gas. These clumps grew more massive and their gravity attracted additional matter. As they became denser, and more compact, the centers of these clumps became extremely hot and eventually the core became hot enough to cause nuclear fusion These were the first stars. Hundreds of millions of years, the first stars collected into the first galaxies. One billion years after the big bang stars and galaxies had transformed nearly all this gas, making the universe transparent and letting us see what we see today.
Key Quotes
“One second after the big bang, the universe consisted of an extremely hot (18 billion degrees Fahrenheit or 10 billion degrees Celsius) primordial soup of light and particles.”
“Around 380,000 years after the big bang, the universe had cooled enough that atomic nuclei could capture electrons, a period astronomers call the epoch of recombination.”
“The formation of these first atoms produced its own light. This glow, still detectable today, is called the cosmic microwave background. It is the oldest light we can observe in the universe.”
I think that this article was effective in informing. This article was made for anyone who wants to know more about our universe from middle school and up. It has the fundamental information broken down to 3 topics (basics building blocks forces). It is easy to understand and they have pictures to help you imagine the topics they are talking about. It’s written by NASA ( National Aeronautics and Space Administration). They are an agency funded by the United States for science and technology related to air and space. They are very trusted, they use evidence and credible scientific sourcing. For this article they used nine years of data from NASA’s Wilkinson Microwave Anisotropy Probe to create a detailed all-sky image of the cosmic microwave background of our universe 3.8 billion years ago.
Hi, Aryan. Good work here. My main comment is that you need to expand your rhetorical analysis.
Consider the following as you work to expand your rhetorical analysis:
“Elite lean athletes at sports high schools face multiple risks for mental health concerns and are in need of psychosocial support”
Sport, https://doi.org/10.1371/journal.pone.0284725.
SAMPLE RHETORICAL ANALYSIS:
The article written by Carolina Lundqvist, David P. Schary, Emelie Eklöf, Sofia Zand
and Jenny Jacobsson provides such valid information on mental health concerns for athletes. It discusses how the mental aspects of these athletes are being impacted on their transition to the next level, some transitioning from junior to senior year in highschool and others from highschool to college. It also discusses how due to these mental challenges athletes develop eating disorders, injuries, diminished social life, and terrible coordination between school and sports.
According to the Carolina Lundqvist, “study investigated perceived psychosocial needs that young elite lean sports athletes in a sports school find essential for their elite sports careers and transition from junior-to-senior sports. Results revealed an interplay between mental health, performance in school, and performance in sports, each of which influence each other in a reciprocal manner. Another notable finding in our study was the participants’ need to obtain a sustainable lifestyle that balanced sports, school, and other life responsibilities when living in a boarding school with no parents around. This was necessary to maintain their wellbeing and develop as a person and athlete. Consistent with findings in previous studies [4], results in this study showed that the athletes enrolled in sports high schools can become narrowly focused on performance requirements, resulting in a diminished social life, increased levels of stress, and undermined recovery. Performance demands in dual domains (ie, school and sports) required time-management skills, coping strategies, and the use of self-care behaviors to protect mental health and to manage the demands of school and sports.”
What I got from this is a flash back throughout my time playing basketball for my High school team I was pretty much obsessed with the sport, it took away my social time because I’ll just use that time trying to get better or in the gym and it made me develop some unhealthy habits. So I would like to know why athletes who are committed to a sport do not prioritize their mental health. Are we just too busy trying to achieve our goals or are we too distracted? What problem are we facing and how can we fix it? But thanks to this article I now know how and ehy these things occur to athletes and I’m now learning on ways to improve mental health.
Hi, Nathan,
First off, make sure that you also include a summary of your resource for every RAB entry.
I think you have a good start to your rhetorical analysis here, but make sure you are addressing the following when you write a rhetorical analysis:
Harris, William. “How the Big Crunch Theory Works.” HowStuffWorks Science, HowStuffWorks, 28 Sept. 2023, science.howstuffworks.com/dictionary/astronomy-terms/big-crunch.htm.
In the article by William Harris, he talks about how the universe is going to end if dark matter wins over gravity. He talks about the big crunch theory according to this theory the universe is going to stop expanding and gravity is going to start to pull everything together this will make the universe contract, falling inward into itself. It would make the universe rewind. Galaxies, stars, and all matter in the universe would get closer and closer together, leading to a high-density state just like how it looked in the early stages of the universe. This leads to another theory called the big bounce theory. This theory says after the big crunch the universe would collapse into an extremely hot and dense point, essentially making a “seed” from which a new universe could potentially form a new cosmic cycle, and the entire universe’s evolution would start anew. This theory is only possible if the universe’s expiation stops or slows down. cosmologists believe there is another type of matter that can’t be seen they call it dark matter. This dark matter may account for much more of the universe’s visible matter and may have enough gravity to stop, and then reverse, the expansion of the universe.
“If the theory holds true, the universe is like a giant soufflé. It starts out small, then expands as it heats up. Eventually, however, the soufflé cools and begins to collapse.”
“stars would meld together, causing all of space to become hotter than the sun. Eventually, stars would explode and black holes would emerge, slowly at first and then more rapidly.”
This article talks a lot about the universe not just about the big crunch theory. The purpose of this article is to inform. It goes into detail about gravity and how it affects the expansion of the universe. It also talks about the big bang and the role of dark energy. I think the audience for this article is made for high schoolers and older. It talks about complex topics like omega and the different shapes of the universe. I think this article is reliable, He uses a lot of scarce to back up his claims.
Hi, Aryan,
Thanks for this.
Two comments. The first–see if you can simplify the language in your summary a bit more. It feels rather closely allied to the original language of the source.
Second–you need to greatly expand your rhetorical analysis. Consider the following:
TOPIC
Solar eclipse. Do animals get affected by the solar eclipse? How does it work and why does it look the way it does? What happens when you look at a solar eclipse?
Source 1
Aug 17, 2017 #Educational #SolarEclipse #NationalGeographic
A total solar eclipse happens somewhere on Earth once every year or two. What is an eclipse? Learn more about how solar eclipses happen, the four types of eclipses, and how to view the sun safely if you’re within the path of totality.https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cxrLRbkOwKs
Summary
This YouTube video walks us through the solar eclipse process and helps us comprehend it better. This short film also provides viewers a better understanding of how everything works and how something so rare is seen. The video explains a lot about solar eclipses and provides a basic summary of what occurs when we stare at them and why they appear the way they do. It starts off with an explanation of how a solar eclipse works and what is required for the eclipse to actually happen. It explains why an eclipse occurs every year rather than every month, as well as the shadows cast by the moon as it orbits the Earth. There are four types of eclipses, each of which describes and illustrates how the moon passes in front of the sun. Shortly after they begin to explain that looking directly at the sun can permanently damage your eye. It shows how the specific eyeglasses are used and how they let us see the eclipse. One last piece of information that this video provides for the viewers is how different types of animals respond to the eclipse. There is a lot of research that has been done about the solar eclipse and how other things get affected by it.
Key quotes
“When the moon does eclipse the sun,it casts two types of shadows on Earth.”
“It’s estimated that in about a billion years, the moon will be too far away from Earth to completely cover the sun.”
Rhetorical Analysis
This YouTube video provides viewers with a very nice straightforward, informative, and thorough presentation to help them comprehend. It is highly kid-friendly, with no large vocabulary and an easy-to-understand description of how everything works. The narrator’s voice is patient, and she breaks down the material well. She also moves at a decent speed; it doesn’t feel like the video or the explanation is being rushed. Even if you don’t understand what a solar eclipse is, this video will help you understand it from the beginning. They answer a few smart questions that grab the viewers’ interest, and tell us a great and interesting fact about what happens during a solar eclipse. This channel is operated by people who research and help provide knowledge to others in order for them to have a more thorough understanding of a certain issue and how it works. This allows the person viewing to hear and see what is going on rather than spending hours reading and not knowing what is going on in the specific research topic.
TOPIC
Solar eclipse. Do animals get affected by the solar eclipse? How does it work and why does it look the way it does? What happens when you look at a solar eclipse?
Source 1
Aug 17, 2017 #Educational #SolarEclipse #NationalGeographic
A total solar eclipse happens somewhere on Earth once every year or two. What is an eclipse? Learn more about how solar eclipses happen, the four types of eclipses, and how to view the sun safely if you’re within the path of totality.https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cxrLRbkOwKs
Summary
This YouTube video walks us through the solar eclipse process and helps us comprehend it better. This short film also provides viewers a better understanding of how everything works and how something so rare is seen. The video explains a lot about solar eclipses and provides a basic summary of what occurs when we stare at them and why they appear the way they do. It starts off with an explanation of how a solar eclipse works and what is required for the eclipse to actually happen. It explains why an eclipse occurs every year rather than every month, as well as the shadows cast by the moon as it orbits the Earth. There are four types of eclipses, each of which describes and illustrates how the moon passes in front of the sun. Shortly after they begin to explain that looking directly at the sun can permanently damage your eye. It shows how the specific eyeglasses are used and how they let us see the eclipse. One last piece of information that this video provides for the viewers is how different types of animals respond to the eclipse. There is a lot of research that has been done about the solar eclipse and how other things get affected by it.
Key quotes
“When the moon does eclipse the sun,it casts two types of shadows on Earth.”
“It’s estimated that in about a billion years, the moon will be too far away from Earth to completely cover the sun.”
Rhetorical Analysis
This YouTube video provides viewers with a very nice straightforward, informative, and thorough presentation to help them comprehend. It is highly kid-friendly, with no large vocabulary and an easy-to-understand description of how everything works. The narrator’s voice is patient, and she breaks down the material well. She also moves at a decent speed; it doesn’t feel like the video or the explanation is being rushed. Even if you don’t understand what a solar eclipse is, this video will help you understand it from the beginning. They answer a few smart questions that grab the viewers’ interest, and tell us a great and interesting fact about what happens during a solar eclipse. This channel is operated by people who research and help provide knowledge to others in order for them to have a more thorough understanding of a certain issue and how it works. This allows the person viewing to hear and see what is going on rather than spending hours reading and not knowing what is going on in the specific research topic.
To expand your rhetorical analysis, consider the following:
Bias article:
https://www.baltimoresun.com/opinion/op-ed/bs-ed-op-827-cannabis-legal-maryland-colleges-20230825-aofah6nk6nd4ngdb2rtk4x6lem-story.html
Cannabis legalization in the United States has been a topic of great debate and change in these recent years. While it is now legal for people over the age of 21 to possess limited quantities of cannabis for recreational use, colleges and universities have maintained a strict position against its presence on campuses. This article aims to provide us with a biased statement of why cannabis may not be advantageous for college students in the United States, focusing on college campuses and the various effects it can have on academic performance and well-being of young adults.In the United States, cannabis laws vary from state to state, with some states legalizing recreational use. However, even in these states, most colleges and universities have banned cannabis on their campuses. This legalization creates a complex situation for college students, as they must navigate the conflict between state and federal laws. This can lead to potential legal issues and complications that college students can ill afford, especially when their primary focus should be on their education. The article states that many people have been misinformed that cannabis is often hailed as a stress-reliever while research says otherwise, particularly with prolonged and excessive use. Cannabis may temporarily alleviate stress or anxiety for some individuals, but its long-term effects can be damaging. Chronic cannabis use can lead to increased anxiety and can worsen stress levels, which are already elevated among college students due to their academic pressure. Cannabis use does not only make academic stress worse but there is a critical concern of the impact on cognitive function and academic performance for these young college students. Studies have consistently demonstrated that cannabis use impairs memory, attention, and problem-solving abilities. For college students who are expected to engage in rigorous academic activities, such cognitive deficits can be debilitating. The ability to learn, concentrate, and excel academically is essential for success in both college and life beyond it. Furthermore, cannabis use has been linked to poorer class attendance, lower grade point averages (GPA), and higher drop-out rates. This is absolutely alarming, as it directly affects a student’s educational achievements and prospects. College students who engage in regular and excessive cannabis use may find themselves falling behind in their studies and may even jeopardize their chances of successfully completing their degree. Overall the article just wants us to comprehend and understand the strict prohibition of cannabis on college campuses just wants an awareness of the detrimental effects cannabis can have on academic performance and overall well-being since college is a pivotal time for personal and academic development, and students must weigh the risks and benefits of cannabis use carefully if students are aiming to succeed in their education.
Rogan, Joe. “Sean Strickland on Using Fighting as an Outlet”. YouTube, YouTube, 6 July 2023, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pghq8viYXlk&t=103s.
Summary:
This YouTube video is a clip of a podcast called the Joe Rogan Experience. In this clip, the host Joe Rogan is discussing the effect of training martial arts on the youth and using martial arts as an outlet with the UFC middleweight champion Sean Strickland. Sean Strickland discusses his experience as a troubled child with a traumatic childhood and how fighting has saved his life and allowed him to cope with his harsh reality. He references an incident in boxing sparring when he was getting good work (beat up) from a boxer who was dealing with personal issues at the time. He explains how the spar allowed the man to let out his frustration and find solace in the gym to escape his problems. Sean Strickland relates to this and vouches for people with problems to train as he did.
Key quotes:
Rhetorical Analysis:
The podcast is an outlet where professionals from different fields and influencers/celebrities come to discuss their path to success and talk about the issues in today’s society. In this particular segment of episode 143 of the MMA show with Sean Strickland, their attitudes towards fighting and training were positive, and they spoke of the community in gyms in a positive light. Joe Rogan is a lifelong martial artist and commentator for the sport of MMA in the UFC organization and Sean Strickland is a professional martial artist with 20 years of experiences and accolades such as being world champion in the middleweight (185 lbs.) division. Their audience is the casual fight fan and/or podcast enjoyer who are most likely fans of the UFC or of Joe Rogan as he is a big podcaster who is prevalent on social media. The purpose of his clip is to highlight one of the benefits of fighting and training martial arts for the average person. The podcast is effective with its focus on the people who are speaking having clear audio and the video shows us facial expressions and actions of the speaker during recording to give us more insight on their focus of the topic being discussed and their feelings towards it. Since it was an open discussion between two individuals, there wasn’t any clear-cut evidence provided but I feel that their personal accounts as experts in the field can suffice for that. All in all, I believe the opinions of these experts and lifelong participants help to give insight on the life of people who practice martial arts and overall contribute to the pro side of the argument of whether or not these types of people are good for communities.
“Human performance psychology.” Human Performance. (2023, August 3). https://humanperformance.ie/what-is-human-performance-psychology/#:~:text=The%20Work%20of%20The%20Performance%20Psychology%20Coach&text=As%20such%2C%20performers%20can%20develop,%2C%20confidence%2C%20cognition%20and%20perception.
Summary:
This article explores the field of human performance psychology, focusing on its core aspects and applications in various domains such as business, sports, and careers. The article looks at the history of performance psychology, which dates back to the1800s in Europe. The term “performance psychology” is used interchangeably with terms like performance science, peak performance, and human performance. The article highlights that performance psychology involves many different areas like Physiology, Biomechanics, Psychology, Sociology, and more.
A definition of performance psychology is presented, covering psychological fundamentals, transfer effects, and optimization of the capability to achieve demanding tasks. The psychological components of performance, including emotion, perception, action, and cognition, are explored, with a focus on their role in achieving optimal results. The work of a performance psychology coach is highlighted, displaying the use of interventions such as meditation, psychological skills training, and cognitive-behavioral therapy to enhance performance. The article can serve as a valuable resource for individuals going through stress, anxiety, or the pressure to succeed. By exploring Human Performance Psychology, readers can gain insights into the psychological aspects of their challenges. The article offers practical techniques taken from well-known psychological principles, providing a roadmap for managing stress and achieving goals. It emphasizes that many experiences, whether in sports, work, or personal activities, have psychological components that you can grasp and make use of. The conclusion touches on addressing the pursuit of perfection and its impact on mental health, emphasizing the importance of self-compassion. It also highlights the role of a performance psychologist in helping individuals build stable selves under the demands of their work or activities. Overall, success may come when individuals are focused in their work so that they can inherent enjoyment rather than obsessing over specific results.
Key Quotes:
“Performance psychology is a subdivision of psychology that examines psychological factors influencing optimal human performance. It is the practical application of psychological principles in domains such as sport, business, and creative pursuits.”
“The Performance Psychology Coach examines mental factors influencing the optimal performance of individuals, utilizing established psychological principles of performance to assist professionals and novices in producing consistently superior results in their chosen field.”
Rhetorical analysis:
The article “What Is Human Performance Psychology?” effectively informs its audience about the field of performance psychology, its history, and how it is used. The author’s purpose is to educate readers on the core aspects of human performance and how psychological principles can be applied to achieve success in various fields. The article successfully achieves its informative goal by defining what performance psychology is, then takes you on a trip through its history, and finally, shows you how it’s used in different areas.
I believe that the author uses strategies to achieve his purpose by posing questions at the beginning, engaging the reader’s curiosity and creating a sense of inquiry. This technique encourages the audience to continue reading in search of answers. For example, the author asks, “What is human performance psychology? What are the core aspects of human performance?” This approach effectively draws the reader into the topic and sparks the reader’s interest. Moreover, the article adds a historical perspective that enhances the article’s credibility. Quoting the study by Norman Triplett in 1898 adds depth to the discussion, and shows that people have been interested in performance psychology for a really long time. The historical context also helps establish the field’s legitimacy, making it clear that the study of human performance is not a passing trend but has roots in significant scientific inquiry.
This article works well because it covers performance psychology thoroughly, explaining everything from what it is and its terms to its history and how it’s used in real life. By addressing a wide range of readers, from athletes to business professionals, the article successfully educates and informs its diverse audience about the importance and relevance of performance psychology in various aspects of life and work.