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“Fewer police officers equals fewer opportunities for them to brutalize and kill people.” This really caught my attention because it is true, some police officers abuse their “power” and use it in the wrong.
I agree with you this also caught my attention as well about people with this power sometimes use it to abuse others.
One thing I do suggest is to shorten some run off sentences. Shorten some sentences then continue your thought onto another sentence instead of keeping it all in one.
“Fewer police officers equals fewer opportunities for them to brutalize and kill people.” This quote is true because few cops use their power wrong way that’s why I heat cops.
“Fewer police officers equals fewer opportunities for them to brutalize and kill people.” This quote is true because few cops use their power wrong way that’s why I heat cops.
“Fewer police officers equals fewer opportunities for them to brutalize and kill people.” I definitely understand what you are coming from, some cops feel like they so much power that they can do anything that they want
I strongly agree with you, racism 100% still exist in many different ways, and yes the police abusing their power on people of color is one of them.
Reading the article on police brutality was really an eye opener for me personally because the author stated facts and talked about things that were not being said by the media.
I really like how you brought it back to the media ,and how they are not telling us everything.
I think a suggestion could be to find a way to fix any run on sentences
I like how you enhance the authors thesis, Maybe add more quotes to support your claim.