Logline: David lets his ego get the better of him at the gym which results in injuring himself.
Outline: David, 21, has been going to the gym for several weeks now to help him get stronger. One day David notices another man at the gym who is roughly around his same body weight, doing the same exercise he does but with more weights. David knows he can’t do the same weights but still tries to do them. David is doing the exercise knowing the weights are too heavy but still pushes himself because he doesn’t want to look weak. After a couple of seconds David starts feeling a sharp pain in the biceps and drops the weights immediately. David goes to the doctor that same day and they tell him that he pulled his bicep muscle and can’t go to the gym for several months.
Logline: Jake is being fat shamed at school which results him to start losing weights.
Jake is a freshman in high school who is always being picked on for his weight which makes him feel sad all the time. Jake has a hard time eating any type of food or going up the stairs because there are kids around who will make fun of him. Jake is even scared to attend gym class because he knows kids will say he runs out of the breath easily. When freshman years ends he decides to start losing weight during the summer.
Hi Andres,
First I think these are great ideas for stories. I noticed that there were only 2 instead of the required three.
I’m a little worried that it might be challenging to film either of these during the time of our class.
Story 1: Gym Injury
I think this is a really interested and relatable story. If you can tell in a small way that would be really fun. It might be challenging filming in a gym if it is busy. Also having a doctors office might be tricky unless you can find a place or a room to fake it. Showing the passing of several months might be good in a time-lapse sequence. It would be really interesting showing this on maybe an outside track and maybe David pulls a hamstring and has to recover.
Story 2: Boy shamed at school
This is also something people can connect with and understand. Filming at a school might be really challenging. Maybe this can be done at a park or some other recreation location. I like the arc of the story and Jake’s journey.
Good luck. Let me know if you have any questions.
Michael Cannetti
I like how you raise the stakes that he works too much on his triceps and biceps and he must give up his work immediately. Will he be able to come back soon at the gym?
Logline Jake was humiliated by obesity at school, which led him to lose weight.
I like how you raise the stakes that he works too much on his triceps and biceps and he must give up his work immediately. Will he be able to come back soon at the gym?
Logline Jake was humiliated by obesity at school, which led him to lose weight.