Writing Assignment
      I was fascinated after reading the two articles from New York Times about David Brooks talking about how data affect us in our everyday lives. I learn a lot about what data could and couldn’t do and how important they are.
In one of the article, which is title âWhat data canât doâ, David Brooks  said that in the statistic world data have a lot information that it canât prove or explain in this world. For example, he mention about an owner of bank who couldnât decide whether he should remove is bank from Italy or not. In the end the owner decided not to remove it. This example was just to prove that we didnât need data to make such decision. He even gives different situation in which data are not needed to make decision and sometime they give us hard time to deal with. According to David Brooks, we donât need data to tell stories like writing a novel. Sometime the more data that appears the harder it gets to find what we were really looking for. In some case the bigger a problem occurs the more troublesome  big data also become. Brooks also say that data prefer to focus more on what people like than what the people donât know much about and that sometime it gives unclear result. This article talks about what data canât do but in the other article title âThe philosophy of dataâ prove that data are quite important in society.
In the second article, according to David Brooks data helps us explain some things we wrongly understood. For instance, most baseball supporter thinks that when a player makes six or more consecutive shoots, he got the groove. However,  in statistics the data prove that the player  just had luck because the player who missed the six or more  consecutive shoots could also make shoot at the next round. The same goes for politic election too. People think that the more money you use on your election the more votes youâll get and that thought was also wrong. It was actually proven that it does not  affect the vote at all. Data could also help us characterized people personality such as being egocentric or not. In one word, data could give us result in quantity and base on that we could make a conclusion.
I was fascinated when David Brooks mention being able to tell when someone is lying or not. Just by listening to the different kind of word how many how many time the person say it you could tell what kind of person he or she is. It so fascinating because it could help the voter chose their candidate during political election. For the baseball example, I admit that I also thought that when a player makes a certain numbers of shoot in row had the groove. With this I actually understood that it was only just luck, Iâm of kind disappointed because it always made me think that the player was special or had some kind of superpower or something like that.
Describing someone behavior based on data seams to interest me the most because in Brooks article “The Philosophy of Data “, I was amazed that someone personality could be recognized based on data. The further I read his article the curious I became.
I found a lot different interesting subject on this topic. While going through my research I found out that behavior could be distinguish from facial feature base on data. I also found that in some area women are better than men vise versa.
According  to M.Farouk Radwan who wrote the article “Face reading” say that we can judge someone personality from his or her facial feature by using data. For instant, base on data people who look alike are to likely have the same behavior just like babies who almost look alike. While ready the article “Personality traits and university program” written by Beauchamp, Kristy and McKelvie, Stuart J, I found out that women have  higher score when it come to conscientiousness, industriousness and empathy but men have a higher score when it come to independence. so means that women are sensible than men.
According to Brook, behaviors could be distinguished based on data and from my research I learn that it was possible to do so. In his article it say that its possible tell someone personality by observing the different kind of word he or she says and how the person say it. Before reading the Brook’s articles I thought it was would be difficult to judge someone personality with data but now, it makes sense.
The two articles made think if data were used to determine other thing that we are not aware off. It made wonder if fortune teller use this strategies to be able to tell or guess someone future. I also wonder if statistics are also use in the game like wheel of fortune, jeopardy, wipeout, and more, or if it also use in the small companies to allow them to make their companies a better place to work at. Now that think about, statistics seem to be everywhere but we just notice it. Maybe will the data reach the level of allowing us to make personnel decision in the future. We never know, in this world everything is possible.
Great point “behaviors could be distinguished based on data and from my research “
Great point “behaviors could be distinguished based on data and from my research”
I found two main ideas in your essay. First, that data can help to study personâs behavior and personality; second, whether the data can predict future events. These two ideas go through the whole text giving me the clear understanding of your points.
I think first 4 paragraphs seem introductory, because they concentrate on describing of Brookâs articles content without stating of specific interest. I suggest shorten your introductory to one paragraph or rewrite it starting with pointing out your ideas first (which appears in paragraph 5) and then integrate Brooks’ examples to support your point.
In the part âin the statistic world data have a lot information that it canât prove or explain in this world. For example, he [Brooks] mention about an owner of bank who couldnât decide whether he should remove is bank from Italy or not. In the end the owner decided not to remove it. This example was just to prove that we didnât need data to make such decisionâ. – you should describe more what happened in this example and how not removing the bank from Italy relates to use of data. So the person who has never read the Brooksâ article would understand whatâs going on.
Also you should be careful when you referring to Brooks articles. âFor instance, most baseball supporterâ and âFor the baseball exampleâ – in the article these example states with basketball instead of baseball.
The statements:
– âPeople think that the more money you use on your election the more votes youâll get and that thought was also wrong. It was actually proven that it does not affect the vote at allâ.
– âJust by listening to the different kind of word how many how many time the person say it you could tell what kind of person he or she is. It so fascinating because it could help the voter chose their candidate during political electionâ.
Here I suggest to make a reference to the source of evidences, or briefly explain your point, or give the supporting examples.
The conclusion (last paragraph) wraps up just one of your key points: whether the data can predict future events and says nothing about the help of data to study personâs behavior and personality (on which you did the research). I think you should include it in your summary to emphasize your idea.
Overall the work is good, but in my opinion you should state your ideas at the beginning of the essay. It will make your article more understandable and will help to write more specific conclusion-summary.