Revision on Education Narrative
After studying Prof. Wu’s comments on my essay, I plan to develop two more scenes at key points in my story, in P. 4 and P. 6. I plan to break up large blocks of dialogue by adding descriptive phrases. I’ll experiment with starting my story at a more dramatic point and weaving some of the original material into the body of the story. I’ll meet with a tutor at the Writing Center to study complex sentence (could be everybody here!) I’ll read the extended scene with dialogue on page 2 for our Final Day Celebration, May 23
