One of the things I need to do is revise to add more details to the conclusion paragraphs. So the audience can have a better understanding. For example, my title was confused because it may not connect to my whole story. Next time, I should make more sense with my entire story. Also, some phrasing or sentence in the paragraph was unnecessary because it is better to include the main points. It was also beneficial to receive feedback from my classmates that helped me give more valuable suggestions on which part I should be focusing on.