Hi Class…remember that you must turn in Essay 3 on Thursday.
1. Buy a friend a cup of coffee and have them read over your essay and make comments.
2. Pay a friend/colleague a nickle for every mistake or problem that they find.
3. Read your essay out loud. Enunciate each word. If something is wrong, your ear usually picks it up.
4. Read “backwards.” This is a technique used by professional editors: starting at the end of your essay, read each sentence in reverse order (don’t read the words in reverse order).
5. Revise each topic sentence to reveal exactly what the paragraph is trying to claim/assert.
6. Replace all weak verbs; change passive verbs to active verbs.
7. Make sure that your topic sentences are aligned with your thesis. Do they help support your overall thesis? They should.
8. Make sure that your thesis, topic sentences, and your conclusion speak to each other–that they are linked. Revise as needed.
For Thursday: in a folder please make sure to put the following:
-Peer Reviews (2)
-Photocopy or print-out of each direct quotation source (minimum 5)
-Final Draft: Essay on top of the Annotated Bibliography (stapled and with page numbers)
Good luck and I’ll see you Thursday.
This student essay was written for my ENG 1101 class in 2012. Note that this sample essay is good, quite good, but it is not perfect. I think that it may be instructive to study this essay in order to understand what a sincere and significant effort can produce. Please note my margin notes; I’ve put them on the essay to help you see where this writer faltered–where you can make improvements that this writer missed.
Obtaining information by direct questions is a form of primary source material, so you may want to conduct a short interview with a person connected to your topic/site. You may conduct the interview in person, by email, or by phone.
Conducting an Interview:
1. Determine your purpose, and be sure it relates to your research question and perhaps even your hypothesis.
2. Set up the interview well in advance. Introduce yourself cordially and professionally. State who you are and why you want to conduct an interview. Specify how long it will take, and if you wish to record the session–always ask permission to record or photograph.
3. Prepare a written list of factual and open-ended questions. Brainstorming or freewriting can help you come up with questions. Leave plenty of space for notes after each question. If the interview proceeds in a new or different direction, don’t panic, let the person speak. Do not feel that you have to be prepared for every question or response.
4. Record the subject, date, time, and place of the interview.
5. Thank the person that you interview (in person or by email). Be professional in all interactions.
6. Very important: right after the interview, sit down and rewrite your notes and reflect on the interview. If you do not do this now, you will forget vital information. Do this while it is fresh.
Here is a student sample of a “B+” Annotated Bibliography.
Note: The interview (primary source) does not need to be completed by Tuesday.
Sorry! I thought on Tuesday, April 29 you were to turn in the topic summary and 5 questions–but that is due on Thursday, May 1. I apologize for that mistake.
We will have another library day on Tuesday. Please meet in class.
To repeat: The topic summary and 5 key questions are due Thursday (I will call this assignment Journal 6 for accounting purposes).
I hope that your Spring Break is going marvelously! For our return on Thursday, April 24th, please have Journal 5 ready: Read Deak and Egan in our textbook and then write 250 words on which of the two writer’s is harder to understand and why. Typed, double-spaced. Also, please bring your books to class.
Do you have an idea of Essay 3? Email me your ideas. I have already approved several ideas.
This Photo was taken on March. 19, 2014 at approximately 5 in the evening. In Brooklyn NY, Court street- borough hall is the location of where I stand. I was walking through this area where i thought it was a beautiful sight in which i had to take a photo from a distance to capture a picture of the detail and what i really saw, theres a little bit of almost everything. theres a subway, and public buses. The streets look busy. People walking to there destinations. Everyones bundled up, we had very cold weather that day. The eye-catching view of this photo is the the small building directly in the middle of this photo. The way it is built and the columns in front or it. Also another main point of this photo would be the Public buses which are what most of this world depends on in our daily lives.
On Thursday we will take the Midterm Exam. It will resemble Quiz 3 in that it will focus on summary and citations. In addition, it will have two short answer questions.
Next Tuesday, April 8th: Final Draft of Essay 2 is due. Make sure that all the process work is in a folder: final draft, peer review sheet (filled out), early drafts.
i took this photo on the morning of march 20th while i was walking to Nam building of the New York city College of Technology. i was in a rush because i running late for my Spanish class but i thought it would be cool to take this photo during the busy hour of people coming in and out of the building
¡COMANDANTE BIGGIE!, 2014, Bernardo Vanterpool
The photograph above was taken on March 13, 2014 at three o’clock in the afternoon. I had just gotten off Lafayette St. on a Queens bound, local C train when I took this photograph on Fulton St. and S. Portland St. in Fort Greene, Brooklyn, New York. As I walked up the stairs and out of the subway, I spotted this magnificent mural painted on a four story red brick apartment building. I started to scrutinize the mural and its surroundings, snapped a photograph and decided this photograph will be part of my descriptive essay. This is a mural of a Brooklyn rapper by the name of Biggie Smalls, who was shot dead in the year 1997. I titled this photograph “Fantasy on a Wall” because the mural portrays the rapper as an army militant. The phrase below the mural reads “¡COMANDANTE BIGGIE!” The translation of this phrase from Spanish to English is “Commander Biggie!”
Theodore Roosevelt United States Courthouse, 2014, Bernardo Vanterpool
This is a photograph of the Theodore Roosevelt Courthouse located at 225 Cadman plaza, Brooklyn, New York. I took this photograph from the men’s bathroom on the seventh floor of the New York City College of Technology. When I stepped inside the bathroom, it felt like I walked right into a three hundred degree oven. I quickly jogged about fifteen feet over to the windows when I saw this enthralling view. Before anything I noticed the courthouse and its amazing height. The courthouse is 22-stories high. There are two other eye captivating buildings. On the left edge of the photograph a section of the seven floor Pearl Building is shown. The right edge captures a fifteen story, brick apartment building along Tillary st. On the ground floor of the apartment building retail stores are located. There are cars stopped at a red light and if you look closely a person with a withe shirt is crossing the street.