In Class Writing 11/29

*The language and tone are very formal. The voice is speaking at a constant volume and speed.  It sounds like someone’s telling a story.

*They’re not specifically using any sources. They’re giving examples to further prove what they’re talking about. And they use evidence (events from the past) that justifies their point.

*The narrator asks questions, then gives the answers to the questions. They use images that relate to or are from the events they’re talking about. It’s like a little slide show, but it runs smoothly and has smooth transitions. There’s low instrumental music in the background.

*The video is 9 minutes long.

*I think the target audience is anyone who doesn’t value the little things and events in life. The entire point the narrator is making is that every small thing we do has a consequence. Another possible target audience could be people who are hopeless with their life. The narrator said something specific that led me to this conclusion. At the end of the video they said, “So if you ever thought your life doesn’t matter, believe me, it really does.” They’re trying to encourage people to better understand that every decision we make that seems insignificant, leads to bigger things later. And we all play a part in everything that happens in the world.

*I would like to be as clear as the narrator is in the video. Anyone watching the video would most likely agree with the narrator afterwards because they were easy to understand and persuasive kind of.

*I’d like to avoid saying that my piece will have a specific effect on the audience. The title of the video is “The Butterfly Effect; This Video Will Change Your Life; Documentary”. I feel like by saying that the video will “change” someone’s life is a little dramatic. But then again it might help get more views and a larger audience. Personally, I wouldn’t make the same decision. To get a larger audience I would put an interesting image as clickbait to draw people in. Or I would try to make an interesting title.

Video- The Butterfly Effect | This Video Will Change Your Life | Documentary – YouTube

In-Class Writing 11-15-2022

My Unit 2 research was based on the negative impact that animals have from being placed inside of Zoos. For people to fully grasp the idea that they’re participating in the animals suffering, not only do they have to see how they’re taking part but also how to stop. The main excuse to why people are supporting Zoos is to educate. So, I’d like to teach my audience that there are other educational tools besides zoos to learn about animals and their environments.

The specific audience I’d like to reach would be the adults taking their kids to the Zoos. Parents, teachers, daycare instructors, etc.

I’m thinking about doing a documentary. Something that if an adult saw randomly on their Facebook feed, or suggested videos in YouTube, they’d stop what they’re doing and watch it.

I might publish the documentary on YouTube. YouTube has become a “go to” educational tool in schools and in people’s personal lives. Anyone interested or anyone who cares about animals might be interested in the video. If the video made it under the National Geographic channel or website, it could get a lot of views and spread more awareness.

To start I would look for clips of animals being captured/traded. Also, images of animals that were abused and videos of abuse. And write a draft of what I’m going to talk about and what quotes I’m going to use from my sources.

I’m worried I might not be using the right genre, even though I think a documentary is best. There might be another genre that could better attract my audience.

KWL HW for 10/13

Why are Zoos still a thing?

K- I know that Zoos hold captured animals. People go there to look at the animals. I always found it messed up because the animals are basically trapped there just for human’s entertainment. There is a difference between a Zoo and a sanctuary for animals. Because some people like to say that Zoos help animals and keep them safe. But if you’re visiting a Zoo to go see those animals and are paying for it, then the Zoo is there for your amusement and profit, not for the animal.

W- I want to know how many Zoos there are in the US to begin with, but I’m also curious how many there are around the world. I don’t think there’s too many of them in other countries, so I want to see how many more the US has. I’d also like to know where the idea came from. Who first thought to create a Zoo? Where were they from? How did become so normalized that people thought it was okay? Has anyone tried to close Zoos or try to turn them into just sanctuaries? Are Zoos still open just for the profit? Are people ever going to agree to get rid of Zoos or will society continue to be selfish and want to keep them for their amusement?

L- I learned that the idea for Zoos started in Egypt and Mesopotamia. The wealthy would have private collections of animals to show their wealth. The first Zoo opened in Paris, France. During the 18th century the “Age of Enlightenment”, scientists wanted to study animal’s anatomy and behavior. So, they had to keep them in places that mirrored the natural habit.

Still want to know- I’d still like to know where the first Zoo in the US opened and when. Also, who is in charge of the Zoos and how they play a part in the treatment of the animals?