Essay draft -2
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Hey, Emanuel. I really like your essay, your view on things regarding the character and his motives to steal back what was stolen from him and his family in the first place. The only thing I would advise you to do is add a conclusion where you summarize everything and add what is one unique part of the text being it is a double crime story. Keep up the good work.
I would also like to advice you that whenever you quote something from a text make sure you write it in quotations and add in parenthesis the author’s last name and page number you got it from.
For ex: He stated, “It took me two days to return the money to my mother” (Diaz 3).
Another advice: Add a works cited page being you use only one text you should write it like this:
Díaz, Junot. “The Money.” The New Yorker, 19 June 2017: 1-3.
http://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2011/06/13/the-money.
Hi. Emanuel. I like reading your essay. I really like the body paragraphs where you explain the characters and the actions that they do clearly. Just one thing to add on is to add a conclusion to the story. Good job overall.
Nice essay. Good use of quotations. I liked how you discussed every quotation. However, do not forget to put the author’s last name and a page number in the parenthesis after the quotations. One suggestion to you is to check your grammar and make sure that you don’t have any words starting from an uppercase letter in the middle of the sentence. For example, “A question that roused from this quote was, How did Diaz have the courage to go steal back his things and not be scared that something might happen or that he might have fallen out of the window?” Additionally, write about what makes the text unique. Also, find an article or another text that you can compare with “The Money”. Do not forget that you have to do the works cited page.
Hi Emanuel,
As stated above this is a strong first draft. As other have said just make sure grammatical errors are taken care of . In addition, every time you quote directly from the passage it should be MLA, “Quote” (Author, Page number). Also do not forget to include an updated works cited page at the end of your essay.