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Composition 1
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I think that Indeevari did a really good job writing her essay. Something that I learned from Indeevari is how much our cultures shape our perspectives. Indeevari did a great job referencing this in her interpretations through the eyes of each of the siblings. Specifically, she writes, “To my surprise our standard of living has declined. Yes, we now have more food in the fridge, and chocolate candies, and Coca-Cola, but the food itself is much worse than back home.” Something that I think that could be improved is a longer conclusion. Perhaps Indeevari could consider briefly summarizing the viewpoints of the siblings in the conclusion to round things out.