For your ninth post, you will be posting below a rough draft of your first Reflective Annotated Bibliography entry.
In particular, you will post the SUMMARY and RHETORICAL ANALYSIS of your first resource.
You may select any of your three resources for this first entry. Do not worry if you are unsure if what you produce is “correct.” This is JUST a rough draft! We will be going over them on Wednesday.
Refer to this handout for a very detailed overview of how to write your summary and rhetorical analysis: Structure of Unit 2 Reflective Annotated Bibliography Assignment.
Remember the following:
- In your summary you are just providing an overview of the resource, the kinds of information it includes, and what one might learn by consuming it. Your summary should capture the most important points the author makes relating to your research question. You most likely will not be able to talk about all of the information included in the resource.
- In your rhetorical analysis, you are evaluating how effective YOU think the resource is at achieving its purpose (to inform, to persuade, and/or to entertain) and reaching its
intended audience. Please incorporate AT LEAST ONE QUOTATION in your rhetorical analysis. Refer to this handout from class: How to Effectively Incorporate a Quotation into Academic Writing
You can also refer to the sample student writing we went over in class, keeping in mind that this sample writing has both strengths and weaknesses:
- Sample RAB Entry
- SAMPLE RHETORICAL ANALYSIS Â (Note: This example does not include the summary or key quotes section.)
The summary and rhetorical analysis should be at least 400 words. The summary should be about 1-2 paragraphs, and the rhetorical analysis should be about 2-3 paragraphs.
POST YOUR ENTRY BY 12 PM ON WEDNESDAY, 10/25. WE WILL BE DOING A PEER REVIEW ACTIVITY WITH YOUR ENTRIES, SO IT IS VITAL YOU COMPLETE THIS ASSIGNMENT. IF YOU DO NOT COMPLETE IT, YOU WILL NOT BE ABLE TO PARTICIPATE IN THE ACTIVITY, AND YOU WILL LOSE THE POINTS.
Bibliographic Entry: YouTube videoâThe $52 billion solution to save NYC from the sea (CNBC News), short documentary/ interviews. 4 March 2023, (Produced by: Lindsey Jacobson)
Summary: Hurricane Sandy caused a huge issue in the New York City area. The more than a trillion-dollar city would be sitting in flooded water with transit systems turned into waterfalls. New York City is such an important place and super-substantial for the U.S. to thrive. Over the years flooding continues to get worse, wreaking havoc upon our people, homes, and overall city. Itâs important to prevent and fix these issues because it would not only be detrimental to the millions of people living here, but for the entire country, and maybe even the world. Studies and research have been conducted to substitute this issue. The plans include surge gates throughout the New York and Jersey City areas. Other plans are to make huge seawalls, which could be effective, but block the cityâs beautiful coastal sea line views. The sea wall plan is made for a 100-year plan but because of circumstances gradually increasing the plan could be made to last for 200-500 years. The sea wall plan would cost over $52 billion and included in that cost is the total upkeep which could be close to $350 million. Since we are always facing damages and need to make reconstruction due to flooding, prices could greatly vary. The overall cost could be 72 billion dollars and have a benefit cost of $2.5 billion. Climate change will put us in a deep hole and the price to be will undoubtedly cost us. This would be paid by taxpayer’s dollars and federal funding. Studies are still being conducted and until finalized and decided upon, construction could begin in 2030 and end in 2044. The people at risk would be low-income and marginal groups. There are community meetings to discuss and agree or disagree on this topic. The question is whether a 20-foot wall could be the answer to our problems or if is there something else. Another question is whether it is worth paying to fix the damages and make plans to stop flooding or whether is it better to buy out and relocate.
Quotes:
1. Bryce Wisemiller (project manager U.S Army Corps of Engineers, New York District)
a) âThereâs a lot of design work, so for that reason, we canât really say exactly how tall these structures ultimately might be and the only reason we are able to justify $52 billion cost on this alternative is because of all the damages that can still exist in this vast study area.â (5:24)
2. Robert Freudenberg (Vice President, Energy and Environment Regional Plan Association)
a) âYou want to be protected and not flood during a storm and still live along the coast. This plan says the only way to do that, in certain areas, is to be behind a very tall wall.â (3:33)
b) âWould you rather have a wall or is it time for this community to say you were ready letâs be bought out while we can be.â (11:21)
3. Rohit Aggarwala (Climate Officer Commissioner, Environmental Protection, New York City)
a) âOur biggest concern is that the project moves forward and that the project takes place in a way that is consistent with everything New Yorkers expect from New York City. Not shutting us off from our waterfront, not leaving certain parts of the city vulnerable, not causing other problems as it protects us from coastal innovations.â (4:03)
b) âThere is no question that Climate change is going to cost us, right? Weâre going to have to pay to dig ourselves out of the hole we are in.â (6:35)
c) âYou canât keep the ocean at bay and have the coastline look exactly the same.â (8:54)
Rhetorical Analysis
In this YouTube video research experts in the field of the growing climate crisis, express an extreme urgency on the issue, and the people being affected. They are trying to inform and persuade the public, especially the people residing in the New York City area. They are also communicating with people who want to learn more on the topic of how climate change is affecting urban cities and areas. Although this video is intended for more mature audiences and canât be understood or comprehended by younger viewers, it still displays images, charts, and graphic renderings of the intended proposed plan they wish to conduct. This provides a clear view and understanding to the audience wishing to learn more about this issue. They display the cost of the 52-billion-dollar project broken down and explain why it will cost this much. The video demonstrates a graphic rendering of the sea walls and surge gates being implemented and the location where these constructed structures will be placed. In the video, they express a view of different perspectives and show how it will affect different groups of people like low-income families and communities. They also state how this project may be disliked by residents in the area but express the necessity and reasoning for it. This can be shown in the video when Robert Freudenberg (Vice President, Energy, and Environment Regional Plan Association) states, âWould you rather have a wall or is it time for this community to say you were ready letâs be bought out while we can be.â This shows that there are only two options when it comes to the climate crisis, trying to fix, build, and protect the city from any storms or flooding or moving out and relocating from the area. Since the majority of people would rather stay in the city they call home, the best solution is to implement proposed solutions even though they wonât be liked. In the video, they also state the drawbacks of this project, but they plan on considering it when finalizing the plan.
The information and people interviewed in this video donât seem to show bias since this topic is backed by scientific research and evidence. The information stated is reliable since itâs an idea proposed by the U.S. Army Corps of Engineers which is a federal agency with expertise in engineering and infrastructure. However, it does lack quotes from credible scholarly references which if added would only enhance their viewpoint. The video states personal experiences and real-world examples, such as Hurricane Sandy, to illustrate the dire consequences. The people in this industry are still conducting research and studies and are open to questions and concerns from the public. They also need the people to get approval and funding for this project. The video provides a clear understanding of the climate crisis from the sea level and provides insight into proposed plans and ideas. The urgency of the situation is desperately shown and communicates the need for collective action.
Great work here, Dion.
I have just a few comments/questions, particularly about the first paragraph of your rhetorical analysis:
Bibliographic Entry: Mental Health Is an Increasing Focus in Rap LyricsâWhat That Means for Listeners (verywellmind.com)
Summary:
In “How Rap Music Is Lifting the Stigma of Mental Illness” author Tonya Russell at first explains the misconception of the Rap genre. she explains unusual new trends of artist including their personal struggles in their songs such as PTSD, Depression, etc. She also explains the positive impact it has had especially on Black communities who according to Dushaun Branch were taught at an early age to ”hold our tears in, be strong, don’t share our business, and we hold all of our pain in”. Dushaun Branch expresses that in her teen yoga classes that they talk about their personal struggles often as well as how it has harmed them. When reading this one should learn some of the importance behind songs like 1-800-273-8255 by Logic which is a song dedicated to the struggle of suicide. The title itself is the suicide hotline. During the COVID lockdown a rapper that goes by the name “G Herbo” PTSD which stands for Post Traumatic Disorder. The album contained songs that were emotionally charged.
Overall this article can aid ones that are in need and affected by the effects of PTSD, Depression and much more. This article can be a bridge gap to other sources of help as well.
Rhetorical Analysis:
This arcticle explains really well on how Rap can be viewed differently than how its usually viewed as. What lacked was the beginning it felt more like a meaningless introduction which could’ve been replaced by more explanation of other impactful songs. The article includes many examples of impactful songs dating back to the times when Tupac was releasing music. As mentioned earlier this article can be a positive impact on those that are currently suffering with personal struggles.
It may not seem major but the articles showcases the people outside the music industry like Dushaun Branch who set up events like her teen yoga class which is an area where her students share personal details. If I were a first time reader wanting to learn about Mental illness related songs this would be a very useful article/ The introduction would introduce the changed stereotype of rap which leads into the body paragraphs that showcase different songs. It would also intrigue me into wanting to listen to the songs.
What she can do better for sure is add more detail explaining exactly what the stereotype of rap is and how is it different. This article can be directed to many more people than other the ones that need help, it could be of use to everyone in the world in therefore they can learn how to help someone in need.
Good, work Christian. I have a few comments and questions about your rhetorical analysis:
Source 1
BBC news. âHow Trees Secretly Talk to Each Other – BBC News.â YouTube, YouTube, 29 June 2018, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yWOqeyPIVRo.
According to many sources given by researchers trees are speaking to each other. Underneath the soil, an extent and joined network of life links the trees through their root systems. But they apparently canât talk to each other without each otherâs help. The whole process starts with hub trees (also referred as mother trees) the oldest and tallest trees in the forest. Hub trees have more range of access to sunlight, and through the process of photosynthesis the hub tree ends up producing more sugar than they actually need. Underground, fungi need sugar to survive. Most of their bodies are made up of a mass of threads called mycelium (also known as plural mycelia).
They grow inside the root system of trees to absorb the excess sugar. In return, the mycelium provides the tree with the nutrients it needs from the soil. This symbiotic relationship (any type of close and long-term biological interaction between two different types of biological organisms such as mutualistic, commensalistic or parasitic) is known as mycorrhiza, which is caused by the Greek wordâs fungus and root. These tree fungi relationships create a connection for trees in order to connect the forest together, forming an underground communication network to exchange water and nutrients, take care of their seedlings, and even send warning signals when there is a potential underground threat.
To get the main idea of these forest relationships ââa team of researchers used DNA analysis to map a fungal network in a patch of Canadian forest. Remarkably, they found that one tree was connected to 47 other trees! Their models also showed that when hub trees were removed, it would cause more connections to be lost than if trees were simply removed randomly.â What I thought of this source is that it explained my topic very well. Most of the things she said were not mentioned in the other sources I went through. The video basically answered most of my questions like the main question which is if trees can communicate with each other.
Hi, Jesus. I think you have a solid start here for an RAB entry.
Remember that each entry will include a SUMMARY and a RHETORICAL ANALYSIS.
Reading the above, I would say that your first two paragraphs are a summary, and the last paragraph is the START of a rhetorical analysis.
To expand your last paragraph into a full fledged rhetorical analysis (and remember that the rhetorical analysis for each of your entries should be about 2-3 paragraphs, consider the following):
Hirschmann, Jane R., and Lela Zaphiropoulos. “Teens, food, and body image.” Mothering, no. 70, spring 1994, pp. 56+. Gale Academic OneFile
“Teens, food, and body image” by Jane R. Hirschmann and Lela Zaphiropoulos examines this connection. The writers make the case that teens’ eating habits and opinions about their bodies are greatly influenced by the media. The article draws attention to the exaggerated beauty standards that the media promotes, which frequently cause youngsters to be dissatisfied with their bodies. It implies that this unhappiness with food may show up as disordered eating patterns like binge eating, restricted dieting, or even the emergence of eating disorders like bulimia or anorexia.Hirschmann and Zaphiropoulos stress the significance of encouraging teens to have a positive relationship with food and a healthy body image. To offset the harmful effects of the media and promote a more realistic and welcoming image of body diversity, they contend that parents, schools, and society at large should collaborate.
The authors also propose that teaching teens about nutrition, intuitive eating, and the value of self-care is a good way to help them develop a positive connection with food. They support an all-encompassing strategy that takes into account mental and physical health. Finally, “Teens, food, and body image” clarifies the negative effects of media on the eating patterns and body image of teenagers. The essay places a strong emphasis on the necessity of creating a loving and caring atmosphere that encourages a balanced diet and positive body image.
“Teens, food, and body image” seems to be aimed at parents, teachers, and other professionals who work with teenagers, as well as the general public. The authors’ emphasis on the importance of parents and educators in helping teens develop positive body images and good relationships with food suggests this. Furthermore, the article’s reference to society’s responsibilities implies that it seeks to influence a larger readership.By educating people on the effects of media on teens’ eating habits and body image, the resource hopes to change the minds of those who use it. It seeks to persuade schools, parents, and the general public to take action against the harmful effects of the media and advance a more realistic and welcoming perspective on body diversity. The article offers advice on how to help kids form a positive relationship with food by recommending doable actions including teaching nutrition, intuitive eating, and self-care. The magazine article, is backed up with academic research and examples to substantiate its assertions.To support and provide the basis for their claims, the writers, Jane R. Hirschmann and Lela Zaphiropoulos, quote academics and research papers.The authors of this essay persuade their readers and support their claims with a variety of statistical data from case studies.
According to my analysis of this resource, the article makes a compelling case for how media affects young people’s perceptions of their bodies and eating behaviors. It highlights how important it is to help teens have a positive connection with food and a healthy body image. The authors recommend doable actions that can support a comprehensive approach to wellbeing, like nutrition education and intuitive eating. It’s critical to evaluate the article’s evidence to see if it cites reliable sources and backs up its assertions. The addition of scholarly data, figures, and professional comments raises the resource’s reputation and dependability. In terms of bias, this article offers a fair analysis and considers various points of view on the subject at hand.By exposing the contrast between a childâs standpoint, compared to their parents, the authors eliminated potential limitations or biases that may contribute to a comprehensive understanding of eating disorders in adolescents. Additionally, the article’s clarity, organization, engagement, and readability are factors that contribute to effectively conveying its message to the intended audience.
Excellent work, Angelise. This is a model RAB entry. I have just a couple of small comments on your rhetorical analysis below:
Bibliography Entry: https://www.nia.nih.gov/health/what-causes-alzheimers-disease
National Institute on Aging. âWhat Causes Alzheimerâs Disease? – NIH.â https://www.nia.nih.gov/health/what-causes-alzheimers-disease December 24, 2019
Summary:
In âWhat causes Alzheimerâs Disease?â, According to The National Institute of Aging, scientists donât really know or understand what exactly causes the Alzheimerâs Disease, they do believe that the cause may probably include a combination of age-relate changes in the brain, along with genetics, environmental, and lifestyle factors. They know for sure that the importance of any one of these factors in increasing or decreasing the persons risk may differ from each person. Although being older is not a cause of the disease, it is one of the most significant risk factors because the number individuals with Alzheimer’s disease doubles every five years above the age of 65. Approximately one in three adults over 85 may develop Alzheimer’s disease.
Researchers are discovering how aging-related alterations in the brain can destroy neurons and other different kinds of cells, which might worsen the damage caused by Alzheimer’s disease. These age-related alterations include the atrophy (shrinking) of specific brain regions, damage to the arteries, inflammation, the release of unstable chemicals known as free radicals, and a breakdown in the cells’ ability to produce energy.
Hi, Gem,
Remember that each entry needs to include BOTH a summary and a rhetorical analysis.
For your summary, make sure you are putting the ideas from the source in your words and not copying word-for-word what was said in the article.
Remember that for your rhetorical analysis, you are analyzing and evaluating your source. You are going to want to focus on questions such as (keep in mind that you do not necessarily need to answer ALL of these questionsâjust the ones that seem appropriate to you):
What is the purpose of this source? To inform? To persuade? If it is trying to persuade us, how Is it trying to change our thinking exactly? What is it trying to get us to see that we may not yet be seeing?
What audience is this resource trying to reach? How do you know? Does it do a good job of reaching this audience?
Is the information in the resource reliable? How do you know? What kinds of evidence (facts, stories, statistics) is the resource using to help communicate its message? Is the information presented in a accessible, easy-to-understand way?
Can you detect any bias?
Black defendants get longer sentences in Treasure Coast system
by: Elizabeth Johnson,Emily Le Coz, Josh Salman Published by: The Daytona Beach News-Journal
Summery:
As evident in Black defendants get longer sentences, it highlights the great significant racial disparities inside a judge’s courtroom. Take for example Lamar Lloyd and Chase Legleitner. Lloyd, who was 21 years old at the time, robbed a Pizza Hut and gas station and Legleitner, who was 19 years old at the time robbed 3 men. Both committed armed robberies, both entered no contest pleas, both had one misdemeanor priors on their records, and both had a total of 138.2 sentencing points. Based on their score of 138 points, states guidlines called for a sentences of just under 7 years to life in prison. However, that is not what happened. Lloyd, who is black, received 26 years in prison and will be eligible for parole in 2034 whereas Legleitner, who is white, received 2 years in county jail and was released with time served. One the same day, in the same courtroom, the same Circuit Court Judge Sherwood Bauer Jr., in the 19th Circuit in Martin County, who is white, received completely different sentences.
Key quotes:
Rhetorical Analysis:
For this specific judge, African Americans are more likely to receive a guilty verdict and usually get longer sentences. Bauer said he tries to be fair to everyone who steps into his courtroom and that race is of âcomplete insignificanceâ in his treatment of white and black defendants. âThe seasonings that made you who you are, of course they play a factor,â Bauer said. â This can tie into the concept of nature vs. nurture. Natureâ means innate biological factors (namely genetics), while ânurtureâ can refer to upbringing or life experience more generally. Though Baur does not come off as racist, one can argue that due to his upbringing and biological factors he has racism, bias, and prejudice tendencies towards blacks or people of color generally.
In the face of the judicial system, black people are guilty until proven otherwise. Even then, they are still guilty simply because they exist. Being black is perceived to be a crime. After all the senseless acts of violence, wars, revolutions, battles, history is slowly but surely repeating itself.
Hi, Dianka,
I think you wrote a solid summary. However, I want you to revisit your rhetorical analysis.
Remember that for your rhetorical analysis, you are analyzing and evaluating your source. You are going to want to focus on questions such as (keep in mind that you do not necessarily need to answer ALL of these questions–just the ones that seem appropriate to you):
RAB Entry
Use Of Artificial Intelligence Generates Questions About The Future Of Art.(2023) [Video/DVD ]NewsHour Productions,https://video.alexanderstreet.com/watch/use-of-artificial-intelligence-generates-questions-about-the-future-of-art/details?context=channel:academic-video-online
Summary:
PBS NEWSHOUR covers a segment of The museum of modern art (MOMA), introducing programs that generate art using a.i that is now widely available to the public and is as popular as ever. The program sometimes confounds people in the art community. The arts and culture series canvas is headed in a strong direction. PBS NEWSHOUR author and studio moderator Jeffery Brown depicts a forty by four-teen foot inch screen, perpetually morphing a distillation generating a variety of thirty-five million images of coral globally. The producer of the piece, artist Refik Anadol emphasizes that machines basically construct data underwater. The author then calls it an artificial data painting reality. The art stays pigmented and not dry with movement. Simultaneously, the colors change and itâs in some sort of flux. The thirty-seven year old Turkish artist is thrilled by his new opening exhibition at the Jeferry Deitch art gallery in Los Angeles, calling it an art revolution. Media artist and director Refik Anadol expresses his primary material as data, and his secondary material as a thinking brush enabled by the information given. The artist creates in Los Angeles with software programs, screens, and 3d printers with an enormous robot arm, thus, replacing traditional art materials. His team consists of computer and data scientists, researchers, architects, designers, that builds an immense amount of data sets that necessitates huge computing power. They can vary in input, you can input 75 million data of flowers, utilizing your human creativity and interacting with a machine, as a collaboration. Refik expresses that the artist of these artificial intelligence pieces is distilled in humanity. The artist voices that we are getting closer to a future of machines/algorithms art every single day. Articulates a machine helping and machines not thinking which was always debated in photography, utilizing art and technology. Assistant curator of contemporary art Los Angeles county Museum of art (LACMA) Dhyandra Lawson, says photographs were always negated from fine art discourse. The LACMA exhibition titled, âCoded: Art enters the computer age, 1952-1982 emphasizes the fact that artists have been fond of using the computer to express themselves through art for more than 50 years. The exhibition brings the story to 1982, the arrival of the internet age. Companies like midjourney, DALL-E, Stable Diffusion, are proliferated in the eyes of the public, now being feasible to access.
Allowing artists to make art through simple prompts, raising a bunch of questions. Like an a.i generated piece winning a prize at the Colorado State Fair, causing angst amongst other contestants. Artists like Molly Crabapple see it as a threat. Articulating that illustrators like her making live drawing pictures, are being completely substituted for apps because pieces are made cheaper and faster for humans. Molly continues to argue that generative a.i was trained on their stolen images. The New York based artist and writer critique is that, the new platforms have been building their businesses by taking images/data from the internet like the works of artists and illustrators that are not being credited or even compensated for it. Leading to a group of artists filing a class action suit against several a.i imagery generators, charged for copyright violations. Molly expresses that these artists’ work and income are at stake. Dhyandra advises the average consumer to be considerate of the source of the data being generated, and who and what is training the artificial intelligence. Refik agrees and says that he uses his own ethically sourced data sets. Being hopeful of the future Refik is convinced that his work on mapping coral reefs, can be of use with environmental hosts of other vast conundrums in the world. The artist ends on the note of remindinding people that the human mind is still the more complicated machine.
Rhetorical analysis:
As a kid friendly PBS NEWSHOUR news program on PBS KIDS makes it feasible for kids to learn about things through their segments. The segments are usually intriguing to your average consumer. I can attest to that since I watched PBS NEWSHOUR as a kid. I could imagine that covering a segment on the MOMAâs new exhibition, made it easy for an audience of maybe middle schoolers to stay tuned. The news anchor Jefferey Brown had a lot of good questions to ask the artists and the director in the interviews. The segments gave the average consumer the insight they need to know on ethical and futuristic updates on the future of artificial intelligence art that people might not be privy to.
Hi, Daphnie,
My main comment is that you are going to want to flip the proportions of your summary and rhetorical analysis. Your summary can be much shorter and your rhetorical analysis should be longer.
To expand your rhetorical analysis, consider the following:
Forbes magazines are best known for showing off billionaires, businesses, and young entrepreneurs. Christiana Jolaoso and Kelly Main described how fast growing ecommerce businesses are only going up in the next few years. America’s society is gaining more access to technology every year allowing a bigger audience for online sales. Online selling businesses like ecommerce are set to bring in $5.9 trillion at the end of 2023 and are still growing. The rise in digital marketing and sales isn’t a surprise for many, E Commerce websites or businesses are cheaper and easier alternatives to running brick and mortar stores. Online sales allows producers to reach consumers all over the world and have their product shipped directly to them. Having a business online eliminates the cost of rental space, warehouses, property insurance, maintenance and more. Many business owners are taking advantage of these benefits but also having to face the technical challenges of digital marketing and selling.
In the Forbes article âWhat Is E-Commerce? Definition, Types & Getting Startedâ Christiana explains how âE-commerce (electronic commerce) is the exchange of goods and services and the transmission of funds and data over the internet. E-commerce relies on technology and digital platforms, including websites, mobile apps and social media to make buying and selling possible.â
Many business owners choose selling online mainly because âBuilding an e-commerce website and maintaining it is cheaper than running a brick-and-mortar store. You wonât need to rent retail space or a warehouse or worry about building maintenance or property insurance. Plus, advertising online is cheaper, especially with organic blog posts and social media that can drive traffic to your site.â
âE-commerce websites provide flexibility for their owners and customers. You can offer a wide selection of products while customers make round-the-clock purchases, regardless of their time zone or location. And as a business owner, you can earn even while sleeping.â
The basics of E-commerce can be described very well throughout the article for the people who might not know anything about it yet. The advantages greatly explained why so many business owners are making E-commerce platforms and choosing the digital path. Having flexibility on customers, cheaper business cost, and even making profit while you sleep are all reasons why Ecommerce is taking over in 2023. Christiana Jolaoso is mainly targeting business owners on how they can expand their business online but also gives many ways people can start their own Ecommerce platform. The information in the article can expand someoneâs knowledge on e-commerce from not knowing what it is to having a good understanding of what it is and what it can do. Including the 4 major types of e-commerce improved the readers knowledge on different ways businesses and consumers can profit digitally. This key detail the author added showed her motive of informing the audience about e-commerce and a variety of ways people can get into it themselves.
The Forbes magazine is a popular and well known source filled with the newest and most successful people , business and more. Itâs not a surprise to see a soon to be trillion dollar business being talked about on Forbes. The author Christiana Jolaoso has experience in bussiness to bussiness tech companies and editor Kelly Main specializes in marketing and ventures. The background of tech and business gives the authors a reliable background when talking about e-commerce.
Hi, Brian,
Make sure that you clearly mark which parts of the above are your summary, and which parts are your rhetorical analysis. In addition, make sure that you incorporate one quotation into your rhetorical analysis–and analyze it!
For example, you note, “Including the 4 major types of e-commerce improved the readers knowledge on different ways businesses and consumers can profit digitally. This key detail the author added showed her motive of informing the audience about e-commerce and a variety of ways people can get into it themselves.” Can you perhaps quote something from this section of the resource, and talk about why this quotation exemplifies how effective the resource is at reaching its intended audience?
I would also like you to talk about the author’s credentials a bit more. You might also discuss how we can know we can trust the information included in this article.
The concept of Dreams and their effects on the human consciousness has always been a topic of discussion when speaking about sleep and the connection it has to the psyche. This Article written by Stephen LaBerge, and Kristen LaMarca specifically elaborates on the ins and outs of Lucid dreams and REM sleep while breaking down the science of how it slips into people’s daily lives even when wide awake.
Throughout the article, youâll be taught how often people delve into their dreams and the surreal environment they are experiencing within the mind because it would seem you’ve woken up with a new sense of awareness. So Stephen and Kristen conducted a program to research and gain a further understanding of the effects these dreams have on and vary from person to person during a program dubbed âDreaming and Awakeningâ. During the experiment, 121 participants were chosen and monitored over a period of 6- months sharing how frequently they had experienced a lucid dream. These only came to about 1-3 dreams over the program’s duration, which is surprisingly lower than I had believed it to be. Not only is there a low rate of lucid dreams but there were a few participants who didn’t have any dreams at all, the study that these experts Stephen and Kristen had done also proved that not every person can dream. Due to this, they did a further investigation on why this would be the case and they found out that the average sleep that a person has to have is 4.5 hours to be able to accurately dream and also remember that dream called âdream recallâ. Which begged the question: what methods are these people using that get such results and data? apparently they had been giving different prescriptions for the people to take for them in the best condition I believe. Although the participants had also taken different capsules of Medicine to understand the effects and study it has on periods of sleep and dreams, unless you are a scientist or someone who pursues the scientific study of dreams this information wouldn’t be as clear or as helpful to you as the rest of the article.
However, the depth increases as they now divide the studies and results by gender, age, and lucidity which is how deep you are from the dream and how much you can remember and recall and the levels very much do vary and debunk some myths that that seemed untrue or unreasonable before. So please if you are interested in all the specifics of the science and resources used to get these results recite back to the article titled âPre-sleep treatment with galantamine stimulates lucid dreaming: A double-blind, placebo-controlled, crossover studyâ by Stephen LaBerge, Kristen LaMarca
Hi, Nathan,
This is a solid summary (and, in fact, this summary does not need to be quite as long as it is), but do not forget that you also need to include a rhetorical analysis. Take a look at Angelise’s entry for a great example.
In your rhetorical analysis, you can consider the following:
Does ‘Laziness’ actually Exist? Research says its complicated https://www.theswaddle.com/does-laziness-exist-research-says-its-complicated
Summary
The article made by Samuya Kalia called âDoes âLazinessâ actually exist? Research says itâs complicated is an online research article that is about how laziness does actually exist or is made up and is false. The answer is a little bit of both. It describes how we as a society use the words to describe others who are not working hard enough in their opinion. For example lazy workers are bad workers based on the idea that they arenât working to their superiors standards and therefore should be fired or get a cut out of their pay. Or if a person says âI’m going to have a lazy dayâ often means to society that person is going to do nothing on that day and therefore wasting time. In short anything that is connected with the word lazy or laziness is bad and condemned. But why is it like this though? Why do people go through the effort of calling other people lazy when a lot of them in their definition are lazy themselves. So far it looks like society is a bunch of hypocrites. That is to say, the article by Samuya, hopefully should answer some of these questions. Such as it states âYet, our instinct, which has not caught up, is still for conserving energy, making us reluctant to expend effort on abstract projects with distant and uncertain payoffsâ. This seems to explain how the reason we can act lazy is due to our instincts and how a lot of it is still programmed to conserve energy based on logic that we shouldn’t waste our valuable and precious energy to a project that has a long goal that may not be even guaranteed or could even fail completely. Overall the article details how laziness does exist in a way but the definition and understanding of it has over time been twisted and misunderstood for multiple generations and many different types of media.
Rhetorical Analysis
The online article made by Samuya Kaila is an interesting read overall. It uses logos to inform mostly women on the internet about the idea of laziness and questioning if laziness is even a thing or something made up in society. Then she breaks it down using a 2018 study about how some people prefer relaxing and luxury over hard work and labor. It details how people are wired in a way to conserve energy for basic survival. Such as for example looking for food and water. While also in modern times where those are very easy to obtain just by walking down the street. Shelter, while it is more limited due the sheer number of people it does not necessarily need a ton of energy to find. And finding a sexual partner where nowadays finding one is a simple sexual app away from one. The point is the article shows how our natural instincts are not used to modern times as such we tried to conserve energy where we donât really need to. The article gives more such examples such as describing how John Atanasoff the person who made the first digital computer the reason he made it is because it was too much work doing all the calculations himself and created a machine to do it for him. Or how in 2015 a study was made that details how people who are not physically active tend to rely on the mind more than strength. And in 2018 it was argued that the perception of laziness of one person is actually them taking their time to think and innovate. Overall the author uses a variety of different sources in order to help women with their problems while using insightful information.
Then you have to ask the question. Is this article in any way biased? The answer to that is most likely not. The author of this article Samaya Kahlia is part of an organization called The Swaddle. The Swaddle was founded to be digital health resources for women in order to help them with their mental or health issues with their information and articles. And has vowed that their information is reliable, trustworthy and non judgmental. Based on their about us page where it states âThe Swaddle is an independent digital publication and creative production studio. We use nuanced research and cutting edge multimedia formats to inspire important conversations through our magazine, social media channels, podcasts and films.â and online reviews about the organization such as Muskrat. It brings the picture that it is extremely unlikely for the author to be biased in a company that has vowed to be unbiased and most reviewed by her peers before being put on their website. All in all I believe that this article is trustworthy and reliable and can help women in need of their problems with being lazy and laziness in general.
Hi, Chris,
I left comments on another one of your posts, but I want to quickly note a few things here about your rhetorical analysis.
A Honeybee-Inspired Framework for a Smart City Free of Internet Scams, https://www.mdpi.com/1424-8220/23/9/4284
Internet scams are attempts made to try to reveal a personâs confidential information like bank accounts, passwords and other types of accounts that may be important to someone. There are several types of methods they use to try to scam someone on the internet, that includes, fake emails, fake advertisements, text messages with fishy links, phone calls and social media messages from scam accounts. The article states, “Several research studies have been carried out recently to identify phishing website attacks. Such studies, however, cannot adequately avoid the advanced hacking of phishing websites. Moreover, the utilization of different media communication, including social networks, raises the number of web-based assaults”. This sentence is saying that people have been doing research to find and stop bad websites that try to steal our information, which is called phishing. But even though they are trying hard, they are not always able to stop the smart hackers who make these bad websites. It also talks about how using social networks and other online ways to talk to people is making the problem worse. This means that because we use sites like Facebook or Twitter a lot, it is easier for scammers to trick us online. They can use these places to scam and steal our information. So, in simple words, this sentence is saying that even though people are working to stop internet scams, they are having trouble because the hackers are getting smarter, and using social media makes it easier for them to scam online. This article also states, “ScamFree detects the phishing websites through three cascading filtration phases, which are performed by the three main agents: PhishTank-Match (PM), Undesirable-Absent (UA), and Desirable-Present (DP). These agents inspect the suspicious URLs using a set of features to ensure that the visited website is genuine. In particular, the suspicious URLs are inspected to discover if they are included in the PhishTank blacklist…”. This sentence talks about a system called ScamFree, which is like a smart helper that looks for bad websites that want to steal our information. ScamFree does this in three important steps, it is kind of like a detective. These helpers check suspicious website URLs to make sure they are safe and not scams. One important thing they do is check if a website is on the PhishTank blacklist. PhishTank is a list that has the names of known bad websites. If a website is on this list, it is a big sign that it’s a scam. This makes it harder for internet scammers because ScamFree is like a guard that watches over us on the internet by checking websites to see if they are trying to trick us. If it finds a scam, it can warn us or block the website, which makes it harder for these scammers to steal our information.
https://amp.theguardian.com/us-news/2022/sep/21/lead-contamination-chicago-tap-water-revealed
âThe Shocking Levels of Toxic Lead in Chicago’s Tap Waterâ by Erin McCormick, Aliya Uteuova, and Taylor Moore, photographs by Jamie Kelter Davis. Published by the Guardian. Online article. Published Wednesday 21 September 2022.
Summary:
The Guardian states that a lot of tests were run in Chicago in order to check if the water is polluted inside residential houses. It was found that many Chicago residents have lead, which is a neurotoxic metal. Thousands of Chicago residential houses are contaminated by lead in tap water. Although this is dangerous for both adults and children the city of Chicago still isn’t working on anything to prevent further contamination, and replace the pipelines that are contaminated. Back in 2021 the Chicago’s mayor condemned previous mayors and the city for not working on replacing pipelines and addressing the issue although she herself hasnât done much after a year. In 2022, 180 lead lines were replaced out of the half-million lead lines. School drinking fountains, residents, and bottled water all exceed the ppb level set by the EPA and The Food and Drug Administration. The Guardian suggests that more people should be aware about the water that theyâre drinking from and how harmful it is, as the Chicago official website only gives them numbers without analyzing what they mean and how dangerous those numbers that theyâre giving are. Most people are oblivious to this because of the city itself.
Quotes:
âThereâs a very clear data set here showing very concerning lead levels in Chicago â and the residents need to have this information,â said Betanzo, the founder of a water engineering firm. âLead is a potent, irreversible neurotoxin with no safe level of exposure and multigenerational impacts. The time to cut it off is as soon as possible. Foot dragging is helping nobody. This data shows lead well above the action level consistently, at addresses across the city again and again and again, and itâs been sitting here publicly available for years,â said Betanzo. âItâs amazing. Itâs shocking,â (McCornmick et al)
âNumerous studies have shown that, even at low levels, lead can leave an indelible impact on young children and adults. Once in the blood, lead can cross the blood-brain barrier and affect the nervous system. It has been linked to lower IQ levels, behavioral disorders and worsening performance in reading and mathâ (McCormick et al)
Rhetorical Analysis:
The Guardian is a reliable source, they’re mission is to inform people about different things that are happening, and they may or may not be fully aware of what’s going on. It educates people on many different things. So far this website is reliable and trustworthy because of the information that it provides to the readers and how well it explains it to them, there’s no confusion left. There are many people that donât understand the dangers of toxicity in water. The guardian is trying to help people understand the severity and danger water toxicity causes. It gives people that arenât educated on such topics an opportunity to learn about it.
The Guardian is targeting the residents of Chicago in this article, they talk about how the Chicago website isnât fully reliable as it only gives numbers without any analysis of what they mean. The guardian on the other hand gives numbers and gives details on how dangerous those numbers are. The Guardian also gives people data of how much pollution is average and how much the water they are drinking from has. The Guardian is trying to make people aware of how dangerous the water theyâre drinking from is. If the people know how dangerous this is theyâll call for a change, possibly pressure the city for a change to be made as theyâre lives and their kids’ lives are in danger.
1st RAB Entry
Sheehan, Lisa. âHow The Story Of Soccer Became The Story Of Everythingâ https://www.motherjones.com/politics/2022/11/soccer-football-corruption-oligarchs-cover-story-qatar-power-ball/
Summary:
This Article talks mainly about the introduction of clubs in soccer. When soccer started off, it was just local teams consisting of male or female local players that would join teams to play in local tournaments. But after some time, the introduction of clubs helped introduce a recruitment system and showed the way for cities to recruit top members who had promising careers into their teams. Then those clubs would then be put on rosters to play against each other to play games and win and advance to the next rounds up to the finals. The author states a valid point talking about the way the Europeans used something called League Pyramids. By doing this, teams could advance to the top of the bracket on the pyramid.The author also states that the way soccer is organized in the European market has a big influence on the way soccer is evolving and the ongoing debate about its future. League pyramids are used to organize teams in the European soccer system, which comprises England and the other fifty-four nations (excluding Liechtenstein). For example, there are many professional, semi-professional, and amateur leagues below the four divisions of 92 professional men’s teams that make up the English league system. The primary difference is that, in contrast to American professional baseball, there is no fixed membership in the top division. Teams have the option of being promoted or relegated at the end of each season. This article shows its target audience, which is soccer fans, how the soccer federation in Europe influenced other worldwide federations to form clubs.
Key Quotes:
âThe story of soccerâs glittery transformation, and the fight over what it will become, is fundamentally rooted in how the continentâs marketplace is structured. In England, and in each of the 54 other nations that constitute European soccer (with the exception of Liechtenstein), teams are organized into pyramids of leagues. There are 92 professional menâs teams in the English league system, split into four tiers, with a vast array of professional, semi professional, and amateur leagues below that. These pyramids are a bit like American professional baseball, but unlike it in a key way: Membership in the top flightâwhether itâs La Liga in Spain or the Kategoria Superiore in Albaniaâisnât fixed. Teams can be promoted to the league above them, or relegated to the league below them, at the end of each season.
â(Womenâs soccer is similarly organized, with menâs and womenâs teams often operating under the umbrella of the same clubs, but the sportâs benefactors have historically lavished their resources on the menâs game, so unless otherwise specified, those are the teams and competitions Iâm referring to.) The teams at the tippy-top of each nationâs pyramid qualify to play in European tournaments the next season, of which the most prestigious is the Champions League. In 2020â2021, the 32 teams that participated in the final rounds of the Champions League split $2 billion in prize money. The winner, Abramovichâs Chelsea, took in $126.5 million. The top of the pyramid is where the money isâbut itâs a long way down if you fall.â
Rhetorical Analysis:
This article provides much information towards the development of the European Soccer Federation and how it helped push soccer into the mainstream audience on television. The intended audience of the article is for people who question the creation of such federations. The goal that the author set for this article when they wrote it was to inform readers how the European federation helped format and shape the organizations and games we see today. This article also helps to support my research by implying information on some of the first federations created, helping extend knowledge to my readers. I enjoyed reading it and felt that it strongly helps with my research because the author states statistics and original research studies to provide an extensive amount of information for readers.
The information provided was trustworthy and credible because the author stated and quoted other researchers who dove into the topic of soccer. For example the author states â In 2004, Franklin Foer published How Soccer Explains the World: An Unlikely Theory of Globalization. It was a canonical text for Americans who took an interest in European soccer in the early 2000s, coinciding with the US womenâs World Cup victory and the menâs unlikely run to the quarterfinals; the movie Bend It Like Beckham; the actual David Beckham; and the emergence of satellite TV and illegal streaming.â This quotation shows that the author did not just go off their own personal knowledge and information, but rather used research that was done by others to amplify their own information. Whenever the author mentions a certain article or quotation taken from an article, the author makes the information accessible to the audience by installing links to guide the readers to the full articles and websites where they pulled the information from.