After examining Professor Wu’s comments on my Final draft 1, I plan to reorganize my education narrative. I will start by trying to clarify dates and make it more understandable. I will then make it more clear on how I did homework online and in school. I also plan to explain what I learned when I broke my ankle. Given all these points, I will once again give another scene and describe the scenes more in a descriptive way. To conclude I plan to meet with a tutor when we get back from the break to meet the requirements.
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