Finding Your Voice

Category: Unit 1 Final Draft (Page 1 of 8)

Final Essay

Herzliyya Lopez

English Composition 1101

Professor Hall

Final Draft

 

            As I wake up from my nap, I hear my parents conversing in the living room.        “Look at your cousin, she’s an honor roll! It’s because she works hard, maybe you will get an  honor roll one day if you work harder”. My mother tries to show it to me with a smile as I walk past her. This scene was very familiar. In an Asian household, it is very normal for parents or any adults to subconsciously compare you to your other relatives. Especially in education wise, because to these Asian parents, your grades are what defines you. It is very saddening to think that this is normalized and one of the toxic traits of an Asian household that every Asian kid knows about. However, I do understand that this was the generation they grew up in. The generation where they prioritized their education over their happiness, over their contentment, and over their mental state. Because for some, education was their only way out from their life’s misery. I knew my mother didn’t mean any harm when she showed me that picture and said what she said. However, many generations have passed, and this new generation is learning that not everyone has to fit in this box many generations have created it to be. They are learning to be successful in many ways, not just through education.

                I remember being in third grade and taking the state test. Because I didn’t meet the passing score that they set, I needed to go to summer school. If I did not pass the test the second time, I would have repeated third grade again.  Luckily, I passed it and enjoyed the rest of my summer. However, my other friend who also had to go to summer school did not pass her second exam. This meant that she needed to repeat another year of third grade, even after her hard work to go on to fourth grade. She still needed to repeat another year because of one test. But, this also meant that she needed to go back to zero of trying to make new friends as she sees her current friends move on without her. Just thinking about this again makes me wonder how lonesome it must have been for a third grader to see her friends move on while she needed to repeat another year in order to go on to fourth grade. It’s great to see this new generation unlearning the stereo type of fitting in the box in terms of the education system. However, this standardized test that evaluates your academic ability, is preventing other young people from believing that they are more than their test scores and worthier than their average grades. When will we get rid of this system that evaluates you if you are good enough to get promoted. Generations of generations have created this system that prevents young people who are excelling in other things, to shine and be confident of what they are good at. 

                 I go back to my room and open my social media. It’s that time of the year, graduation season. I see so many posts of parents posting their children’s academic excellence. There is totally nothing wrong with that, but it did make me wonder. Do the children that excel in different things other than academic excellence get posted in their parent’s social media, as much as the children that excel in academics? When will they ever be worth bragging about in their parents’ social media? 

                 Growing up, math and sciences was never my strength. I was average and under average for some subjects. However, I was always into creating and building. I was also into photography. It was only until high school that I realized I also had my own strengths. Because of this one class, in visual arts. There I’ve grown to love art and learned to use it as my strength. Although I was an average in my major classes, such as math and sciences, I was excelling in my elective class. Junior year, my photo portrait was chosen to be put in the Borough Arts Festival of the New York City Department of Education. This was also when my parents learned that their daughter may be average/under average for her major classes, but she was good at what she loved to do. 

                 Nonetheless, education is important. However, it should not be used to prevent children from growing and glowing in their own ways. Education should nurture their interests in other things, and it should not limit what they can and cannot do. It’s the simplest things like one elective class, that can help you thrive even more on the things you love. Maybe if the numbers on your report card did not have to define your intelligence. Maybe if the school recognized your other talents and offered more classes and freedom to do what you love to do, to support your strength. Maybe if you did not need to sacrifice your whole summer in order to be in school again to retake that test one last time. Maybe if the education system did not have a test score that you had to reach just so you get promoted to the next grade. Then maybe, these kids that excel outside the four cornered rooms, away from the rows of desks and chairs that make them sit still and have no space for them to move around. Maybe then, they’ll be worth bragging about. Maybe then, they’ll be good enough, not to get promoted, but just good enough. People are worth more than their academic excellence,  and this current generation is learning that. Unlearning the idea of putting your education over your happiness, contentment, and your mental and emotional state . Learning that you are good enough, no matter what you do and how you do.  They are unlearning the stereotypes of having to fit in the education system box.

 

 

Final Reflection

 

Starting college had such a big impact on me, I was happy to start this new journey but for some reason I realized that it gets hard if only you put your mind into it.  Bad k in high-school I was always a big fan of wetting because it was a way I would express myself when wasn’t able to speak or for myself in general, it has thought me so much and where you should really start to take your writing skills important. It can bring you as far because writing and reading are two of the major thing society would eventually use in their daily life. I wasn’t exactly good at it, or thought of it as something I would’ve actually enjoyed.  This course has thought me a lot, specially about things that I didn’t know before, or the using of other apps, that was something I was struggling with when I first enter the semester was to get used to the app and way homework is being posted. It  was also a requirement for my major which I would later use, in order to improve my writing. I had to change the way I would write within a matter of min when writing a long sentence, I had to make sure that I am at least using college words, and had to me sure that I sound good for my readers, at any given moment. But one thing I can also say about this class is how you don’t need to master at either writing or reading to be good/// as long as you are trying your best. I learned from my peers and the professor itself, all of the feedbacks which encourage me to do ore, and best. All of these have helped me in ways I can’t even explain.

After High school I worked on managing my time more, because I think its something that a lot of people might be struggling with. I used to have problem with doing homework on time, and even sending them on time back in high school. I decided to set a habit to always wok on the homework posted the day that its being posted, because the way I can finish it before the due date. The one major subject that I am currently struggling with but am trying my best is math, I as never a big fan of math but throughout my middle/high school year I would always try to do my best in the class, which ended up happening. I never once thought coming to college would make math so hide for me,   I would try a problem In class but once I am alone or no one to work with I attempt to have panic attack on how it will come out, I also do struggle with remembering things. That’s one of the reason why I tried my best to keep count of all my work in this course as possible. This caused me to procrastinate in the class and can be very unfocused and not being Abe to do well on quizzes, or exam, that’s why I decided to change my ways and make a habit for myself to always be practicing math problems, every time I get a chance.

 

I really really love this project it was by far one of the work that we spent quite an amount of time working on. I was able to get a lot of details for my topic which was really really hard because I didn’t want to end up sounding the same for every paragraph I would wrote. It was in a way a sad topic because of hoe everyone is familiar to it, and all of the this is actually real. I would hope in my next course it would be or at least feel the same as this one because it was very straightforward to understand. Nothing was hard about it, the task was ride and clear and the teacher itself is a good listener, as well as teaching. I feel like I do have a favorite assignment that we did in class, but because they’re all were really good I can’t keep count but to say all of them was really nice and understanding.

After every work that was given I learned a lot on how to improve my writing. I feel better because materials was easy enough that I didn’t really have questions for, and was able to understand most parts.

To conclude in this ELA course  my skills have change overtime I am also becoming more interested in writing, reading more. I also learned that in order to improve, you have to keep with not only the work that its being posted but also in class assignment and participating in a way that you can, and to just stay quiet. That way you would learned/know about the material faster than you know it. That’s exactly why I tried to keep my homework  around 100% in everything. I would also tried to track the level of my writing skills in any essay I am writing before sending it over. I was really scared that I was going to have a Mid average in this class but found out that I am always on track with everything (I tried to be) and for that I was really happy, because English was never a course that I would do bad in. I loved every skills that the professor used in this class, because it boost my writing skills that I didn’t really have before. Now  I am able to know step by step how to write an argumentative essay and all the other essays without missing any steps that we covered in class. I can use these skills in the future for myself so I can outgrow and also help either my peers while in class, and outside Family/friends.

 

12/13 Unit one self review

  • What do l do well in this assignment? 

the usage of big words

 

  • What is my main point? What is the “so what” of this paper?

My main point was for people to understand the struggle of black suffrage in America

 

  • Who is my audience? Do I use the right language and tone to reach that audience?

My audience is the teachers, students, family members and every head police departments

 

  • What specific part(s) of the essay were a bit confusing? Why?

I don’t think any part of my essay was confusing

 

  • What specifically could I do to clarify the unclear parts of this writing? * (see below for suggestions)

rereading can be one to help this essay

 

  • What details, facts, or stories could you add to enhance the essay?

I don’t think I need any more details to add to enhance my essay.

 

  • What specific detail(s) do not work could be cut from the essay or could be moved within the essay for more clarity?

Nothing needs to be cut because the story won’t flow without each part.

Hw for 12/8/2022 Artists Statement

I became interested in this topic because I also did a project about it back in high school, and I was involved with other organizations as well that had something to do with immigrants refugee, and the struggle that the black community goes through. It’s a topic that really touches my heart, because talking about it might sound disturbing to the audience do to the things that be happening to us(black) In America. Another reason why I was interesting in writing this was because it was a topic that I am able to express my feelings more to it, than any other topics. People need to realized that this might never stop they will keep treating black like old time (slavery time) and its so not fair because we’ve protested as many time as we can, we started really slow and not doing too much. We did not even start with violence, but at one point of time we were giving  them our voice and they (cops) were giving us their bullets. Enough was said and we decided to go harder, because our voice wasn’t being heard.

The purpose of the making this project was because of the lack of success society has once again failed the black community in America. And I am directing this informations to students, Families, teachers  and all the local/private police department which include the government as well. Because there the one who once suppose to protect us, but they are hurting us in any process.

I picked this genre (poem) because I feel like it’s another way of expressing how you’re feeling  truthfully or people in general. I am usually used to power point type, or docs but I decided to go with poem because it was a better way to basically wrap up everything in this project.

Doing this project was really fun and a lot of emotions such as: sad, anger, patience, and also doubtful. It went pretty well overall the only thing I was scared of was repeating myself over and over again which I definitely did not want, and did not come across so I am happy for that. I had to change the topic question, just so it can match the whole writing.

Now that its done I definitely think it turned out okay for the most part, it was a poem I did not want to make it too long, or too short I just kept it simple and mid to understand. Yes I went over it so many time and even end up changing my thoughts overtime about how and what would I be writing in this poem. I don’t think there anything I would’ve done different maybe next poem to be a bit longer than this one, I am just happy I reached this far without missing any steps, because that was one of my worries to I feel like it wasn’t hard or easy more so in the middle, at least for me. I think so because you’ll need to focus in order to be thinking about what will you write, this as a college project was so awesome to me because I never thought I would be doing that in college (meaning I thought it would’ve been way harder, and different) it reminds me of my old self back in high school. I can perfectly say that I see myself doing using all of these tools later in the future, as I did making this project.

 

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