What do l do well in this assignment?
what I did well in this assignment was that i made sure to talk about more of the self-experience in order to get my point across.
What is my main point?
the main point was to show how the education system failed me and made me see things differently, to the point of almost doubting myself.
What is the “so what” of this paper?
the so what is me having the courage to actually take that as an advantage for myself to seek my best potential within myself and continuing to do my best no matter what the bad outcomes that I encountered.
Who is my audience?
my audience would be middle and high school students due to them being the ones who mostly struggle with the judgement of their work due to upcoming and advanced education.
Do I use the right language and tone to reach that audience?
I think that I can use more formal, perspective, and informative tone and language instead of just perspective in order for the audience to not be bored or confused to my point and experience. I can’t write my work in a way that I obviously already know of, so I have to do better in making it be a more of an informative and descriptive writing for the reader to know every detail that is going on
What specific part(s) of the essay were a bit confusing? Why?
the way I would transition my topics were a bit confusing. I didn’t put enough concrete writing which made everything a bit confusing as to how one thing happened than the other.
What specifically could I do to clarify the unclear parts of this writing?
Work on my writing structure and analysis when explaining my points
What details, facts, or stories could you add to enhance the essay? What specific detail(s) do not work could be cut from the essay or could be moved within the essay for more clarity?
I can add more experience about others too so the reader can see the variety of experiences that tag along to mine, and they can relate to their own experiences to the writing and know that they are not alone.
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