Author: Patrina Ayamba (Page 6 of 10)

In the video you posted giving me feed back on my essay, you said my essay was really good, I was very descriptive and had a very captivating story.  Overall you said you liked my essay but there where some areas that you found confusing because it was a bit all over the place. The last paragraph of my essay you said was a bit unorganized because it did not seem like I was following the timeline/ events in order.

How I will use these suggestions to help revise my unit 1 finale essay is that I will take all the feed back that you gave and change certain things or add more details to make my essay more clear and easy to understand.

These suggestions will help me in unit two because I will know to add more details and be as clear and descriptive as possible so that my essay won’t be confusing and every thing will flow smoothly.

In the article “Is Mansa Musa the richest man who ever lived by”  Naima Mohamud from BBC news Africa, the author talks about Mansa Musa’s enormous wealth and how he gained this enormous wealth. The author also talks about and emphazies’s Mansa Musa’s extreme generosity. In the text it states “So lavishly did he hand out gold in Cairo that his three-month stay caused the price of gold to plummet in the region for 10 years, wrecking the economy”.  In this quote Naima talks about how Mansa Musa’s generosity lead to Cairos price of gold to plummet because he gave out so much gold it began to lose its value.  

Who’s the Author ?  The author is Naima Mohamud and he works with the organization BBC Africa.

Who is the Audience? It is a very general audile, this article wasn’t targeted at a specific group of people or person, just anyone interested in Mansa Musa.

What is the Occasion? The author created this text to educate people more on Mansa Musa’s life and who  he was and how he became the wealthiest person to ever live. 

What’s the purpose? The purpose is to inform people about Mansa Musa’s life.

What is the genre?  Very Descriptive 

What is the tone? This has a neutral tone.

Relevance? This does help me answer my question a lot because it gives me a lot of details and information. 

Accuracy: This article is very accurate because a lot of authors have talked about similar things written in this article.

In the article “Is Mansa Musa the richest ma who ever lived by”  Naima Mohamud from BBC news Africa, the author talks about Mansa Musa’s enormous wealth and how he gained this enormous wealth. The author also talks about and emphazies’s Mansa Musa’s extreme generosity. In the text it states “So lavishly did he hand out gold in Cairo that his three-month stay caused the price of gold to plummet in the region for 10 years, wrecking the economy”.  In this quote Naima talks about how Mansa Musa’s generosity lead to Cairos price of gold to plummet because he gave out so much gold it began to lose its value.

Who’s the Author ?  The author is Naima Mohamud and he works with the organization BBC Africa.

Who is the Audience? It is a very general audile, this article wasn’t targeted at a specific group of people or person, just anyone interested in Mansa Musa.

What is the Occasion? The author created this text to educate people more on Mansa Musa’s life and who  he was and how he became the wealthiest person to ever live.

What’s the purpose? The purpose is to inform people about Mansa Musa’s life.

What is the genre?  Very Descriptive

What is the tone? This has a neutral tone.

Relevance? This does help me answer my question a lot because it gives me a lot of details and information.

Accuracy: This article is very accurate because a lot of authors have talked about similar things written in this article.