For my unit 1 essay the comments I received were my actual expectations. I did expect most of the comments because i knew this writing want my best work. I need to work on elaborating more my work instead of just talking straightforward. Parts that were personal or that I didn’t want to go do in-depth from that I should at least try to still directly speak about to not get the reader confused without still telling exactly what happened , so like give them an idea instead of a guess . Also making my points clear for each scene by breaking it down more  into sectional paragraphs just so everything doesn’t start crumbling on-top  of each other. To not be too poetic on the wording but be more understandable with the topic and meaning of the descriptive writing. Fix sentence structure. I will use these suggestions by now having a better understanding of how my writing can flow better with what I’m trying to tell the reader making sure that my language is as coherent as possible. How I can also use these suggestions for unit 2 would be to actually give my whole opinion in a topic and hopefully learn something out if it for my own understanding and to others , because for unit 1 I was talking about something I already knew of but others didn’t so the language will be different for unit 2 since I’m talking about something that me and others don’t know of yet