Now that you have written your first drafts, what term would you use to encapsulate your first drafts (well, other than shitty). Think about how you felt when writing , afterwards, or during/after our peer review conference. Do you think that word will follow through to your final drafts? If so, why or why not? Will it change, and why? Define that word that describes your first draft and explain why it captures your first draft through examples.
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When writing my first draft I felt like it had to be perfect on the spot and after reading “Shitty First Drafts” I realized that in order to have something at least decent, you just have to start and put something down on paper even if it does not make sense in that moment. When I first started writing my introduction, I jumped into the details of my story without giving a warm welcome to the readers. I did not connect with them generally and felt I started off a bit too rough. I only then realized this when I had submitted it and got feedback. If I was too worried of the outcome of my intro, I would not have gotten the feedback I did in order to improve it. I felt my word was fine and I will continue to use it throughout my essay. The word that describes my fist draft in my opinion would be harsh because I started off with a huge bang instead of a soft welcoming.
I believe that a big bang is what truly gets your reader moving; a nice welcome might be tedious at times because you’re so used to it in most writers’ introductions, you know? I believe you should preserve the enormous bang notion, but make your introduction less descriptive so that you have something to write about in your body paragraphs. I think bold is a better term than harsh. You have an idea and a terrific notion. Just experiment with your writing more. I am confident that your paper will be excellent.
Hello Lauren, I agree that the introduction part is an area of frustration because although you might know what to write, when you actually start writing, you just got with your thoughts instead of thinking about the structure.
I have a hard time to do my first draft because I don’t know what kind of topic i would like to share, Im okay on writing i don’t have a problem in writing but it become difficult to me when i have to write in english, i have to use translator and i can’t really express what i want to say because there is no word by word translation. I feel proud, i like writing i have journal when I want to talk to Jesus, I have journal for what i have done for today diary. I did wrong in my drafts because i feel like i do more like a research paper like just giving information, not a blog that is relate to me and sharing. it will change because im learning in my first draft what should i do and do not, just like the examples, just looking back of the draft it gives more ideas and corrections and will fix it, what is missing, check if its right or wrong. My first draft will need a retouch to improve and attract more readers.
Hello, I give you credit for attempting to write in English. It’s not easy writing in a different language and from what it looks like, you have done a great job translating your thoughts in English. I also had a hard time choosing a topic but I feel it’s nice to challenge ourselves with new ideas even if we don’t feel like it would be good. First drafts aren’t supposed to be easy and they don’t have to be perfect, starting with something is more than enough.
Personally, I believe my first draft to be passable. I should have double spaced, I made a few punctuation errors, and I should have expanded on certain paragraphs. I had trouble coming up with an introduction to the topic when I was writing my paper, but once I got the hang of it, the ideas just came to me. I don’t think the word will spread, but I am confident that my work will be excellent because I have taken into account all of my peer critiques. Strong is a good term to use to describe my initial draft. This, in my opinion, best describes my initial draft of the paper because, while it is lacking some typical flaws and information on my opinions, it is otherwise fairly strong.
hopefully you will get a good grade for your efforts and confidence you put in your paper especially when you have not gotten to the last draft.
Hello Johanna, I do agree with the part that the introduction is the hard part. This is because although you might have the idea, starting something is kind of bothering since you have a hard time deciding how to start.
I agree with you, In the first draft we make some common mistakes that we usually do but, the first draft its also for us. What I mean its that it doesn’t need to be organized as long as you understand it.
One word that I would use to describe my first draft would be the word expand. This is because when you write your first draft, I think it is more about getting what you want to say down. Once you have that step down, you will kind of know what direction you want to walk. In this draft, in my opinion, the hardest part was instead to know what word or phrase you want to write about that connects to your society. This is because of the role confusion that you have. This means that you have multiple identities in your community, and you have to figure out who you are. This causes me to not know what to write. However, after knowing what to write like having the word or phrase down, I was able to continue expanding by using this phrase. Once you know what you want to write about, you will be able to continue and expense and as your ideas expand on, you will know how to branch these ideas together and organize. This word will follow throughout my final drafts because my essay can definitely continue to improve. Any essays are not perfect thus I believe that continuing to expand is always possible and where you want to expand till is another thing.
I agree, I experiences the same feeling when writing because more ideas are popping up into my head even stronger vocabulary sometimes to make it look more professional.
Hello Winson, I like the word you chose because the truth is essays take a couple of tries to even be close to perfect and even then there will always be room for improvement. I had no clue what word to describe my first draft and I feel like I didn’t even like the word that I chose but that is part of the process, getting something down and realizing that you can make changes to your paper is the reason why we make first drafts in the first place.
I agree with you and think that expand or expandable is a great word to describe a first draft. You make an excellent point that the initial draft is really just about getting those core ideas and key phrases down on paper first. It doesn’t have to be perfectly organized or fully fleshed out yet.
I felt kind of sad writing about it because many of the people who were there at the time during my younger years, they are actually deceased. but in general not much change regarding the law being on the LGBTQ side. while I was writing about them I felt as if it was yesterday every time i thought of thing that had happened from what I remembered to put it down, so i did not forget . that is how my writing was kind of all over the place but very surprise when my introduction was really a body paragraph. I had run to the writing center to help me to get it right. I was happy that i did took it to them. but they did not get a chance to see the changes that I did to the assignment because they are too booked to review it with me. they made me realize how some sentences that were so connected with each other were so scattered, so I rearranged them, and removed unnecessary sentences. I will continue making changes because I believe It can improve with more assistance and when I review the paper again.
I’m sure your paper will look fantastic! and I appreciate that you asked for assistance. To help you see how fantastic your piece will be, you received some support in the form of a backbone. I apologize if your thesis made you feel depressed, but it’s a subject you’re very passionate about and can really relate to. I’m hoping to read it eventually!
Now that I’ve written my first draft, I’d describe it as very rough. When I first started it was kind of difficult to figure out what to begin with. So, I used a method that I had learned from one of my previous teachers to get started. I think the word will follow me to my final draft because I honestly wouldn’t know how to write about any other word, and I’ll be done with the writing soon. The word rough describes my first draft because the ideas may have been a little all over the place at first.
The word rough can be used to describe probably everyone’s first draft unless you’re a very experienced professional writer. I like how you took advantage of your previous knowledge to help you complete your first draft. I can relate to that because without my previous knowledge, I’d have a much harder time writing papers. There’s so many aspects of writing to master such as sentence structure, grammar, detail relevancy and so many more.
I agree, that sometimes it might be difficult to know how to write the first draft or have the structure of what you going to say. That why is important to just write everything that comes to our minds and in the second draft organize it better.
Writing my first draft was more convenient than I though it would be. It’d help me a lot throughout my final draft and extended more ideas. Although there was a struggles to connect the ideas all together to make it more clear because the first draft I wrote had less informations but more specific. The word will follow through my final draft because the ideas and information naturally comes itself and more lot easier as well. The word I choose is “Maitri dharma” represent as a Peace I choose this word because it always makes me think of a time when I meditated that bring more relaxing. I will keep on going forward writing more about this word and I will make sure it’ll turn out nice content by rereading after i’m done with each paragraph or after I’m done with final essay.
I agree with you, doing the second draft helps a lot because it shows you what you need to expand, It also helped me that in my first draft, I was missing information.
Writing my first draft didn’t feel too hard. I grew up with the word that I wrote about so it didn’t make it hard I just had to research some things but either then it came together quite well. I had a little trouble with how I would make this whole thing like work because I know of the word just didn’t know how to put it all together to become one.
Hi Christopher, I agree that getting the words is easy but putting them together is the hard part. I feel like in every writing, you know what to write but either doesn’t know how to put the information together.
Writing my first draft I felt overwhelmed. I felt like I wanted to put so much into the whole essay but that also made me avoid completing it till later. My first draft tho was all over the place. I wrote a few completed paragraphs but I just felt like it needed more. Additionally. I was writing too much on the history and not enough on the other topics I wanted to hit about being a Puerto Rican in New York.
Hello Halley, I agree with the part saying that you want to write more but that cause you to lose out other areas because I usually tend to do the same thing and I had to look back to make sur I fixed them.
My first draft was okay. The introduction jumped around a bit but got to a point. The body paragraphs had some decent information about what “brick” and “cook” mean in the reselling community, but they jumped around a lot instead of flowing smoothly. And there wasn’t much of a conclusion wrapping things up. But that’s what first drafts are for – just getting ideas down on paper, even if they’re messy. I’ll work on tightening up the introduction so it has a clear thesis statement. I’ll reorganize the body paragraphs to explain the terms more logically and add better examples.
Writing my first draft was easy to make because I was writing what came to my mind and brainstorming my ideas. The first draft helped me to have a structure of what I’m going to talk about in the paper I would do. However, When I was doing my second draft. I was able to see what I was missing from my first draft. It helps me a lot to see my mistakes because when I was reading, I found that my draft needed more details and go further. It also showed me some common mistakes I could make like running of sentences or staying without ideas but, when you talk more in detail, more questions come to my mind in the moment of writing.