Category Archives: Revision Materials
Essay 1 and Essay 4 Review: Transition Words for Integrating Sources
Essay 1 and Essay 4 Review: Transition Words for Beginnings, Middles, and Ends
Writing for Success: Chapter on Revision
Writing For Success: Chapter 12.2: Developing a Final Draft of Your Research Paper
This chapter is one we looked at thoroughly in class. There is advice for word choice and checklists that discuss how to approach revision. The material echoes techniques we’ve done throughout the semester. Keep working!
Here are transition sheets you’ve received. I’m including them again for easy access:
Transitions for Integrating Sources
https://openlab.citytech.cuny.edu/brain-on-the-page-fall-2017/2017/09/19/essay-1-transitiā¦egrating-sources/
Transitions for Beginnings, Middles, and Ends
https://openlab.citytech.cuny.edu/brain-on-the-page-fall-2017/2017/09/19/essay-1-transition-words-for-beginnings-middles-and-ends/
Instructions for Revision Essay 3
Transition Words for Revision
Student Post: Body Paragraphs!
This is a body paragraph composed in class by Tyler, Valencia, and Justin:
From personal experience within the first week of my freshmen year in college , I’ve come to the conclusion that the workload Ā is not like high school. If students aren’t on top of the work given it can easily pile up and catch up to them. Often the work isn’t hard it’s just the amount given that can become overwhelming. Because scheduling in college is more flexible and shortened throughout the day unlike high school where you are given more classes put into one day of scheduling the work load given by professors is intensified which may cause freshman to feel overwhelmed. The intensity of the work given in college can be attributed to classes like English where there’s required research and for students to further their thinking beyond what they may have done in their early school years. According to Tugend in “preparing emerging adults for college and beyond” identifies step solutions to ease the feelings of anxiety or pressure felt after entering college. Tugged states “Identify what you’re feeling and communicate it to others this may be most effective to those who feel uneasy on tackling assignments given by professors.” In addition Tugend says “Approach a group of similar age peers and ask them a question” this can help students build friendships and be around those they can relate to which can relieve pressures and frustration.
Essay 1: Instructions for Revision
Revisions are due on Thursday, Sept. 28!
The Fix: Essay 1-Introductory Paragraphs
Below is “The Fix” we worked on in class together. Our focus was on introductory paragraphs and the overall architecture of the classic essay format. We also worked on developing ideas to support thesis statements.