English 1101 Fall 2019 Section 413
Composition 1
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Loved the lessons learned from being an adult just some minor grammar mistakes and “school life” being too repetitive.
I like your essay. I agree with this and also wish I could time travel back to when I had no responsibilities. A way that you can improve your essay is by revising your grammar. Â And using âyouâ instead of âuâ.
I like your essay. I agree with this and also wish I could time travel back to when I had no responsibilities. A way that you can improve your essay is by revising your grammar. Â And using âyouâ instead of âuâ.
Kazi, I really liked your story. It was relatable in so many ways and as I was reading it, I agreed with what you had to say multiple times. School is definitely not for everyone, as you mentioned in your story. When were younger, we took advantage of the freedom and privilege we had and, as we got older we learned that. School is also fun, being able to see and hangout with friends everyday. However, it is the work that makes it less enjoyable. Once again, your essay was great and relatable. For a few constructive criticism, reread your work, uses commas and basically just check out for grammatical errors.
I l0ve how your story is so connecting and relatable. It made me really think about how I took the last year for granted cause now I’m 18 and have a lot of responsibilities to handle lol. I would also say work on grammar. Using “you” instead of “u” and putting the correct punctuations. Also try not to be too repetitive on saying “school life”.
I like the experience you learn about life. But I think you need to fix your grammar mistake and and be carefully with
(, and .) Also donât write (u) like that. Write in complete word (you).
Kazi really enjoy your story. I felt like I was sort of watching a mini movie because you were so descriptive and it allowed me to envision what exactly was going on. Just some minor grammatical mistakes but besides that good job man.
A word of advice when typing an essay is that I always use auto-correct to prevent me from at least having misspelled words or typing with slangs. I would like to hear more about how your transition from being a kid to someone with responsibilities happened and about the moment you realized as a kid wishing to be grown was exactly what other people told you.
Grammatical wise the main issues are when using “i” instead of using “I.” A lot of the times it is necessary to capitalize I, not always but a lot of the time. Also using “u,” instead of using you. Regardless I love the message, but maybe you can give some specific tores about the times where you lived in the moment, when your peers probably didn’t.
Your story is very relatable, everyone wants to grow up and as we slowly reach adult like we realize that itâs not at all what we had thought it would be now we wish we can go back to when times were easier with less responsibilities. Your essay has a few grammar mistakes and I felt like you shouldâve added some commas to your work.
Try reconstructing some of your sentences without the word âusedâ and also correct all the âUâ mistakes (it happens I do it sometime also).There are also some Capitalization mistakes.But overall I understood the point you were trying to make that we should all make the most of the time we have now and not just throw it away by doing nothing.
Love the story. Growing is something definitely hurd a lot about especially coming into college. I am glad you through that out here. Thanks for sharing. I will just say work on revising the grammar.
it was a great story hearing how you grew up and we reach to be adults and you want to take everything back and have no responsibilities it was good try working on structure to better your essay