Hi Class…remember that you must turn in Essay 3 on Thursday.
1. Buy a friend a cup of coffee and have them read over your essay and make comments.
2. Pay a friend/colleague a nickle for every mistake or problem that they find.
3. Read your essay out loud. Enunciate each word. If something is wrong, your ear usually picks it up.
4. Read “backwards.” This is a technique used by professional editors: starting at the end of your essay, read each sentence in reverse order (don’t read the words in reverse order).
5. Revise each topic sentence to reveal exactly what the paragraph is trying to claim/assert.
6. Replace all weak verbs; change passive verbs to active verbs.
7. Make sure that your topic sentences are aligned with your thesis. Do they help support your overall thesis? They should.
8. Make sure that your thesis, topic sentences, and your conclusion speak to each other–that they are linked. Revise as needed.
For Thursday: in a folder please make sure to put the following:
-Peer Reviews (2)
-Photocopy or print-out of each direct quotation source (minimum 5)
-Final Draft: Essay on top of the Annotated Bibliography (stapled and with page numbers)
Good luck and I’ll see you Thursday.
This student essay was written for my ENG 1101 class in 2012. Note that this sample essay is good, quite good, but it is not perfect. I think that it may be instructive to study this essay in order to understand what a sincere and significant effort can produce. Please note my margin notes; I’ve put them on the essay to help you see where this writer faltered–where you can make improvements that this writer missed.
Here is a student sample of a “B+” Annotated Bibliography.
Note: The interview (primary source) does not need to be completed by Tuesday.
Sorry! I thought on Tuesday, April 29 you were to turn in the topic summary and 5 questions–but that is due on Thursday, May 1. I apologize for that mistake.
We will have another library day on Tuesday. Please meet in class.
To repeat: The topic summary and 5 key questions are due Thursday (I will call this assignment Journal 6 for accounting purposes).
I hope that your Spring Break is going marvelously! For our return on Thursday, April 24th, please have Journal 5 ready: Read Deak and Egan in our textbook and then write 250 words on which of the two writer’s is harder to understand and why. Typed, double-spaced. Also, please bring your books to class.
Do you have an idea of Essay 3? Email me your ideas. I have already approved several ideas.
I took this photo of Bronx County Hall of Justice on East 161 Street on my way home from school. The sun reflection on the windows of this court building had hit me while I was walking. The symmetrical windows frames creates many noticeable and plain to see rectangles and trapezoids, while the refection makes a unbalance. Mood of this photo is peaceful cause of the reflection of clouds and the sun reflecting off the windows.
3/25/2014, The Run to Class
This photo was taken in front of the City tech campus on the corner of
Johnson Street and Jay Street. On my way to the school, I’ve noticed how most of the environment looked straight and orderly even the people had a order look to them to my position in the street. One side had people leaving and the other had students walking to the building. Sadly, when I took the photo I moved the camera in a hurry to get to class on time. But it ended up really good, the framing of the camera contradicts the cracks in the cement I could imagine the person holding the camera following or running like in a chase scene in a movie.
While walking home from school, I was thinking of a what type of photo to take for a project I had coming up. I decided to take a photo of the street I was walking down. The sidewalk was filled with snow and the tree’s had no leaves. The sky was cloudy and looked like it would drop more snow any second. The street was filled with parked cars and the road was clear of snow.