Mariam Illiassou’s Portfolio
- Unit 1
- Unit 2
- Unit 3 – Comic, Poster, & Artist Statement
- Reflection
Category: Portfolio & Reflection (Page 3 of 6)
Unit one
In the anime world, there are two different groups of people. There are the weebs who are casual people who watched one or two animes then there are the otakus who are really into more than just anime but the Japanese culture overall. These two names have been the top subject for anime watchers for a while so definitions get weird and hazy. All you need to do is be really into anime and the culture, in general, to truly be an otaku. Overall otakus love to gatekeep anime from new watchersÂ
For example when people gate-keeping anime by calling them a weeb. One day when one of my friends got really into anime we had a conversation with some of my non-anime friends. “Have you seen the new episode of demon slayer yet it’s really good?” Said my friend as he showed me a clip from the new anime episode where two of the main characters were in trouble. We continue to talk about how we want the rest of the fight to go down but our 2 other non-anime watchers join the call and see us talking about anime like usual and tell us to stop being weebs. It’s annoying. (a weeb is someone who wishes they could speak and be more Japanese) Anata wa baka o shitte imasu ka (what do you know idiot) I say as a joking argument starts. “Oh now you wanna talk in Japanese right,” he says as I continue to yell at him. I just love to watch anime. What’s wrong with that? As I look to my right I see my posters and figures. There is nothing wrong with having a hobby you love. What about your sports addiction? I saw it with one of my friends. Sports are different, he would always say when we have this talk. It is still a hobby you are addicted to, therefore you are an otaku, my friend. I think that’s different, he says again. Well, anyways I didn’t feel like explaining this basic thing to you anyways loser.
Another time where I feel the two words was a big impact on a situation was when I was hanging out at anime con and we were cosplaying around as anime characters just having fun. It was a nice sunny day when we first walked in. All I saw were anime posters. To my right was a giant crowd waiting to get inside the convention. All around me there were people who shared the same common interest. When we finally got inside the convention we saw a group of people having a discussion. They were talking about the difference between a weeb and an otaku. My friends walk up because we always have this conversation and my friend says, an otaku Is someone who is well-versed in Japanese culture and actually wants to know more about it. On the other hand, a weeb is just someone who watches anime and wishes they could speak Japanese. They then say does an otaku has to speak Japanese. He said yes but in my opinion, I feel like you just have to at least show interest in actually learning and actually know about the culture in general. We then explore the rest of the convention and have fun taking pictures with other anime watchers. We got lots of posters and figurines that day. Near the last day of the convention, we meet the author of this really cool anime and she talks to us about the discrimination of weebs since they don’t really want to take that much of an interest in anime but enjoy it in their own way. Since most otakus make fun of weebs.Â
lastly, near the end of the long years of gatekeeping and segregating where people finally excepted the differences and realized that it wasn’t a problem. I went to a comic con, it was a very cold time. My friend and I had to walk through many people since the line was really long. When we finally got in we got to see everyone’s costumes and their favorite characters. I ended up seeing people who were super into their characters and they all really loved what they were doing since they had some actors/ voice actors there. They also had posters and figurines and most of them sold out on the first day since it was a 3-day thing. I even ended up getting some posters of my own, being an otaku in the anime community is often seen as a good thing some believe it is only anime-related but it really can be used for any hobby. Like how I am really into most of my hobbies and I always want to know more about them. There is nothing wrong with it but people still find a way in my community to make fun of people for having something they want to see more of or learn more of and it’s really sad. It all started around 2017 when anime was kicking up and people were really getting into it before then people didn’t think of anime as something that was normal. People that were always into anime were gatekeeping newcomers from getting into the community and learning more about the culture. That was where the terms weeb and it was used to differentiate new people from people who âcaredâ about anime truly.
even though I was a problem I was once one of the people who gatekept anime the last time I did it was the time I went to watch an anime movie when the first one was allowed to air in the united states. It was a warm day at around 12 pm, I had just walked into the theater and sat down with my friends. Right before the movie starts and I and my friends look around and jokingly say look at all of these mainstream weebs. We continue to laugh for a little and joke here and there at people’s reactions to the movie since we have already seen it. Since then I never really used the word in a negative way since most if not all anime watchers find being called a weeb super insulting. Overall the talk about weebs and otakus died in my friend group and everywhere else for that matter. Sadly there are still the few though who do gatekeep.
At the end of the day, all you need to do is be really into anime and the culture, in general, to truly be an otaku. The title almost all anime watchers want and need to feel good about their anime addiction. I find being an otaku very really ridiculous at this point in my life but I still end up using it anyway since it is so engraved in my hobby. I am proud nonetheless because I get to feel somewhat rewarded for being a true fan of the Japanese culture and language. Being an otaku is the best and I wouldn’t change a thing about it. Gokigenâyo (have a nice day.)
unit two
Don’t you love technology? What if someday it was gone. No more hardware no more cars and no more silicone-based products. Well, that’s what almost happened when covid came. It lead to a lot of things being sold out even things like basic appliances. For many people, especially gamers and big technology people this is an issue.
When covid went in full swing the demand for things like hardware went up. It caused silicone and other materials to be drained. No company could meet the demand of consumers, Except for the bigger companies as you could call the tech giants who had a big part in the market and had control over where the resources went. In the end, there was a big backlog of orders and no one could get what they wanted. My main concern is if big companies should be able to control the flow of everything even if other smaller companies need it more due to demand.
There weren’t anything companies could do “Even while manufacturing declined, demand boomed. Silicon chips are in nearly every computer, smart-home product, wireless gadget, and gaming device. As the pandemic shifted the places people work and seek entertainment”. In short, there was a manufacturing decrease because people wanted more. while people were in lockdown with nothing else to do there was a big demand for things like games and computers. There was also a need for things to just keep people busy and in the time we are in that would be technology. sadly there weren’t enough resources for people to get all that they wanted expressly for companies like Sony and for graphics card companies like Nvidia. which made things harder for companies to meet demands and with that, they were forced to lower the value of their projects. They had to lower things like heatsinks as well as the release of new products such as the new steam deck that was going to come out in 2021 but had to be delayed. It wasn’t even just computers and consoles that people couldn’t get. People wanted new amazon technology and other companies’ electronics but due to Amazon’s huge hand in the stocks, they were able to buy enough of what they needed to make.
While all of this is going on there were things like “The silicon issue also captures how the global energy crisis is cascading through economies in multiple ways. The slashing of output in China, far and away from the worldâs biggest silicon producer, is the result of efforts to reduce power consumption.”. With the increase in demand, there was also a bigger push to the global energy crisis. This was also one of the reasons why they slowed down production, they wanted to slow down the flow of people buying electronics. They have even done other things to try and fix it such as lowering how much electricity people can use for things like the internet and overall data usage.
As people complained about people not being able to buy products that they want some started to come up with plans “I think that they shouldn’t be closed off to people just because of stock value, there should be a first come first serve base but with a cap on how much you can buy.”. All the people that didn’t have the out-of-stock new products were upset so they tried to come up with plans to make things work out since now it’s still kind of a problem. We are just arent at the point where companies can go back to the old values of products. This really affected the gaming community so much that it made people start scalping and selling them for way too high of a price, for example, there was a bot buying out PlayStation 5’s and selling them for 1000$ when it costs 500$. “I feel like after 4 months or so of them not being able to make what they needed to make the people who control the flow of reserves should give them more than other companies that are well of in products.” With this idea, there was a plan to give the companies that were struggling to meet demands the things that they needed instead of the companies who only have bigger stocks being able to buy more than others. It even created a backlog for some companies since some had yearly updates in hardware but since there wasn’t enough they had to delay it and make it way later than it should have been. It was a really dark time for some people with all the scalpers taking everything and the actual gamers not being able to get the products that they paid for and not being able to do anything with china not having enough production rates to meet the demand for silicone.
It really got so bad that people started to question if we will get any new technology for a while. “People were furloughed or laid off in 1Q & 2Q. When demand started to pick up, companies were not able to get the manpower needed to produce products to meet demand. Covid-19 quarantine protocols had a significant impact on manpower. Many companies reported up to 5-10% of the workforce were in mandatory quarantine over a 2-4 month period. In addition, additional federal unemployment assistance made it less attractive to come back to work.”. what this shows is that silicone produces were not able to keep companies stock. There weren’t enough people making things for the demand needed. I feel like covid really messed with people’s minds and it was all a big chain reaction of bad things coming at once. People were stressed and they needed more things to do since they got let go from jobs and there wasn’t anywhere to go other than doing things inside. It was just a big problem in general with the main cause of the lack of silicone being the workers who produced it were cut in half with only some people still there to continue making the silicone
Covid really hit gaming companies hard with the drop in silicone and manpower. It really got to the point where the future of technology wasn’t looking so good it was really a scary time with people losing jobs and the gaming community trying to fill some of the gaps but not being able to without the resources to do so. With the world finally slowly going back to how things were, I think the resources will come back if not already. So when these companies are back on their feet they can continue to make things without the struggle of fighting bigger people to get the products they need.
unit three
I think the process for my podcast is going well I have made a really good script and I have made a really good plan for how I want to record it. There were also some times when I got some word blocks and I didn’t know how I wanted to have some of the interactions go but it was a fun process since all the people I asked to fill roles all liked the topic. I really took a lot of inspiration from some of the more popular podcasters since the ones I was watching have been covering topics that were much like what I was covering. changing around some things such as the cast since I got 2 extra people. I also had to change what parts are where so that it was entertaining for people to listen to.
The silicone drought is my main point and I chose to make a podcast because it would really speak to people who would care about the production of silicone-based products. Mainly because gamers and most people who are into cars like listening to podcasts while doing other things. I originally wanted to make an infographic but I thought a podcast would fit more since it would be a little entertaining and something that people are used to at this point. It was also something I thought would be fun to do since I have some fun making scripts and acting out things.
I learned how to better meet the needs of the audience attending and I’ve learned that I’m good at making scripts. I hope my audience learns how much covid actually affected us.
Final reflection
I realized that the majority of my fall semester classes will be in person when I was registering. This piqued my interest in attending in-person classes. I haven’t been able to attend in-person classes for the last two years because of covid, and we have all had to do online classes for the last two years, which I liked at first but became a nightmare for me as time went on. We have lost our social lives as a result of covid, which makes most individuals miserable. I believed that college would include in-person classes after a year of online high school classes. However, due to the terrible state of the covid situation in New York City, CUNY has decided to provide the majority of fall semester sessions online. Students cannot learn as much in online classes as they can in in-person classes, in my opinion. And my fall was entirely virtual, and it went well. Soon after my autumn semester, CUNY announced that the spring semester classes will be 70% in person. The majority of my classes became in-person after the spring semester began, and I began my first semester of college studies in-person.
I’ve learned a lot about myself as a reader, writer, and researcher this semester. Before this semester, I didn’t love reading long blogs, articles, or essays. When I read something long, I usually look for a summary of the post or article because I believe that reading the synopsis will help me comprehend the entire piece. But when this semester started, I had a different experience, so when I got my first essay or huge assignment to write in English and started writing without reading or gathering necessary materials, I was having writing problems and didn’t know how to finish it. When I started composing it, I couldn’t think of anything to say. My teachers then underline the importance of reading the entire document before beginning to write on it during the meeting.
Unit 1 Revision: Red Envelopes
On the night before Chinese New Years there is an important tradition to follow just before a parent’s child sleeps. I hear a knock on my door. I opened the door to see my dad with a red envelope out, he said, âTake it and put it under your pillow before you sleep, gives good luck.â This was a tradition that always happened just the night before Chinese New Years, my siblings and I would receive a red envelope to put under our pillow before we slept, the red envelope would contain money-but the importance of it was the essence. I got interested one day about why we would receive a red envelope to put under our beds before Chinese New Years even begun, after some research I found out that there was an old Chinese legend about a Chinese demon that would come after sleeping children on New Year’s eve, the money you get before you slept, would suppress the ghost/demon off if he came after you. Which relates to giving red envelopes, because giving red envelopes became a way to keep children safe as well as bringing good luck.
The thing about Chinese New Years and red envelopes, is that you have to say the phrase, “Gong Hey Fat Choy” when receiving a red envelope on Chinese New Years, it is because of manners and respect. The red envelopes would contain money, varying on who gave it to you, you would get more money if its from your parents/grandparents and they will never give you the amount that ends in 4, due to the number 4 being an unlucky number in Chinese, it is extremely disrespectful to open the red envelope in front of the person who gave it to you. You the child do not have to give out any envelopes. Once you get married is when you start giving out red envelopes on Chinese New Years, which means you can even be 20 and you still will receive red envelopes. Your parents give out to your relatives as well, not just you. They give red envelopes to your cousins that aren’t married and the cousin’s parents do the same.
One thing about Chinese New Years is that there will be a lot of talking. If you were not up by 12 o’ clock in the afternoon, you would be forcefully awaken because of the conversations between families. Usually for me, every Chinese New Years began like this: I would wake up due to the laughter and commotion going around in the living room. The first thing I did after getting ready in the bathroom was head towards the living room, where all the activity was happening. As soon as I stepped out, I say, âGong Hey Fat Choy!â To my older relatives and family members. They shout back, âGong Hey Fat Choy!â They got up from their seats and all headed towards me with red envelopes. Each of them gave me 1-2 red envelopes that contained money. However, the most important part is the phrase âGong Hey Fat Choy!â Which is a Chinese greeting which means, âHappy New Year!â If you do not say this greeting and instead, you say something like, âHello!â You would not get the red envelope, thus this greeting is very important on this day. On some occasions you won’t have to say “Gong Hey Fat Choy” when receiving a red envelope, for example if your cousins come over and you are still sleeping, your parents will hold onto the red envelope for you until you wake up. You would say “Gong Hey Fat Choy” when you see them again, however.
One thing to note about the red envelopes is that only the people who are not married or are under the age 25 get the red envelopes. The process of preparing red envelopes take a long time, as a parent you had to think about how much people you are giving it to, how much money in each one, and who is receiving how much. Some times you could get 2 dollars in a red envelope. This took my parents around 3 days to complete. The amount you get usually correlates to your relationship with the person who is giving you the red envelope. For example if its your parents, you could get around 50 dollars, if it’s your cousins you would usually get around 5.
As night approached, my family and I were getting ready to have dinner at our Grandfatherâs house for Chinese New Year. I help out my dad with loading the food in the car trunk while the others get ready to leave. Soon enough, we entered the car and my mom carries the most important thing on her, more important than the food-the red envelopes. We arrive at my Grandfatherâs house and ring the door bell. The door opens, we see our relative on the other side and we all say, âGong Hey Fat choy!â They let us in and we arrive into the living room, as soon as I step into the living room I see a crowd of people, either sitting down or huddled around the dinner table looking at all the delicious varieties of food. My family and I shout, âGong Hey Fat Choy!â The crowd turns around to us and then shouts, âGong Hey Fat Choy!â As they all approach us. My mother who is carrying the red envelopes, makes her way towards the other young relatives to hand out her red envelopes. While my father and I set the food down onto the dinner table and my mother gives out red envelopes on our familyâs behalf, my siblings and me get approached by our aunts and uncles, they stick out their hand to give us red envelopes, we then say, âGong Hey Fat Choy!â And also, âthank you!â To each of them for the red envelopes.
The reason why Chinese New Years is so important to us is because the older Asian generation loves being around family, family is number one. In America the only Asian holiday we can celebrate is Chinese New Years, which is why we take Chinese New Years to the next level with our traditions and our feasting. In China, Asians usually wouldn’t celebrate holidays like Christmas, however because we are in America, our family and our relatives celebrate almost every holiday. We use these holidays as an excuse to come together, talk, eat together, and have fun.
Unit 2 Revision: Video Games and Benefits
You come out of your room for dinner after spending a few hours playing games with your friends, you sit down at the dinner table and your mom starts to lecture you about how bad video games are for you and your health. You then start to think about what are the positives and negatives for video games? After dinner you go back to your room and search up, âImpact of video games.â As you read the article, you realize that there are multiple benefits of playing online video games. From motor skills, cognitive skills, social skills, and many more. However, you noticed that some of the video game benefits have one thing in common, social skills. Video games are a great way to improve your social skills. A child growing up playing video games has a likely chance to grow into a built-in leader.
Unlike what most parents think, researchers have found that online video games can lead to beneficial effects. In “Gaming’s Growing Population. Insider Intelligence,” by Sara Lebow she says that playing online video games can improve; manual dexterity, brain’s gray matter, social skills, and many more. This shows that online video games are helpful to people because of the impacts like developing/improving intelligence and perception-we can mainly see that playing online video games develop the brain. Which is important to know because, “gamers make up more than a third of the world’s population, in 2022 there is approximately 2.96 billion people around the world that plays games” (Lebow 2022).
I interviewed two of my friends that played video games for several years. I asked them both the same questions and theyâre both the same age. Friend A, played video games for 7 years, and when I asked him how his social skills were before playing video games versus how he currently is, he stated. âWhen I was a kid, I was extremely shy, I would have social anxiety when talking to anyone besides the people I know. Compared to now, I am less shy and now Iâm more confident when talking to people that I donât know.â I then asked him, âDo you think this is due to aging or do you think video games have an impact on this?â Friend A responded with, â I think video games has helped me develop social skills throughout the years I have been playing, not too sure if aging had anything to do with my social skills. This is because online video games require team work and communication, communication is key in completing/winning video games which is why I think video games helped develop my social skills, I also felt like video games helped me get out of my comfort zone to speak a lot more.â In essence, my friend do believes that video games develop oneâs social skills, he believes that online video games helped him with his social anxiety, pushing him out of his comfort zone to communicate with people he doesnât know, making it feel more natural for him.
Friend B has played video games for nearly 10 years. I asked him, â How are your social skills now compared to your social skills when you were a kid?â Friend B, responded with, âItâs hard to remember how I was since itâs been 10 years, but I would say that my social skills are definitely better now, it might not be because of video games though.â I then responded with, âthat brings us to the next question, âdo you think this is because of aging, or do you think this is because of video games?â Friend B replied with, â I would say both helped for sure. I felt like online video games developed my leadership skills and my response time. I felt like online video games helped me in maturing as well. When playing online video games you can meet a whole diverse of people, some of them are chill people that play video games for fun, the other side is a bunch of competitive people that will curse you out when you make a mistake and say crazy things, which makes me say that video games made me tolerable.â Friend B explains that online video games has helped developed his social skills, he believes that it developed his leadership skills and made him more mature and tolerable.
According to the article, âVideo games may improve childrenâs intellectual and social skills, study findsâ written by Doug Bolton, researchers at Columbia Universityâs Mailman School of Public Health in New York, conducted an experiment with thousands of children around the globe. They found out that, âthe team found that high video game usage was associated with a 1.75 times increase in the odds of high intellectual functioning.â They also found, âChildren who played a lot of video games were also found to be 1.88 times more likely to have âhigh overall school competenceâ (Bolton 2016). This quote states that video games improve your intellectual functioning as well as your school competence by more than 1.5x for both.
In the article, âIs time spent playing video games associated with mental health, cognitive and social skills in young children? â Published by Springer-Verlag Berlin Heidelberg 2016, they have shown a table that tells the audience that kids have a higher score in intellectual functioning as well as in school competence (Table 2). Unadjusted means that factors like their gender and psychological distress arenât account for, while adjusted means all the factors are. In the graph we can see that children playing games for more than 5 hours have greater numbers in both unadjusted and adjusted, which correlates to my main topic of video games being beneficial.
This table comes from a survey, âSCHME (the School Children Mental Health in Europe)â, it is a survey of European children from ages 6-11 in 2010. Data was collected in Germany, the Netherlands, Lithuania, Romania, Bulgaria, and Turkey for this study. They surveyed about 45-50 schools across the country, randomly picked schools, they also randomly picked approximately 48 children from each school. This data table consists of approximately 3000 young children across European countries, which backs up the fact that, âhigh video game usage was associated with higher intellectual functioning, increased academic achievement, and a lower prevalence of mental health difficultiesâ (Springer 2016)
The article also talks about a Japanese study of kindergarten children, in which they discovered that children who played video games had more friends and were more inclined to socialize. About 426 children were asked to complete a self questionnaire to determine this information. One interesting thing about this Japanese study is that on the text it states, âIt is noteworthy that one of the boys with the lowest social counts was reported to play the TV game nearly everyday for two hours.â (Shimai and Masuda 1990). I found this quote to be very interesting because it correlates to the evidence about kids with 5+ hours of gaming usage having a higher score in intellectual functioning and in school competence more than the kids that have 1-5 hours of gaming usage. This is because this quote further proves that online video games can be beneficial to oneâs self.
Ultimately, with all this information I have gathered, we can safely say that online video games are beneficial to humans. If you are a gamer with parents that lecture you about games, tell them that you play video games because you are improving your mind and getting smarter! If they don’t believe you, show them this text! Prove them wrong and they’ll leave you alone about this topic.
References:
Lebow, Sara. âGaming’s Growing Population.â Insider Intelligence, Insider Intelligence, 19 Oct. 2021,
https://www.emarketer.com/content/gamers-make-up-more-than-one-third-of-world-population.
Kovess-Masfety, Viviane, et al. âIs Time Spent Playing Video Games Associated with Mental Health, Cognitive and Social Skills in Young Children?â Social Psychiatry & Psychiatric Epidemiology, vol. 51, no. 3, Mar. 2016, pp. 349â57.
Bolton, Doug. âVideo Games May Actually Have Positive Effects on Young Children, Study Finds.â The Independent, Independent Digital News and Media, 9 Mar. 2016, https://www.independent.co.uk/games/video-games-children-learning-intelligence-social-skills-study-a6920961.html.
Shimai S, Masuda K, Kishimoto Y (1990) Influences of TV games on physical and psychological development of Japanese kindergarten children. Percept Mot Skills 70(3 Pt 1):771â776
Final Reflection
If you had to compare your current self and your older self-just a few months apart, would you be able to tell any differences? What about if it was a skill you were already experienced on? Do you feel like you changed noticeably? If I had to think back about my writing in the past and compare it to the most recent writings I wrote I would say that not much has changed. However, when I put my two pieces of writing together, one from the start of the semester and one from this current month, I would be able to point out the differences. I believe that I have gotten better due to techniques like the quote sandwich and while attending this class I learned how to structure my writing better. If I had to compare and contrast my unit 1 and unit 3 work, I would say that there’s not much of a difference. However, if there was another unit, I think that it would be different due to the knowledge I have gained throughout this semester. I also think that the video comments Professor Carrie Hall made for us really helped us learn and get better because the comments were very helpful and informative, it pointed out our mistakes and how to make our writing better.
One of my favorite assignments is the unit 3 project assignment. I really enjoyed making this presentation compared to the rest of the assignments because making the presentation was entertaining and it introduced me to a website known as “Canva” which made making presentations easier and fun, if I had known of this website before, I would have definitely used it in the past. Making this project has also opened my mind towards different perspectives and different age groups. When I made the rough draft of the presentation, Professor Carrie Hall has pointed out that my presentation isn’t fourth grade friendly despite fourth grader’s being my audience. When she pointed that out, I looked back at my project and realized how much she was right. Thus making this assignment my favorite because I think I learned a lot as well as had fun. When I first started this project, I thought to myself that I should make an infographic, for it provides information needed as well as a bit of pictures to keep you enticed. However, I was wrong after reflecting back at it now. That’s why if I had to redo an assignment this would be the one I would redo. My design for this project was an infographic, fourth graders don’t really get appealed to this, so I would change up my content and design to be a comic book that follows a story with kid friendly language to help them understand the content. Another of my favorite things during this semester is the online writing. I find it a lot easier to write online than to write in person so switching to online really helped in terms of speed and less work.
My early beliefs and assumption’s about myself and my writing, is that I believed that I was a decent writer. I felt like I had a creative mind and my grammar was good. Not much has changed. While I still think I’m a decent writer, I realized that I didn’t have much technique. One of the noticeable things I can point out about my writing from early on this semester, is that when I quote something, I usually explain it a little bit and leave it at that. However, I learned that the quote sandwich technique, were I introduce the quote, quote it, and then explain it. I used to barely explain my quotes and rarely analyzed it, an example of this would be on my unit 2 project, “Video Games and Benefits”, I quoted, “They also found, âChildren who played a lot of video games were also found to be 1.88 times more likely to have âhigh overall school competenceâ (Bolton 2016). This quote states that video games improve your intellectual functioning as well as your school competence by more than 1.5x for both.” While this was just a month ago, I noticed that my explanation is extremely short and there’s not much analysis. While Professor Carrie Hall told us that the explanation and analysis should be longer than the quote its self, this did not happen during my unit 2 project. Which is why I would say that the quote sandwich technique is a really nice technique to know and I believe that it will transfer over after this semester ends. An example of this would be during my Unit 2 essay I said, ” ‘researchers have found that online video games can lead to beneficial effects such as; “manual dexterity, brain’s gray matter, social skills, and many more.’ This quote had nothing but the quote, there was no analysis. However, my revision included the explanation and analysis, ” ‘In “Gaming’s Growing Population. Insider Intelligence,’ by Sara Lebow she says that playing online video games can improve; manual dexterity, brain’s gray matter, social skills, and many more. This shows that online video games are helpful to people because of the impacts like developing/improving intelligence and perception-we can mainly see that playing online video games develop the brain.” If you were to compare these two quotes you can see that the latter quote is more developed than the other quote. Another technique I learned from Professor Carrie Hall is topic sentences. I subconsciously use topic sentences, but I think that topic sentences are great for transitioning paragraphs. An example when I used this was on my unit 1 revision. I said, “The reason why Chinese New Years is so important to us is because the older Asian generation loves being around family, family is number one.” This topic sentence set me up for my conclusion as I talked about the main point of my essay.
Ultimately, this semester was really informative and fun. I learned multiple techniques and even a website that will be helpful in the future. During this semester I learned a decent amount about myself as a writer. Techniques learned from this semester will carry on with me as a writer and I will be sure to use them as they improve my writing.
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